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Cheese Sandwich travels near Ponyvile and decides to go back to Ponyvile to see Pinkie again, he is going to tell her that he loves her, but he is interupted by Spike and the mane 6, telling Pinkie that somepony broke into Twilight's castle and that they need her help, will Cheese ever revel his true feelings for her??? And who broke into Twilight's castle???
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Good story.
I have never done this before, but I physically need to right now:
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It is needed.
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OMG XDXDXDXD
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Thank you :)
I'm not usually one to do this, but first impressions are important.
+ back to Ponyville
+ interrupted
+ breaking
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Thank you for telling me my misspelling and telling it to me nicely. And I will gladly fix them.
First paragraph, already
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1) Ponyville has two l's.
2) Wrong Spelling. Should be since.
3) met, only one e.
4) Again, wrong spelling of a homophone. finally.
5) See #1.
6) Never. EVER. Start a sentence with And. 'And' is a joining word, not a sentence starter.
7) I think it would read somewhat better as 'help but notice'.
I would point out more, but I don't care for the Cheese Pie. Wait, Pinkie Sandwich. Whatever this ship is.
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Again, i'm sorry that I can't spell today, and thank you again for pointing them out
P.S CheesePie FTW X3
Loved it besides the misspellings but I looked over that overall great story line
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And ya, I don't know how to spell 
Thank you!
Oh hey, I saw this on deviantart! I thought it great, could need some proofreading, but good! And thanks for putting this into my group too! So your on deviantart? What's your username?
OH MY GOD!!! GUSHINESS OF LOVE!!!! *Squee!*
Amazing story!
*And a like for your story, and a like for your story, Ooh! And a like for your story too, and don't forget about a like for yours also! Everyone gets a like on a story!*
Good ship also somepony start digging Pokey's grave
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XD yes.
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Thank you! Here is the link to my deviantart page ( http://raelin11.deviantart.com )
This story seemed kinda cheesy- no pun intended.
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Sure, there's no pun at all.
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Then allow me to rephrase, it was kinda corny.
It's a great story just a bit fast paced is all
But I totally understand that
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Thank you, but it is only my first story, so I think I did good.
5704245 yeah you definitely did better than I did
Or am doing...
The plot was really good keep on going
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Thank you, and you too!
It felt a little rushed, both in grammar and story pacing.
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Ok, thanks for the tips! I'll make sure to do better in my next fanfics
Terrible grammar.
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BUT, it probably could've been cringier, though I'm glad I've gotten much better at writing. At some point, I'll write more MLP-related fanfics (I have some ideas in the works 
)
LMAO, yeah definitely. Looking back at this and knowing that it was my first ever fanfiction that I wrote when I was 12 years old, it's fair to say that this oneshot is awful
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Cool! I have a tendency to be pretty blunt, and looking back, that comment makes me cringe a bit. Just know that I never meant to be mean, only to say the story could have been edited more thoroughly. I wrote my first fanfic when I was 12 too, and it was pretty terrible, if I'm honest. Hope your new story ideas go well!
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Thanks a bunch! And lol, you're fine, dude. It got a chuckle outa me.