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RobRoyale


My name is Rob Royale, one of Princess Luna's guards. As a writer I don't take myself very seriously so lets all enjoy the lolz and the fact that we all watch a show about colorful talking ponies!

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Traveling back to Equestria for summer vacation seemed like the best idea ever. However Sunset Shimmer's home brings back memories and thoughts that haven't surfaced since her reformation. Forgiveness is never easy especially when it comes to forgiving oneself. That coupled with a deadly changeling plot against Princess Twilight has Sunset running in circles to protect her friends and figure herself out.

Extra Tags: Chrysalis, Changelings, Flash Sentry (I'm so sorry).
This may be subjected to change as the story progresses.

Extra side note: the cover art for this story was done by me :twilightsmile:
Extra Extra side note: To everyone who has faved and liked thank you so much!
Final Side Note: I've edited the spacing and scene transitions so it's less of an eye sore.

MUST READ: So an awesome friend of mine has started working on an animation for this story. He has a rough cut of the first scene in the first chapter. Check it out here and leave some feedback!
Summer Sunset Chapter 1 Animation Test

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Flash Sentry (I'm so sorry)

Just have some mutated squirrels eat him.

Is this Sunlight shipping?

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As much as I would love to do that :pinkiecrazy: I need him to help influence the romantic side of the plot.
And yes this is Sunlight shipping

There are a few noticeable grammar mistakes, mostly in dialogue that has no punctuation at the end. Just throw some commas in there. Also, 'yah' is not a word. 'Yeah' is a word, 'yes' is a word, but not 'yah'.

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Yah Grammar has never been my strong suit. Thank you for finding that ^^ I'll go back and make changes (hopefully tomorrow) and watch for it in future chapters.

“Bout everythin from the she-demon to the band competition. Don’t worry bout nothing, if Twilight trusts you so do we. Right every pony?” She looked around getting affirming nods. “Right Dash?”

Like the part where sunset did the rainbow friendship lasers thing without the elements?

Sunset mumbled something inaudible to Twilight. Twilight scratched her ear. “Come again?”
“myself…”
“What?”
“myself”
“Sunset please speak up?” Twilight insisted.
Sunset whirled around on Twilight glaring at her again. “Myself!” She shouted then drew her head back with more tears flowing.

We had entire movie about this and at the climax when she gets her magic back her character song is about how she will never doubt or fear again.

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To answer your first question, yep.

As for your second comment I understand where your coming from. However (and more internal conflict will be explained in the next chapter) no pony is perfect and everyone still has regrets, it takes the right trigger to bring them out. Seeing all the ponies counterparts of the canterlot high students happy reminded her of how everyone was before she showed up and ruined their lives. Its a reminder of that bad feeling and guilt. This is really only the tip of the iceberg, the future chapters will be bringing some things up from the IDW Comics

Thank you for your feedback ^^ I appreciate it.

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To answer your first question, yep.

If you deal with the implications of that without veering off topic, i will be impressed. The Fact no one has touched that is sad.
One of the biggest shake ups to our understanding of pony cosmology, blatantly confirming the heavily implied through season 4 split between The Elements of Harmony and The Rainbow itself, a seven colored rainbow, and summoning it without tokens. AND NO ONE TOUCHES IT.

no pony is perfect and everyone still has regrets, it takes the right trigger to bring them out.

I'd argue confidence and determination are her special talent, it's the best explanation of everything we've seen out of her.
And well her song "NEVER gonna bring me down, NEVER gonna break this part of me." right there, first two lines.

But honestly, most importantly.
It's trodden ground, and you won't do better than rainbow rocks.

This is really only the tip of the iceberg, the future chapters will [spoilers]

Like the explicit approximate 1 to 8 time ratio? Giving sunset....2.5 years in equestria...and she's a senior. As for the new thing? While i really like it, it's timing doesn't quite work, since the battle of the bands is in spring and that's set in winter, if it was set before rainbow rocks it would work better on three levels.

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If you deal with the implications of that without veering off topic, i will be impressed. The Fact no one has touched that is sad.

I hadn't planned on touching it but that might change. The way I see it, it doesn't require explanation. It was established that there was a powerful magic inside the element bearers and that magic resonates with them even though the elements were returned to the tree of harmony. I don't know it sounded simple in my mind ^^"

And well her song "NEVER gonna bring me down, NEVER gonna break this part of me." right there, first two lines.

Hm interesting point, when I was watching Rainbow Rocks I thought she was directly addressing the Sirens since they did bring her down in the dark lit hallway confrontation scene.

It's trodden ground, and you won't do better than rainbow rocks.

:rainbowlaugh: This is a fanfic, I never planned on it. My aim here is to write what I think and provide more content for one of my favorite shippings :twilightsmile:

While i really like it, it's timing doesn't quite work, since the battle of the bands is in spring and that's set in winter, if it was set before rainbow rocks it would work better on three levels.

Hm, I'm not quite sure I understand how the time lapses work. The only definitive time lapse I intended to set was: This is after Rainbow Rocks, its summer vacation, and its before season 5.

Also just as a side note, that I find hilarious, realize that we are having a discussion about a fanfic based off of a movie/television franchise about colorful talking ponies. :derpytongue2:

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I hadn't planned on touching it but that might change. The way I see it, it doesn't require explanation. It was established that there was a powerful magic inside the element bearers and that magic resonates with them even though the elements were returned to the tree of harmony. I don't know it sounded simple in my mind ^^"

It was established twice in the movie that twilight and co were incapable of just pulling rainbow friendship cannon out of their butts without access to the elements(Sunset puts as much into words the first time it's established.). Just like back in Equestria(Remember they needed to use the one shot box for tirek.)
......Then Sunset joined in.

Hm interesting point, when I was watching Rainbow Rocks I thought she was directly addressing the Sirens since they did bring her down in the dark lit hallway confrontation scene.

The back portion of Welcome to the Show is her character song and Shine Like Rainbows is sung too/about her(note she's the only one of the six human group that doesn't get a solo portion), it's all they have to establish who sunset shimmer is when she has her magic restored after all.

Hm, I'm not quite sure I understand how the time lapses work.

Sunset Shimmer was the previous Pupil of Celestia before Twilight. For the timelines of that to work out you need about 20 years to pass in equestria for Sunset's 2.5 years of high school. Which would explain why she's in such a damn foul mood, 2.5 years later someone seemingly gets everything she ever wanted.
The IDW comic however explicitly goes with such, showing a cutiemarkless Twilight practicing magic, so Sunset again leaves a few years before Twilight begins her apprenticeship under Celestia. (I don't normally consider the IDW stuff canon, and i can point out issues in both the sunset ones frex. in that one it shows sunset studying dark magic but when the crown floods her with dark magic she starts bawling her eyes out in pain, sunset unlike twilight simply can't use dark magic without it hurting her since it goes against her nature so strongly.)

So about a 1 to 8 ratio with time moving faster in Equestria.

Also just as a side note, that I find hilarious, realize that we are having a discussion about a fanfic based off of a movie/television franchise about colorful talking ponies. :derpytongue2:

You wrote it, is it not worthy of critique and thought?

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It was established twice in the movie that twilight and co were incapable of just pulling rainbow friendship cannon out of their butts without access to the elements

Yes I know I was implying that they had the magic inside them but could only bring it out when they were displaying the true meaning of friendship. Or it could be just: They could only bring it out when the plot demands rainbows ex-machina.

The back portion of Welcome to the Show and Shine Like Rainbows are Sunset Shimmer's Character Songs, it's all they have to establish who sunset shimmer is when she has her magic restored after all.

Fair point however we've seen in the show that even with the main six going through multiple episodes of character development they are still not perfect. Granted Sunset had her redemption and the songs prove that she is a changed pony the past can still follow her around.

Yes I understand that there are some flaws with the IDW comics especially with time lapses. My personal favorite is the Nightmare Rarity arc. Their were many different time lapse problems in accordance with season 2 episode 4 Luna Eclipsed. I'm not exactly sure how the time works in total. But the IDW comics do provide juicy information to play off of for later chapters. Even though the franchise has yet to cover up its own plot holes and flaws the information can still be used.

You wrote it, is it not worthy of critique and thought?

To be honest I hadn't expected it. :twilightsmile: I started writing this last week because I was having writers block with another story. I sent it to a friend and she loved it and said I should upload it to fimfiction. I didn't think it would be read/commented on this quickly. I do appreciate the feedback. But I also find it funny in retrospect when you think about it its like: "I'm debating a fanfic based off a show about colorful talking ponies.... what is my life?" :rainbowlaugh: I personally get a good laugh out of that thought because its funny and awesome! ^^

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Yes I know I was implying that they had the magic inside them but could only bring it out when they were displaying the true meaning of friendship. Or it could be just: They could only bring it out when the plot demands rainbows ex-machina.

They made an explicit point to have Sunset, who has been shown to know far more about the elements than Twilight, point out that last time they DID have an element and that's how they were able to do so.
Then at the ending they again show everything done right...and they can't summon the Rainbow they use the magic inside them which isn't enough to defeat the sirens. Then only after showing that the Twilight & Co couldn't do it, Sunset shimmer joined in, pulled out a full spectrum seven colored deus ex rainbow.

The Elements of Harmony have never been magic feathers.

Fair point however we've seen in the show that even with the main six going through multiple episodes of character development they are still not perfect.

*grumbles something about season 4 twilight and false humility*

Granted Sunset had her redemption and the songs prove that she is a changed pony the past can still follow her around.

Sunset has plenty of flaws and plenty to deal with as a character, it's why i wish desperately they would have just added her to the main cast, the core group absolutely needs a shake up and has gotten very stagnant.
But doubting herself is twilight's shtick, and letting her past dog her in that way is ground well trodden.

You've dragged her back to Equestria, Her Momjesty awaits.

To be honest I hadn't expected it. :twilightsmile: I started writing this last week because I was having writers block with another story. I sent it to a friend and she loved it and said I should upload it to fimfiction. I didn't think it would be read/commented on this quickly. I do appreciate the feedback. But I also find it funny in retrospect when you think about it its like: "I'm debating a fanfic based off a show about colorful talking ponies.... what is my life?" :rainbowlaugh: I personally get a good laugh out of that thought because its funny and awesome! ^^

Something, Magic, Beauty, Wonder, Harmony, Ma'at, Rainbows?

Comment posted by RobRoyale deleted Feb 23rd, 2015

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Then at the ending they again show everything done right...and they can't summon the Rainbow they use the magic inside them which isn't enough to defeat the sirens. Then only after showing that the Twilight & Co couldn't do it, Sunset shimmer joined in, pulled out a full spectrum seven colored deus ex rainbow.

Hmmm well my only response there is plot device ex machina

You've dragged her back to Equestria, Her Momjesty awaits.

Oh I know, all of this conflict leads into that in the next chapter. Just wait the good stuff is coming :twilightsmile:

Something, Magic, Beauty, Wonder, Harmony, Ma'at, Rainbows?

Or just a lack of social life for me :rainbowlaugh:

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Hmmm well my only response there is plot device ex machina

We are talking about a series/setting where deus ex rainbows is a known quantity and the villains try to work around.
You don't specifically call attention to something, then show it, then break your established rules without a damn good reason.

Oh I know, all of this conflict leads into that in the next chapter. Just wait the good stuff is coming :twilightsmile:

If you are gonna toss aside all of Celestia's characterization regarding Sunset, i will strangle unfollow you.

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In some cases I would agree however if everything was so easily defeated with rainbows ex machina then the show would become repetitive and boring.
Nightmare Moon - Rainbows (Twice)
Discord - Rainbows (Twice)
Sunset Shimmer - Rainbows
Tirek - Rainbows
Sirens - Rainbows

Sombra and Chrysalis weren't defeated with Rainbows, also in the IDW comics Anti-Celestia and Anti-Luna weren't defeated with Rainbows. These instances help give the story a little more diversity in villain defeats and even though Tirek was defeated by Rainbows...... Super Saiyan Twilight VS Tirek battle FTW.

Also in the human world your dealing with a different set of rules since it is a different universe. Magic doesn't work the same there so that could be why the rainbow magic doesn't work exactly as it usually does in the pony universe.

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Super Saiyan Twilight VS Tirek battle FTW.

No, that is a reason to mock twilight for being dumb and nothing more.

Also in the human world your dealing with a different set of rules since it is a different universe. Magic doesn't work the same there so that could be why the rainbow magic doesn't work exactly as it usually does in the pony universe.

And while it may not work exactly the same way because it can work however it's damn all powerful Rainbowness wants to work, it's explicitly stated the Rainbow exists in all worlds, by demonstration even ones without magic.

Magic didn't exist in that universe until the rainbow was summoned on earth, and the rainbow decided "You guys have magic now" as a parting gift. Also magic does work the same there it's explicitly "Equestrian Magic", just not pony magic.

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Really? I see it as a couple things:
1. If you read the fanfic A Hell of A Time you'll see that Luna comments that Celestia has inadvertently turned Twilight into a warrior Princess much to Celestia's dismay.
2. A reason to have a total geek out fanboy moment
3. Proof that even ponies can be epic as hell.
4. Also that everything is DBZ influenced. :rainbowlaugh:

And while it may not work exactly the same way because it can work however it's damn all powerful Rainbowness wants to work, it's explicitly stated the Rainbow exists in all worlds, by demonstration even ones without magic.

Actually its the magic of friendship that exist in all universes not the rainbow. The rainbow exists because of the residual energy that was left by Twilight's element of harmony or magical mcguffan.

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Actually its the magic of friendship that exist in all universes not the rainbow. The rainbow exists because of the residual energy that was left by Twilight's element of harmony or magical mcguffan.

Rainbow Rocks(like the entire movie, the rainbow that rocks is The Rainbow), Let The Rainbow Remind you Song.
The Rainbow is something that's been explicitly being separated from the Tree/Elements of Harmony since Equestria Girls 1.

The tree was damaged and weakened, yet The Rainbow was able to provide a level of power to the Mane Six Surpassing all of Equestria temporarily. Likewise remember Earthquestria now has magic permanently and it's implied to be spreading, The laws of physics were casually rewritten because twilight summoned The Rainbow.

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The Rainbow is something that's been explicitly being separated from the Tree/Elements of Harmony since Equestria Girls 1.

Hm I would argue against that, the element bearers are the embodiments of the elements of harmony. Even with out them they still represent them. So therefore it can be assumed that the magic inside them is what brings out the rainbow which can then be inferred that the rainbow is still brought out by the elements of harmony.

The tree was damaged and weakened, yet The Rainbow was able to provide a level of power to the Mane Six Surpassing all of Equestria temporarily. Likewise remember Earthquestria now has magic permanently and it's implied to be spreading, The laws of physics were casually rewritten because twilight summoned The Rainbow.

For me atleast its too soon to make assumptions. First where did the box come from? It came from the tree possibly? Then technically the rainbow is still connected to the elements. Also is that magic spreading? The magic only effected the main seven at canterlot high. I don't see how its implied. Hm well based on the end credits scene in EG 2 with actually human Twilight maybe EG 3 will give some answers to that.... or just give more fanservice :rainbowkiss: I'm okay with that too

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Then technically the rainbow is still connected to the elements.

Oh they are absolutely connected.
The Tree/Elements of Harmony are a manifestation of The Rainbow, but The Rainbow is the bigger source.

This handily explains how Discord could make something that could threaten the Tree, but once The Rainbow Friendship Cannon is fired there's nothing he can do besides choose a good pose.(And we are in season 4 territory, so really that was laying the seeds...and i made a pun.)

The magic only effected the main seven at canterlot high. I don't see how its implied.

Everyone at canterlot high got magic from the rainbow summoning, that's why the dazzlings were able to feed so strongly there, the main ones just got the most from it since they were "Ground Zero".
In fact if you look at the very begging you'll notice the dazzling's pendants shine brighter as The Rainbow is summoned.

Hm well based on the end credits scene in EG 2 with actually human Twilight maybe EG 3 will give some answers to that....

Evil Twilight yessssss.

or just give more fanservice :rainbowkiss: I'm okay with that too

And cosmology building is fanservice for me. :rainbowkiss:

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The Tree/Elements of Harmony are a manifestation of The Rainbow, but The Rainbow is the bigger source.

Where does it say the Rainbow is a bigger source? Is it implied or is there empirical evidence to this?

Everyone at canterlot high got magic from the rainbow summoning, that's why the dazzlings were able to feed so strongly there, the main ones just got the most from it since they were "Ground Zero".
In fact if you look at the very begging you'll notice the dazzling's pendants shine brighter as The Rainbow is summoned.

Right forgot that bit. But then the question is how much magic do they have? Enough to get ears and tails? Or is it like radiation that they been exposed to. We've only seen the magic majorly effect the main seven.

One thing I want in fan service: Nowacking as Vinyl Scratch :pinkiehappy:

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Where does it say the Rainbow is a bigger source? Is it implied or is there empirical evidence to this?

Possible implication in Equestria girls 1.
Minor implication throughout series 4.
Heavy implication at the series 4 two Parter(Let The Rainbow remind you borders on blunt.)
Extreme implication throughout rainbow rocks, rather blunt in the opening theme song implications(The Rainbow that rocks certainly isn't dash, the movie enjoys ribbing rainbow dash and her fans a lot.).
Show don't tell and all that.

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Hm I get what you're saying. You make some interesting points though I'm still waiting to see where they're going to go with that in season 5 and EQ 3. Now all I can say is.....
Heerrrg! Damn haitus! The 2 part opening to season 5 better be just as good as season 4 finale!!!!

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You imply i don't?
I just am sad no one's done anything with it until then.


ACK NEW CHAPTER AND HERE I AM DEBATING OLD STUFF!

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Oh no not at all. You've just put a lot more thought into it than I have ^^
Well theres still atleast another month before it starts, you could write the fic that deals with it :twilightsmile:

Not much to say, not much gets done.
If anything is gonna crack through Sunset's confidence it's the thought Momjesty, considering how easily Sunset can likewise crack Celestia's facade.

Oh wait one thing, Weather spells are incredibly rare only Trixie and Rarity with Rainbow Dash's cutiemark could use them. Not even twilight with her cutie mark of ALL THE SPELLS can use any form of elemental magic, outside of a sight gag in feeling pinkie keen.

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Well theres still atleast another month before it starts, you could write the fic that deals with it :twilightsmile:

I keep thinking about it, but then i'd lose my sunset fanboy critic purity. Or something.

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Oh wait one thing, Weather spells are incredibly rare only Trixie and Rarity with Rainbow Dash's cutiemark could use them. Not even twilight with her cutie mark of ALL THE SPELLS can use any form of elemental magic, outside of a sight gag in feeling pinkie keen.

Oh just wait. In a couple chapters that will make sense. Mwhahahhahahaaaa~ :pinkiecrazy: tomorrow I'll be uploading the next chapter so you'll start to piece things together.

I keep thinking about it, but then i'd lose my sunset fanboy critic purity. Or something.

Oh come now, you've brought up very interesting points and shown you're very open minded with your ideas. I think if you wrote a story it would be a very intricate read :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by AJ Nunnery deleted Feb 24th, 2015

I really like this so far it reminds me of another story i read however i like this one alot more



AJ

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Thank you I'm glad you like it thus far ^^
Also what was the other story you mentioned? I might want to check it out ^^

Sunset doubt doubt doubt.
Also sunset, you textually have more raw power than twilight when it comes to the spell set you do know(more limited though it may be since twilight's special talent is ALL THE SPELLS.)

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I believe its called how the sunset sparkles its kinda long but i kinda like it. Please don't judge me

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No, no I don't judge you. I've read that story and it was awesome ^^ I was feeling so many feels after reading it.

I believe this is getting very good.:pinkiehappy:
I cant wait for the next one, well i'm very patient so i guess i can (not meant to offend)

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Thank you I'm glad you're enjoying it ^^
Don't worry the next one should be up soon. Once Spring Break rolls around in a couple weeks I'm going to have so much time for writing! :D

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Tempting very tempting :pinkiecrazy: but sadly I need him as a plot device

5670816 pm your plot I need to know what happens with him :twilightangry2:

5670816 as long as he doesn't date Twilight she doesn't fall for him and he gets the shit beat out of him more than 3 times I'll be fine :pinkiecrazy:

Flash is in the story....... SEND HIM TO TARTARUS! This is a sunlight not flashlight, sunlight is awesome, sunlight is life, sunlight forever!

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Flash is in the story....... SEND HIM TO TARTARUS! This is a sunlight not flashlight, sunlight is awesome, sunlight is life, sunlight forever!

Why do people get like this in Sunlight fics wrt to flash.
Twilight has a hormone driven crush, and Sunset still carries a torch for the human counterpart. He's a great source of drama and conflict.

Flash looked up and Twilight turned to see her. Flash’s expression went flat and his lip curled into a scowl. “What are you doing here?”
“I could ask you the same.” Sunset growled under her breath.
Twilight looked between them multiple times. “Um… did I miss something?”

I'm with you twilight.
I'm with you.

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Haha truth be told I actually shipped Flashlight when the first Equestria Girls aired. I did some fan art of them (that never saw the light of day on the internet) but I lost interest because there wasn't much to go with Flash's character. Also I started disliking forced shipping. When EQ 2 and the Bronies React for it came out I really got into the Sunlight ship :D

Trust me when I read Sunlight fics and Flash Sentry gets involved I'm the same way :twilightsheepish: "Get out! Get the buck out of here!" Haha, as Woomod said he creates some drama I need for the fic ^^ so bear with me for now. In the end Sunlight will prevail! :D

so much hate I could have swore our policy was don't hate love, and tolerate:facehoof:
great chapter i like it:twistnerd:

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Hate? Naw naw dude I don't see it as hate ^^ To me it's just Flash Sentry bashing.
I'm glad you liked it ^^

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Well thank you. However it's not about the point of view it's about what's said. In the comment's people's rage is prefaced by Flash Sentry. If the hate was directed at the story itself the comments would include specific events or dialogue from text. But in this case it's the just that no one likes the waifu stealer XD

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I suppose you have a good point although i personally could never put someones work down I myself have been put down alot so i wouldn't do it to others:scootangel:

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