• Member Since 31st Aug, 2013
  • offline last seen 6 days ago

LoreLove


I enjoy writing an array of topics such as horror and more. Enjoy your stay for whatever the reason!

Comments ( 16 )

I recognize that cover art. I just saw it on Derpiboo.ru a few minutes ago. :derpytongue2:

5645848
Indeed you did. I was with the artist in the stream as they drew it.

5645853
oh wow that's really cool.

hey are you intrested in a collab with me?

sequel please!! :rainbowwild:

Good story. :heart:

And you end it on a Marshmallow and Cocoa pun...

This is very sweet. :)

This was very sweet indeed

One thing I can say, note I have just started reading it, is that you should double space between paragraphs. It makes it easier to read.

Very nice story. Still, I found a couple tiny things you may want to edit.

Rarity was already crawling up onto the bed and looked back over her shoulder as she kept his hind legs straight while lowering her chest and forelegs.

That should be "her".

When rarity told him it was meant for mares, he blushed and nodding in his understanding of it then. At least he enjoyed wearing them.

And that should be capitalized.

7230138
Ah, good eye! Thank you very much! Corrected! :heart:

My only regret is Cocoa didn't get to perform oral sex on Rarity.

7969222
Perhaps some day!

7971930 I hope you so a sequel someday. :pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::twilightsmile:

Login or register to comment