Monster Hunters - Beginning of Nightmare
Trials of Blood and Kindness
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Chapter 6
Monster Hunters
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Part 1 - Beginning of Nightmare
“Where are you taking us, Dash?” Fluttershy asked as she was being pulled by her friend. Their wings flapped rapidly as they flew through another hallway while Angel held Fluttershy's tail.
“To the kitchen, duh,” she responded as if it was the most obvious thing in the world. “With your dark vol… vo… something–”
“Veil of darkness,” Fluttershy corrected.
“Yeah, that. As long as we keep at least two meters distance from others, they won’t see or hear us. We can eat some ice cream and get away with it.”
The vampony responded with firm tone, “Rainbow Dash! The Veil of Darkness is an ancient technique developed by pureblood thestrals to ensure the survival of our race and to spy on those who wish us harm.” She took a quick breath and continued, “It is one of most important spells from the field of dark magic, and you want to use it to steal ice cream?”
“Pretty much,” the filly pegasus responded with smugness.
Both Fluttershy and Angel facehooved and face-pawed respectively.
Upon noticing two patrolling vamponies, Dash quickly pulled her friend close to the wall.
“We are going to get into trouble," Fluttershy pointed out. "We should just ask my mom and dad for permission.”
As both guards passed without touching the Veil of Darkness that Fluttershy kept around herself, Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes and said, “Flutters, I really don’t get you. Sometimes you act like a filly that listens to mommy’s and daddy’s every word,” Fluttershy looked to the side and frowned quietly, ”-or like a ninety year-old lady who follows rules to the letter without any excitement in your life.”
“... I’ll be ninety in ten years...”
“That’s not the point!” Dash flew up and spread her forelegs, her wings flapped rapidly. “Live up a little. Break some rules and have fun. You have so much power and never make use of it, even for your own entertainment.” Noticing that her friend mumbled something to herself, she flew closer and exposed her ear. “Huh? Speak louder please.”
Fluttershy sighed and spoke up, “Those who abuse power… often get corrupted by it.”
Dash rubbed her neck as the awkward silence lasted for few seconds.
Suddenly a loud explosion reached her ears.
“Did you hear that?” asked a nearby guard as he and his partner approached the closest window. Their wings and ears shot upward in surprise. “We have to warn mast–” the thestral guard said, before being cut off by an arrow striking his neck.
Drops of blood splattered onto the floor as Dash looked to the side and covered her eyes while Fluttershy could do nothing but stare in disbelief, her mouths agape.
Both guards ran with their wings spread as their violet horseshoes struck against the marble floor. The metallic sound echoed through the hallway while the wounded guard left behind a trail of blood. The moment they took to the air, the noise of broken glass followed right behind them.
Both young mares yelped as multiple figures with masks and crossbows flew through the broken windows and shot at the escaping guards.
With at least ten arrows piercing their wings, legs and backs, both of the thestrals crawled through their own blood in an attempt to escape. Two attackers ran at them and sliced their throats with silver blades.
“What do we do with the trash, sir?” one of the attackers asked before taking his mask off. His foreleg stomped on a motionless bat-like wing.
“Toss them outside the window,” said a tall gray pegasus wearing an armored vest with a chain as a cutie mark. “This mansion lies on a mountain, the sun will burn what is left of their bodies after they crash to the ground."
As ordered, both vamponies were thrown outside before the attackers spread out in two directions.
Rainbow Dash trembled, barely standing as her eyes couldn’t look away from pool of blood in the hallway. Fluttershy shivered as well, but a quick slap from Angel Bunny brought her back to her senses. She turned to her friend and said, “Snap out of it Dash, we have to warn my parents.”
The pegasus shook her head and stared back with wide eyes, her foreleg pointed at the blood on the floor. “Are you crazy? Just look what they did to the guards. Do you want to end up like them?” She pointed towards the broken window. “We should bail now while we still have a chance.”
“No, no, no, I cannot leave my parents. You can go, but I’m staying,” Fluttershy responded with determination, her fangs exposed. Not waiting for Dash's response, she spread her wings and flew away, only for her friend to follow.
“Okay, you’re not crazy,” Dash started, flying side to side with her friend. She spread her legs in all directions and added, “You’re completely insane!”
Fluttershy hissed at her friend and her eyes flashed, causing Dash to slow down a little. She passed hallway after hallway, corpses of fellow servants with pierced hearts and slit throats alongside a few of the attackers becoming a common sight. She quickly noticed a broken door, which lead to her parent's bedroom. The magical runes camouflaging the entrance were broken, and a butler alongside two maids dodged arrows and knives, unable to reach it to assist their masters.
Still under the spell that hid her presence, Fluttershy flew inside without hesitation, her hooves pressing against the floor in a forced a full stop while Dash followed her lead.
The bedroom itself was spacious. In the middle was a long poster bed with a canopy, two large violet pillows and blue eiderdown decorated with yellow stars. On the walls were paintings of pureblood ancestors and those dear to them. However all the tables, candles, flowers, and vases now lied all over the room, some in pieces. Two decorative polished proud coffins that once were positioned next to the bed were now nothing but pieces of very expensive wood.
In the middle of this mess next to the bed stood Sample Taker, facing his attackers. His posture was strong and filled with confidence, his fangs exposed and wings spread, but his eyes were full of sorrow. Unbeknownst to everyone present in this room, Fluttershy and her friend both retreated to the corner and observed the scene unfold.
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Well, that escalated quickly.
Wow...not sure what else can be said. I can't believe how great this story is and I can't wait to see updates for it. This is one I'll be following very closely.
Yay
new chapter!
that got dark.
And wow,
Then again it is with a dark tag.
NOOOO GET NEW PROOFREADERS!!!
Moar.
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Sadly it will take a while before I can upload next chapter. Not only I need to find a good proof-reader, but it is also a very long one.
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But without explaining the reason behind a downvote, author don't get necesery feedback to improve his story.
I often like to alter small elements in my story base on negative feedback, and if I am getting downvote, I would like to know why.
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Yup. Fluttershy is about to wake up form her peaceful life and see what her parrents tried to shelter her from.
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Thanks, though I fear that it may take a white before next chapter will be ready. Not only it is a long one, but I need proof-reader to look into it.
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Finding good proof-reader isn't easy. Trust me on this.
So if fluttersy bites dash will dash turn or is there something else that has to happen. Just wondering
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If a pureblood thestral drink blood from it's victim, nothing happens, however by injecting their own blood, they can cause the transformation.
I fucking knew it!
Fluttershy/bat becoming the bearer of the Element of Kindness would really present a conundrum to the hunters. Do you let the Thestrel live, or do you kill an element bearer?
So, how's it going?
5698701 Greed can cloud vision. They'll rationalize that the Elements of Harmony are evil or something like that. They'll think that Fluttershy is the real master and has captured the original Fluttershy and all that.
When sentient beings are irrational, it's very difficult to reason with them.
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Monster Hunters are illegal organization.
Some believe that what they do is right, some just want to fill up their pocket.
The dificult part is that Pureblood thestrals can turn normal ponies into thestrals, so the hunters threat them as source of threat to Equestria. It is possible to negotiate with them, but when purebloods are involved, it may be very dificult.
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What do you mean?
5701041 When will Celestia find out about these organizations?
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Well, seeing as you've already done a blog post regarding proof/pre readers, why not do it again, this time for editing? If you're not satisfied with the results, you can always just not take them.
masterfully amazingly supremely Beautiful story that truly captivates.
Hi,there!I'm a Chinese brony,and I really like this story.So may I translate this story into Chinese and show it on my blog and tieba(It's like 4chan,but just in China.) ?
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I won't mind at all. Also, sorry for not updating so long, but for a week, I will have proof-reader to help me out, so I will be able to update this story again.
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Fixed outside of one:
Is "Til" even a word? My translator can translate "Till" but not "Til"
So I changed it to "until"
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Fixed.
As for the issue with timeline, it is because I took down and expanded this story while rewritting it a bit. Originally chapter 1,2 and 3 didn't exist before i added them, so I forgot to ajust timeline of the story.
Anyway, I fixed it, and here is the full timeline:
Prologue - 14 years before Nightmare Moon's return (I changed Flutterbat's age from 70 to 73)
Chapter 1 - Fluttershy is turned to 6 years old filly and 1 year pass before she go to Flight Shool at age 7. Dash is still age 6 since she have her birthday half a year after Fluttershy. (13 years before Nightmare Moon's return)
Chapter 3 - I changed form 4 years to 3 years. Dash is now 9 years old. ( 10 years before NMR )
Chapter 4 Sonic Rainboom - takes place 9 years before Nightmare Moon's return. Dash is now 10 years old.
Chapter 5 - Dash is now 13 years old and Fluttershy will soon be a 14 years old filly ( her real age is 81, 6 years before NMR ).
Too sudden.
NO!
Fucking bitches.
"Oh, there's a vampony mansion! Let's just kill them all because of how they're born. And with no counterargument that they help ponies not harm them!"
if this is truly an illegal organization then honestly they should still be accountable for such a massacure, if celestia doesn't enforce the law, I can only imagine the types of hell that well raise when luna is in her right mind again, the hunters well start being the hunted.
Til, or 'til as the correct spelling is, is the same word as until, the same way that you're is the same as you are, it's only a shorter way to say/write it.
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Funny thing about storming a mansion with the intent to kill everyone inside, the whole point of it is to be sudden and take you off guard.
Makes me wonder, though... How well would the story have been received if the author had not left any foreshadowing in the previous chapter. No mention of hunters, no ominous chapter title, one moment we are all lead to believe we are simply in for a Dash visit and a small moral conflict over stealing ice cream, then suddenly walls are covered in blood. Just completely blindside the reader. To be honest, I really like that idea.
I'm sorry, Dash suggesting Fluttershy bail on her own parents?? I can't buy that.