I write pony words that people seem to like. I also review fics and draw purty pictures, apperently. I'm an older fan of MLP, so expect a lot of 80's references.
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Based off this sketch I drew at work and the resulting skype conversation.
Princess Celestia invites Twilight Sparkle to join her on the roof for sunbathing. The two share a tender moment together building a greater friendship together and moving towards more...
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Very cute, I loved it.
Why, specifically, this is added to 'dark' category?
On a side note, nice story. Could use a bit more exposure, Likes at ~150-10 would be more appropriate.
5682421 Coal (KoL) has an odd sense of humor?
Edit: Sorry KoC has an odd sense of humor. No..I'm not spelling that out phonetically.
Praising the Sun by Windy Mane. Considered the definitive guide on courting the Princess.
Sun Spots by Sunset Shimmer. Banned for lewd content.
Its called Gainaxing Twilight, or Jiggle physics if you wish to be crass. See also Yang from RWBY
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Glad you like it! I think it came out pretty well for a wild idea in the middle of the night and being written over the course of two and half days.
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Twilight would later go on to be the youngest graduating with Masters in Jiggle Physics the Academy ever produced. She also would go on to write the unofficial sequel to Sun Spots; The Sun's Favorite Spots.
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Yeah, this was pretty good for just two days of work.
Hey, you should make a series of short one shots like this, involving Celestia and Twilight. In fact, you could- wait...
5682906 lol I'm glad you enjoyed my little joke. I enjoyed your story.
5682421 5682471 Missclick. I tried to add it to the group shipping folder on my cellphone. Never again.
5683519 I prefer my explination
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Not even once.
Thank you so much for not spelling out Twilight's realization to the reader!!! it felt so much more genuine that way, and felt so much more natural. So many authors painfully state that one character suddenly realizes another likes them, and it gets so predictable and annoying, and just when i thought you were about to do the same, you leave us with a quiet "oh"- just like it would be in the real world, and i appreciated that greatly!
Amazing job!
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Glad you like it!
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You're welcome! Thank you for the vindication that I made the right choice with the direction of this fic. There were several instances where I felt I could go for the low hanging fruit of a joke or overly cheesiness, but I did my best to avoid them and tried to make Twilight and Celestia's interaction feel natural and organic.
Amazingly cute and quite fitting for a pre-Ponyville Twilight Sparkle. As usual, I enjoy the idea of Celly having realistic issues with getting close to others as well and the idea of them sunbathing is nice. I especially like the "I could dim the sun" idea.
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I wanted to sort of hint at Celestia's mild desperation to get close to someone. That she'd jokingly consider global ecological devastation if doing so would make Twilight more comfortable, if just for a short while.
Very sweet, but wold like to see what happens next.
Another hit, Fuzzmaster General
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Thank you! Sometimes random thoughts spit out sweet little scenes like this.
Conjures up mental image. Promptly faints.
That must've been, uh, quite a conversation.
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It produced many many chuckles. Most importantly, was the suggestion about that Celestia's meaning for 'praising the sun' meant nude sunbathing/tanning. Which them lead into a long convo about whether Celestia even could tan. I twisted it around and used several bits of it in the fic. I wanted it to be cuter than the skype chat was making it out to be and this was the result.
Interestingly enough, I went on to add Luna and Cadance to that same sketch. I still thing Celestia came out the best.
this was well done and gave me a nice fuzzy feeling, not surprising coming from you, from what iv seen your really good at making emotions
you are now the emotion weaver
all hail furvert, emotion weaver supreme
-Exaxxion
"I. Twilight Sparkle. Am. Seeing. The Princess’ butt. " Best line ever. XD
Omg more human twilight x celestia stories! This was hilarious yet awsome and fuzzy happy story.
I love how the charcter where protraid! taking the time with there emotions. i love reading story like this that dont rush out love to fast.
Love to see a S1 human luna story x celestia if possible in the future
I really like this story. Celestias mental balancing act was so, human? Like, it made her more 3d as a character.
I probably already said all this in the Tuna chat, but I adore this story. Best balance of ever-so-slightly desperate Celestia (a personal favorite of mine) and nerves and not-rushing-it ever. If you ever do add to it, I'm pre-hooked, just so you know.
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I'd be lying if I said I didn't want to do a sequel. I rather liked how this turned out. I've got a basic outline for a potential follow-up that features Luna too, but I'm so busy with other projects, I don't know when I'd have the time to work on it.
But hey, things change all the time, so who knows? Maybe the Muse will come slap me with the Halibut of Inspiration and I'll spit it out on some random weekend.
Always interesting to see a familiar writer when browsing random stories after I've read said story and enjoying it. Tend to judge a story in isolation regardless of writer so only ever bother checking after I read and rate it.
This story did the 'normal person/pony' trope for Celestia very well, not overdoing it but at the same time exploring it thoroughly. That indicates a very clear and thorough understanding of the character or at the least a similar understanding to my own of the character. The very last bit surprised me (as it would Twi) but it.. fit interestingly enough. I think it fit so well because Celestia kept thinking about how she usually went too fast and too far but none of what she did has been particularly forward until she does this and then the rest of the story makes sense. She also only does this after getting positive feedback from Twilight so nothing out of the blue/out of place technically, just surprising. Celestia takes a chance but it's not a complete rip you out of the story and out of character/situation kind of thing and I always appreciate well crafted events like that. The story was very enjoyable and thank you for writing it.
As a side note I think that once Celestia knows that Twilight does like her a bit more of the experience/maturity can start seeping in. She is at least a thousand + years old and it always feels like a stretch in stories where she's as bashfull/inexperienced as Twilight except if it's done for comedy. That could perhaps be the subject of a sequel if you do write one, with the nervousness giving way in Celestia and of course growth from Twi as well. It's always about the character development and growth. No point in writing or reading a good story if the characters are the same at the end than they were at the start but you probably already know that :P
I just had to point this out:
Not sure if this was intended or not, but willing to dim the sun for Twilight, when all the enemies of old couldn't? That's devotion.
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Celestia is willing to risk it for love. I've always kind of enjoyed the 'warrior princess' trope with Celestia, so I played that up here. She fought to make and keep the peace that Twilight was born into, but it's made her life lonely. So lonely, that she's willing to look weak and flawed to the person that worships the ground she walks on. She's willing to do whatever it takes to show Twilight that her feelings are real.
But it's a real weakness for Celestia, she is always running at 110%. She has trouble holding back when she becomes invested in something or someone. It's cost her love before, so she's gun shy, but she's still going to think in a way that lends itself to overkill.
Now...I don't think she'd endanger the world just to impress the girl she likes...at least not permanently...
7708302 SSSUUUUURRRREEEE she won't destroy the world. She's not an evil dictator or anything. He...hehehehe...HAHAHAHAHAHAHA
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No evil Celestia emotes. Damn.
I've always been into the 'too afraid to show her who I am.' thing.
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Tyrant Celestia and former warrior princess Celestia are two very different tropes. This Celestia is sort of a superpowered...dork...when it comes to matters of the heart. She's all about that appearing serene and in charge thing, or beating down some uppity chaos spirit. But when she gets within ten yards of a certain little bookworm...she just loses all her spaghetti.
7709111 Yeah, I was just making a joke. And pointing out the fact that this site needs a few more stickers. (specifically, Luna ones. So underappreciated.)
I didn't get a dorky feel from Celestia, to be honest. I got a more desperate one, a need for companionship. But there was also staring at bodies, and stripping, but NO fun sexy times, and I was trying to keep mental...images...out of my head, and failing, so I probably got lost in between the descriptions of Celestia's body.
ALL the spaghetti? No no!Looks like what I do when she looks my way and I don’t want her to know I was thinking about her...oh. Oh.
Me: XD
This was beautiful and natural. Well done.
Cute fic, slur felt very out of place and took me out of the scene.
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Two slurs, actually. 2015 be like that, I guess.