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awesome
I have upvoted this story based soley on the descrption.
Singularity crossover? Fuck yes!
mmmmmhhhhh i like this
keep it up pleas (fond memories of Singularity 
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“Yes. Time. I could lfit and hold things without touching them, like I normally do, but it wasn't just that. I could stop momentum within a sphere, I could make things that were old... new. But it wasn't this that scared me.”
Whats an Ifit?
“Doctor Barisov!” Renko yelled, as he tossed the final zek to the ground, dead. The room aroudn him a decaying grey, covered in blood from the Spetsnaz and mutants Renko had killed. The TMD proving to be an even greater asset, the upgraded impulse having even more power than it did before.
Whats an aroudn?
Regardless of minor spelling mistakes, I really like how the story has developed so far, and find myself desperately wishing for more. I will definitely be favoriting this story.
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Thank you for pointing those out. I was writing this fic at about four in the morning. So I was running on adrenaline at that point.
That and Libreoffice decided to do that thing where instead of replacing a single letter, it highlights it and replaces the letter beside it. That was really pissing me off.
I don't agree with the way you portrayed Celestia and Luna. You should probably have someone help you with that part. They come off as mere caricature. That said you do a very good job of handling the main character and his feelings and motivations. Could be handled better but its done well enough to draw interest and keep me around even through the bad way you deal with the alicorns.
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Could you explain a bit more on why you feel that they're just caricatures?
You should add the cross-over tag.
good start
don,t make Renko to friendly
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Well... First of all the parts pertaining exclusively to Alicorns isn't edited all that well. Lots of grammatical errors. That doesn't help.
What exposition happens tends to go on and on in those segements. Like a run on. It should be short and sweet. Get what points you want across, usually by using the thoughts and feelings of the character to give away the setting. For example: Celestia brooded in her favorite seat overlooking Canterlot, 'Times have changed, since Luna's return and Discords temporary escape equestria has begun to be perceived as weakening. A century ago nopony would dare to even maneuver against us and now? *sigh* Our capital is being threatened on the eve of my nieces wedding.' Looking up from the streets Celestia gazed at the rippling barrier covering *her* city with a frown marring her normally smiling face.
This gives character. Depth. Celestia can then put back on her mask of calm contentment she normally wears when she hears the knock on her door.
As the chapter currently is though? Its rough and needs polish. And before you ask no I wouldn't be a beta... at least full time. I might go over something and polish it a bit or offer advise for authors when it comes to certain parts of their work but I'm not going to commit to anything. I sometimes have time... usually I do not.
I have hopes that this will be a good singularity crossover, havnt read one in quite a while.
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I'll edit those in a little while, I was finishing this story up at four, so I'm not surprised those are there.
Exposition has never really been my strong point, but I'll work on that.
I also don't typically use betas or editors. Nothing against them, just... meh.
I look forward to see how Renko develops, I played the game a while ago (something I am going to correct soon) and I can't remember him having too much depth. I also want to see how his time abilities will be used in the MLP world, as well as what the reaction of such abilities given to a soldier not allied with anyone, (yes 'anyone' since changelings are going to be making an appearance if I am guessing the currently timeline in MLP) at the time of his 'arrival'.
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It's a sad story behind the game. It was originally supposed to be a sandbox game, but the original development team didn't know how to optimize the code. So it absolutely refused to work on console. And it barely worked on higher end PCs. It was eventually cancelled, but it was activated again, and handed over the lead developer of the Marvel division of Activision. They had seven months to rework the entire game, and three months to ship it out. The fact that this game took seven months and is as good as it is, is amazing.
Here's the article that tells more about it
No, he had like... one spoken line and that was "Renko! Don't let Demichev live!" and then he was crushed by rubble. Poor Renko. :|
Huh, a Singularity cross. I've only seen something like three or four others. I think I'll read this...
I'm going to give you a follow, for A, Singularity is fucking awesome (I NEED to play it again), B, you write good stories, C, you write good stories but seem to forget them over time. If this meets my expectations, then fav.
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Hey! >:| I don't forget about them, I just... don't update, >:|
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I fail to see what makes that any better, in fact that's worse, because you know the stories there and just leave us hanging, like Valve for Half-Life 3, and that sir is just cruel!
I follow for hope of future updates! I guess
I love this game
Never played the game myself but this looks good. Nine out of eleven: would fav.
I finally found you... the singularity fic that isn't a bloody fic of twilight writing a sciency 50 shades pf grey.
Add to my favorites. I never imagined anyone would write a fic of one of my favorite games. I really hope you continue and finish this.
I really hope you continue
Shit man, this game was the shit back when it was released, passed it like twenty times, for each ending.
Aw come on another one that wasn't continued