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A M Shark


The Shark is a mild fan of MLP who is writing an MLP version of a story she didn't like to see if she can do it "better" and wishes to share the results for critiques.

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WARNING: Some comments may contain spoilers.

Ten years ago Applejack disappeared without a trace. Now Fluttershy must find out why, but will that be possible when she's thrown together with a pierced, tattooed, reality-bending draconequus who's just recently escaped being trapped in stone?

AU Fluttercord set 10 years after the first three seasons (minus the Discord episodes.) Inspired by Fluttershy and Discord's relationship both in the show and in several fanfics (*cough* Bride of Discord *cough*), and based loosely (extremely loosely) on the plot from the Stieg Larsson novel "The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo." Contains some Murder Mystery elements so is rated T just to be safe.

Constructive Criticism is welcome.

See Nightwalker's thoughts on the story.

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Chapters (20)
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Comments ( 235 )

Read this on fanfiction.net, really enjoyed it there. I know the only reason you gave Discord the tattoos was for the sake of the title but I actually think they really work for this version of the character. I also think the setup you had for a villainous Discord to reform because of Fluttershy is like 300% cooler than what the series actually did (which will leave people who are just reading it here puzzled for a while because you haven't posted that part yet but bwahahaha I've read ahead).

Yes, yes, it's on Fimfiction! Of course, I've read it on Fanfiction.net and am more looking forward to the ending, but it's nice to see it here. People may be thrown off by Discord having tattoos and piercings, but I think you made them fit well into the story despite not having much of a reason for them to be there in the first place.

I've been reading this on Fanfiction and I enjoy it. I really want to find out what happens in the end, so please finish soon.

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Glad to hear you're enjoying it and don't worry. While I'm uploading the finished chapters up here I'm also at work on the next fanfiction chapter and will update as soon as I can.

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Glad to hear you're looking forward to the end. I might be uploading my finished chapters here but I'm also working on the next unpublished chapter and hope to have it ready sometime in the next week or two. And thanks for commenting on my additions to Discord's appearance. I've been wondering what people thought of those so I'm glad to hear you feel they fit with the story even if they're not really essential to the plot.

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Wow. That's a lot of %. I'm honored to hear you think that and that you're enjoying the story so far. Also glad to hear you feel the whole tattoo thing works for Discord here. That's one thing I've been wondering about quite a bit since like you said I just gave him the tattoos to make the title work. (Though I have had a lot more fun with them than I expected to.)

This gave me a good excuse to rewatch the original movie. I am looking forward to seeing where this goes (and, well, reading ahead on fanfiction).

The fun part about crossover fiction like this is trying to guess who gets reassigned what role. I do look forward to seeing who winds up being Martin, naturally, and hope that you manage to put an interesting twist on it. And of course what kind of sordid past you come up with for the Apples and the Oranges.

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Glad to hear your looking forward to seeing where this goes. Though I should probably let you know I took a lot of liberties storywise (translation I cut a bunch of the R-rated stuff out of the story.) Still, after you've read ahead on fanfiction or I've finished up loading the rest of these chapters, please let me know what you think about how my "remake" holds up against the original book and/or movie.

I love it! I didn't read the book but had heard things and was afraid it would have content I'd be unable to handle, but seeing it's not being written like that allowed me to give it a try and I'm glad I did. This is written really well and you have Discord and Fluttershy down pat, in my opinion. And not one single mention of cotton candy clouds and raining chocolate milk--thank goodness! The winter ghostly ponies and this and last chapter was so intriguing. I look forward to more!

5705232 Thank you. As it turns out, I'm actually not a fan of the original book myself. I thought it had some interesting ideas here and there but there was a lot of raunchy junk you had to pick through to get to them. But for some odd reason the relationship between the two main characters made me think of Fluttershy and Discord. So I thought it might be an interesting challenge to see if I could take a story I didn't like, trim out the r-rated bits and strip the plot down to its bare bones, recast it with different characters, and change it into a story I (and hopefully other Fluttercord fans) would like.

And regarding the cotton candy clouds raining chocolate milk: Oh, thank goodness I am not the only one. I swear if I have to see that cliché in one more story I will scream.

But that aside, glad to hear you're enjoying the story.

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And regarding the cotton candy clouds raining chocolate milk: Oh, thank goodness I am not the only one. I swear if I have to see that cliché in one more story I will scream.

I can assure you with 100% certainty that there are many of us that wish to take down this overused, tired cliché. And one day, we will rise up and deal with this insult to Discord's imagination and originality. :rainbowdetermined2:

Oh my gosh! I'm just loving this! And your writing is very good! I can't wait for the next chapter!:heart:

I loved Discord throughout this whole thing. From his slow deliberation over what to do for Fluttershy, to his pained reluctance to cover her up with his own body...His thought process was strikingly in-character, more so than in most fics. You can see both sides of him self fighting each other, only for the good in him to triumph at the moment--just as Fluttershy had hoped. And there was one thing I you wrote that was worded in a way I could never figure out myself. This:

Sure, he did like when things didn’t make sense, but on his terms.

That's it! He loves chaos and invading everyone's personal space and chaotic things, but on his terms. Gosh, I can never think on how to explain that, but that's it! Favorite chapter so far!

5708739 Thanks for the comment. Glad to hear you felt Discord was in-character cause that's one thing I was a bit worried about when I started this story. (*chuckles* In my mind Out-of-characterness is the Ultimate Fanfic Writer's Sin.)
*chuckles again* Yes, the good in him ultimately triumphed but not without him fighting it every step of the way.
Also glad you liked that bit about him liking things on his terms.

I like how the story goes and love the fluttercord :yay:

YES! New chapter and it was awesome!! Absolutely loved it and I just can't wait for the next chapter! This is very interesting!

My gosh I love this! It works so well when it seems it shouldn't!

Also now very tempted to draw a pierced tattooed draconequus! :rainbowlaugh:

Also, I hope you don't mind, but I just had to:

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Awwww!! I love how Angel has calmed down over the years. And I'm glad you could keep Discord in character! (Which is not easy)

5717699 Ha, ha, oh my goodness, that's awesome! Thanks for the art, thanks for the comment, thanks for the fave, and thanks for the blog post.

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Glad you like! Look forward to reading more!

I hope Applejack's alright! ... and you know not dead (or exploded twice or something) :fluttershyouch:

Murdered?? But... maybe it's Applejack sending those bottles! She could still be alive.... maybe (probably not):ajsleepy:. Maybe something happened so she couldn't show her face...?

Waaaa!!.... finally romance :yay:

Discord has not been confirmed immortal or mortal, really. It just hasn't been mentioned at all, so people just have headcanons of it which, as you stated, don't count as a true source.

Yay!! Another chapter!! And it was awesome as always!! And yes! The romance is slowly coming in!!:heart:I just love this!:heart:can't wait for another chapter!!

5741001 Ha ha, I'll see if I can oblige.

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I couldn't wait and cheated by going to fanfiction.net.

*innocent look*

5741356 That's fine. Just let me know what you think of it so far.

Oh, and just so you know, I'm altering things a bit in chapters 8 and 10. I plan to go back and edit those chapters on fanfiction once I get them all posted here.

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Enjoying it very much so far. I like the slow burn between the two characters.

It will be interesting to see if you keep the ending to the book the same and what that means for Fluttershy and Discord.

5741529 Well, you'll just have to wait and see. Mwahahahaha!

Finally got to this. The new parts work well and do serve to remind the reader that there's still those outside the farm.

I look forward to the next part, as always.

Daaawwww......Fluttershy gave Discord his first present. Thats so sweet!:heart:
This was a very good chapter, just like the last one you put out. And again, can't wait to know what happens next:pinkiehappy:

So beautiful I am so happy with tears of joy in my eyes :raritydespair: there weren't any tears of joy faces so I just put raritydespair

THIS IS AMAZING! have some mustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

You update so fast!!! How do you do that??? It's so awesome! I just don't understand, because I always take forever!
I'm always excited to see your updates. You write so well. I just love all this tension you have everywhere, with both the case and the chemistry between the two friends of Discord and Fluttershy. You show it so well in this story. I can just feel the endorphins everywhere! Is that weird to say? Yeah, probably.
You just write so well, and I am so, so glad that I gave this story a glance despite my initial trepidations. (Did I use that word right?) (Okay, I checked the dictionary, I used it right, good. You deserve good vocabulary in your reviews.) It's just been so rewarding. And you have so many parallels between the show and this story, and yet it's still completely different and your own. At least, that's how I see it. I love reading about how Discord feels. This one was especially touching, what with the scarf and Discord's surprise at the gift.
Great job, my friend, bravo! I will wait as long as you need, though I do it in anticipation!

I did not expect that…
But still a great chapter!

You didn't describe all the grisly details of what happens at the end. No gore tag needed IMO.

I'm sorry I take forever to review! I read it in-between classes or something and then I forget, which isn't fair!
I loved this chapter. I like how Discord gets Fluttershy to figure things out herself instead of telling her for her. That's very in character for him! The part with Angel Bunny tore at my heart--you made him quite lovable in this fic--and her reaction and Discord's comforting her is so, so sweet. Oh, and I can't forget about the ending! Oh, that was awesome! I love writing and reading stuff like that--where the two get mangled up or some other embarrassing situation and have to fight through it, only to laugh in the end. I did something like that myself in my own fic! Aren't they fun???
Also...gosh, Discord's little 'joke'--"I love you, marry me." I can see this totally happening, and I love these little hints you're throwing. The pacing is great--it's slow enough to be natural, but hinting enough that we know that something will happen and getting us pumped up. I am sooooo excited for that!
Awesome, great job, as always!

Oh my gosh wow! This is getting scary........I love it!!........poor Angel......

And then they kissed~

Wait, we're not at that part yet? Aw...

I'll admit that I REALLY and truly don't like The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo or the other books, but this story stood out to me and I couldn't resist it's temptation! So...here I am... *goes back to reading*

In my canon, the goddesses (Tia and Luna) and god-like entities (Tirek and Discord, possibly Scorpan) are immortal. Cadance and Twilight, having been born normal ponies, aren't immortal. And the Sirens had eternal youth until they lost their powers, so my theory is that they will start to age in the human world.

Such a good chapter... :D

5761205 As it turns out, I don't really like "The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo (tGwtDT)" (or the rest of the series) either. But then this crossover idea popped into my head and just wouldn't go away. So here I am writing it down and sharing it to get it out of my system. And to put you at ease, I can assure you that this is being written for Fluttercord fans rather than for tGwtDT fans.

Great chapter as always! But that cliffhanger:twilightoops:

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