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  • TMemoir of Misery
    With her memories returning, Sapphire has to endure the mystery of why she is receiving visions of monsters that Equestria never seen before, as she continues to try to make a new life for herself while searching for her old one.
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A unicorn mare wakes up in Ponyville, with all her memories gone into a haze that prevents her from recalling them beyond her own name after suffering an injury. Now, with nothing from her past to rely on, she must start a brand new life in Ponyville as her life starts all over. However, while she is gaining new memories to cherish, will she ever remember the memories she lost, the past life that she once lived?


Art by AlicornParty on deviantart : http://alicornparty.deviantart.com/
Editor: AandWguy

Chapters (27)
Comments ( 371 )

This was a nice chapter, especially with the Mane 6's reaction to a pony without memories!:rainbowlaugh:

"What's a book?"

I so knew this was coming after the first question. Have a like, just for this hilarious question itself! :rainbowlaugh:

I better keep on reading. I would like to see what happens next. :pinkiesmile:

Love the food obsession of Sapphire. A obsession is always a good character trait. :pinkiesmile:

I just hoped, that she would lose control over herself at breakfast and eat like she is used to do it, but I guess i just misjudged her self-control there.

There was only one thing, that I found strange. Twilight was reading a book at breakfast and Sapphire didn't even question what she was holding there. Maybe she was too distracted from the food, but she probably would have asked then on the way to the library. :unsuresweetie:

Just wondering about the reading abilities of Sapphier now. So Twilight teached her the alphabet in only a day? I would have expected it to take longer to remember all the different letters. Other than that I enjoyed the chapters up until now. :pinkiesmile:

5720535 While it may seem odd for someone, or somepony in this case, to learn the alphabet so fast, bare in mind that we normally learn the alphabet at a young age, while Sapphire is already an adult and thus would have an easier time to learn it. One day should be enough for an adult to learn the alphabet through enough repetition, depending on the person's, or pony's, mental capabilities. Also, no, I'm not saying Sapphire is a genius, odds are, in my opinion, most adults can learn a basic alphabet in a day's time if they use enough repetition and really focus on their studying.

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I understand. Good that you took the time to explain it to me. Thanks for that. Now back to the usual commentary.

Celestia was a real prick this time. I rooted for Sapphire and it's too bad she broke down. I would have liked to see her kick Celestias flank! At least with words. :pinkiesmile:

Personally I didn't think that a explanation, why Sapphire got angry was necessary, because I found it obvious after Celestias insulting words. But that's just my opinion. :twilightsmile:

Cliffhanger! Now I'm curious. :pinkiesmile:

Seems like Angel being a prick has an effect on the story, but can't say, that I like that bunny. He should really care more for the wounded. On the other side, stories sometimes need characters like that.

Seems like I misinterpreted the last ending. I thought were would be some big revelation, but a tantrum is not bad either. :pinkiesmile:

Can't wait to see the food scene.

I just noticed one thing. I think that you sometimes use not enough paragraphs. That causes the text to be a big block, that is not that good to read. Just thought I'd mention it. :twilightsmile:

Rarity needs to calm down. Sapphire likes to eat, that's all there is to it Rarity!

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I totally agree.

Ok, I only agree, because I want to see her eating like she normally does, because of the reactions of the other ponies. :rainbowlaugh: But Rarity would most certainly react like that anyway, so I hope, that Sapphire is alone near food in the future chapters.

I just wanted to say something else about this chapter, considering this.

"Why sucks, that's mighty kind of ya to say, but I would like it if ya just call me Applejack."

You probably meant shucks. You make sometimes small mistakes like that. Maybe you should read it over or let someone else read it over, but like I said, that are just some minor mistakes. Nothing serious.

I'm already excited for the next chapter. :twilightsmile:

P.S. Love the cover art, even if Sapphire is not that lithe on it. :pinkiesmile:

5761520 Edited, and thanks for point that out, but I really don't have anyone to read it over for me :twilightblush:

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If that is so I could hold an eye open to watch for some smaller mistakes, if you like. English is not my mother tongue, but I can still see the most obvious mistakes, if that helps. Better start right away, since I noticed two more things in that chapter.

Consumed with the thought of eating an apple pie, Sapphire was mindlessly charging towards the front down of the farm house...

You probably meant door.

Taking in view of the sheer number of trees around her, Sapphire grimaces as she admits, "Alright, alright, you got me there Rarity, I promised that before I go to visit Applejack, that I will do all I can to stay in control."

I think promise should be used here, since she is promising it just now.

5761596 Thanks for spotting those mistakes out too.

Celestia...you're a huge jerk!

"I on the other hoof think that I heard enough ponies commenting on my figure today,"

It should be: "I on the other hoof think that I have heard enough ponies commenting on my figure today,"

Hmm I can see it now, first scene in the next chapter is Twilight's head exploding from that last question. :rainbowlaugh:

Nice start. I'm enjoying the story so far. :pinkiehappy:

I'm guessing English is a second language? You have the perspective and everything down great, but there are some gramitical stumbles here and ther, but nothing too jarring. It could use some editing but is still easy to read. :pinkiehappy:

Good story so far.
I have some ideas of what happened to Sapphire Rain in her past, but I guess I will have to wait and see for sure.

There are a few spelling problems here and there. 'Evergreen' being one of them. It is the 'Everfree' Forest. But in all fairness, spelling autocorrect features doesn't recognize 'Everfree' and substitutes 'Evergreen' instead.

Keep up the great work. Can't wait to see what is revealed about her past.

Nice chapter, while i started to like Alicorn Twilight a while ago, i am happy for every Unicron Twilight i get.

5804360 yeah Celestia was like "I don´t make mistakes, i am alowed to do anything, and if i say the sun is blue, then it is blue understood?"

she could have at least not been mean about it, maybe she did it to make sure nothing ccan harm her little ponys, but that doesn´t mean, that Saphire isn´t allowed to be sad, or a bit angry about it.

why not levitate the hot water onto Angle? I mean it would be possible for her, and i just wonder that she could not think abou that, not that they could not stop her.

5760891 i agree, while she is in Raritys care, she doesn´t have to say how much she can eat, weigh, or anything else.

Nice story so far.

i would like a new chapter, i just saw when the last one was written, so if you feel like it, please write a new one.

unicorn begin to crack her eyes open, as her mouth opens to let out a soft yawn.

I think you meant to say "began to crack her eyes open"

There were a few other little errors, that's just first I noticed that felt off to me. To be fair I've noticed several other authors make tense mistakes as well, I'm assuming you're intending for past tense, but a bit of this chapter (and maybe others as well) seems to be written in present tense.

Evergreen forest,

did you mean Everfree Forest?

caramel coat and a brown coat, wearing a doctor's coat.

I think one of those is supposed to be the doc's mane color. Maybe you should find a proofreader, and maybe an editor. Here's a group that was created to help with proofreading, also you should practice some self-check exercises. One good self-exercise is coming back to read what you have posted, it'll help you spot any possible errors to fix once you find them.

6095097 Truth be told I know this story needs a lot of clean up, but I just didn't get around to cleaning it up after I started Distorted Fate. Once Distorted Fate is over I'll get the chance to clean this story up and get it rolling again, as well as get an editor for it.

I didn't thought that your lack of an education also meant that you didn't know how to read either.

this bad grammar for Twilight, I think you meant to say "I didn't think your lack of an education" or "I hadn't thought for thought your lack of an education"

I enjoy this story, and your other as well, but both are littered a large amount of grammatical errors. I recommend you take some time to fix the errors before posting any new chapters, and look into having someone do a little proofreading of your work. Like I said I do enjoy it, but every story people write is subject to errors, it's an inevitability. That said stories present a test of what I like to call the "error threshold", which is basically the number of errors a reader is willing to tolerate before said errors cause them to disconnect their interest in what they are reading, there are times where I swear these chapters are testing that threshold. So much so that I only point out what I see a glaring or major errors and state there are more in the chapter or story I'm reading.

"Jeeze Twilight, I know you're an egghead but you don't have to be bringing up books at a party, we're suppose to be having fun," Rainbow nonchalantly commented, to which Twilight shoots a glare at her.

i have to keep reminding myself that this takes place at the start of season1. Anyways afer reading Distorted Fate (ten outa ten would recomend by the way) I had to check this one out. And i am not disipointed at all. Baring the grammatical mistacks that are easily (not saying you shouldn't fix them:twilightblush:. And a few times you over use a word (duo for example)

Evergreen

Pattern of errors here; probably autocorrect. They should all be "everfree".

6095561 good to know, i actually wanted to ask for a new chapter.

Lovely story. :scootangel: can't wait for the next chapter.

As Sapphire look up at the nurse, a rumbling noise arises from her stomach, causing her to smile sheepishly as she says, "Umm... it it's not too much of a burden on anypony..."

Typo or autocorrect? The world may never know... :pinkiecrazy:

Tentatively, Twilight approaches Celestia, asking, “Is Sapphire going to be alight Princess Celestia? I don’t think she meant to anger you…”

THIS GIRL IS ON FIRE~ :trollestia:

so is this ever going to be updated?

Yay! Silvak has updated!

Will updates come sooner now?

Thank you for the new chapter, and I start to understand that there isn´t always time for you guys, to write on these storys.
However I have to admit, it is a little bit annoying that I don´t exactly know if I still remember what happened so far.
Well I´m starting to read now. Well I mean nothing bad with that.

Totally forgot this takes place during season 1. But so far I'm glad your back!

YES! Now this is the story I love from Silvak! I won't deny that Distorted Fate had serious charm and...Astral Aegis was good. This story however, I love! And it finally updated!!! YAY!!!:yay:

Also, great chapter!!!

Well not bad, I guess amore or less slow chapter is the best way to get back to the story for you.
I hope that doesn´t sounds mean or something, but I don´t really have the time to check everything I write this week.
Since I probably start to make no sense at all I better stop for now.
At least I noticed why I liked her so much, her personality was a nice one.

Comment posted by AdamAperture deleted Dec 1st, 2016

I'm happy you decided to start updating this again.

Awesome an update! Hope to see more updates soon :twilightsmile:

Okay, Saphire is a go with the flow type of pony, good to know.

Can't wait for when she meets Trixie.

Im gonna say this i love sapphire shes adorable and hilarious.

Okay, if my calculations are correct, Sapphire vs Trixie coming up.

Twilight's mane is dark blue with a purple Pink stripe. How do people keep missing this?:facehoof:

This was a great chapter and...hmm...since Sapphire doesn't remember anything, is she some sort of water spirit or something? And she was turned into a pony or something, which made her lose her memory? Perhaps she's the essence of water or a deity of it.

I'm starting to think it might be something like that...

Celestia. i want a full written apology. I expect this sort of thing from Luna not you.

I mean, what's the worst that could happen?

:trixieshiftright:

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