Wayward Armor

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(Set directly after A Canterlot Wedding. Keep this in mind.)
After his wedding, Shining Armor was left...different. He now has a massive phobia of the creatures that captured him- the changelings. He's much more distant, staying to himself and sleeping alone while he recuperates from the injuries he received at the hooves of Chrysalis.
But, Shining slowly starts to notice that something much more threatening is wrong...and there's nothing he can do to stop it.
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Chapters (3)

Chapter 1- Remembrance · 26th Feb 2015 · 1,410 words
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Chapter 2- Adjustment · 28th Feb 2015 · 1,653 words
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Chapter 3- Scars · 4th Mar 2015 · 1,531 words
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JakeAndDollars

JakeAndDollars #1 · Mar 10th, 2015 · 1 · · Chapter 3- Scars ·

Shining sighed, blowing his mane out of his eyes. He didn't get why anyone would go out to places unknown, possibly risking their own life, just for the sake of having a change in scenery. Those ponies can do whatever they want, Shining Armor reasoned, but I'm happy with my daily routine.

I thought this was a bit of a contradiction, being in the military one should expect to travel often and risk their lives. But being in a comfortable position as the Captain of the Guard, I can see him getting a little soft.

"Anything unusual?" Shining asked nervously, as she had been silent throughout the process, besides giving simple orders.
"Just a bit of weight gain, but it seems to be natural. You just haven't been that active lately, that's all." she murmured, turning around.

When I broke both my legs I lost over ten pounds due to inactivity, I appreciate the attention to detail here.

Flash Sentry's eyes suddenly got big, and a tremor traveled from the tips of his ears to his wings. "Hey, I got an idea!" the young stallion said cheerfully, pushing on Shining Armor's shoulder for emphasis. "How about you come with me tomorrow for the morning exercises?"

A bit casual for speaking to a commanding officer, but this is the ponyverse so some differences could be excused.

Shining Armor woke the next morning with a sense of excitement. Pulling himself out of bed, he carefully limped into his private bathroom and started preparing a bath. He let the hot water run into the tub, placing a towel on the floor beside it. Once he had a reasonable amount of water drawn, he climbed in and washed himself off.

Probably could have included something about changing his bandages, but I guess it's implied.

Cadence wrapped a hoof around him, kissing him on the cheek. "You look great! Are you ready for breakfast."

Missed a question mark there, little detail, I know.

"He hasn't been feeling well lately. I guess he needed to lay back down." she smiled uncomfortably. "But we can keep talking, of course! So, how is life in Saddle Arabia? I'm very curious!" the Princess said with false enthusiasm.

I honestly pictured Cadence in my head saying this! I feel like she could do a good job selling fake enthusiasm!

Overall I really like this story so far and see some good potential! Keep up the good work!

-Jake

PS. Just realized how massive this comment is, sorry!

Sketchwrites

Sketchwrites #2 · Mar 11th, 2015 · · · Chapter 3- Scars ·

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Thanks! Oh, and I'll edit that little error, I guess I looked over that XD

Sketchwrites

Sketchwrites #3 · Mar 17th, 2015 · · · Chapter 3- Scars ·

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Ah, yes. I was aware of people like that. But, it seems to be fairing well right now. I tried to make Flash a likable character-plus, this ain't Brad from EQ.

Ithrex