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Ribe_FireRain


Mental instability at its finest and aspiring punk rock musician. PS: Buy a creator a coffee to keep him awake? https://ko-fi.com/firerain

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This is the story of one, Cerulean Blaze and Scootaloo, the Cutie Mark Crusader. Although the two are foals, both individuals have an instant bond, and this is the story of said bond told through Cerulean's perspective in the format of 2nd.

What is to be is meant to be, but if it isn't, it simply isn't. Will a simple friendship develop into something more, or will it end up on its South end? Only time can factorize this fortune.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 29 )

I will keep an eye out for updates

Great chapter. However, you briefly switched from second person to first person, so you might want to fix that.

I also was taken for a slight surprise because I thought the titular brawl would be between Rumble and Cerulean.

6568692 I was originally going to do that. It seemed more fitting for a switch.

And I thought I fixed that?

Grew chapter, I knew he died, I just wasn't sure how. I really like where this is going.

There may be SOME SPOILERS in the comments section - just a heads up if you haven't read it yet! -Dan

I'm surprised about Rumble. I thought that Cerulean was going to have to go through another roadblock when it comes to him. Also, I dont think Apple Bloom has any right to be upset, she initiated the kiss. Good chapter overall.

Wow, gonna enjoy reading this!!!

Oddly, she kept blushing when she was around you which you found kind of odd but didn't think nothing of at the times it happened.

Was this a typo, or is Blaze southern? (This is not stereotypical, that is actually true. I live in Louisiana.)

6717275 Cerulean is from Manehatten. The first chapter clarifies that. Thanks for pointing that out, by the way. I corrected it and some other mistakes I found along the way.:pinkiehappy:

I hope we have another chapter coming our way soon

6754235 Not for a long time, I'm afraid. I should be blogging about that soon.

So now that both Scootaloo and Cerulean are no together, what are you going to do with Rumble? Your not gonna leave him hanging, right?

She leaned closer to you and planted a kiss to your lips.

I had hoped for this.

Yay! It's so nice to see that the story isn't dead! Loved this chapter, fairly simplistic and adorable :pinkiehappy:

Slowly shifting your head forwards, your lips made contact with Scootaloo's, placing a light peck. They were smooth and invitingly warm. Breaking away, you saw her smile become slightly wider as she slept and she let out a happy, dreamy moan and sigh.

That was the most adorable and beautiful part of this chapter :rainbowkiss:

Ohhhhhhh he's got a crush never seen one of these before

6717275 Texas is better and it may be that New York like accent

Aww shat! Diamond tiara got the crap better out of her!

The hell was that? I call it the power of the mind!!!!

Is he going to be all sad and emotional for the past few chapters

Shit so his crush was not his first kiss damnit

Archer is right sisters don't listen

Diamond Tiara snickered to herself. ''Well, I best be off. When my cousin finishes first, you can enjoy tour failure.''

The only spelling error I managed to find in the entire chapter, also congratulations, you fooled me with the foreshadowing but I sort of missed any symbolism you put in the chapter.

Nice to see that the new colt isn't just black and white, and that they'll be used again... Right? There's too much you're hinting at for you to end it there... Please tell me there'll be a sequel?

''I guess I'll find out at school tomorrow.'' She whispered to herself before turning around and heading home.

If this was me I wouldn't go to school tomorrow

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