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The Friend Zone

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Writing can clarify one's thoughts and relieve stress. Somepony is using it to cope with Fluttershy's recent engagement.

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LuluCalliope

LuluCalliope #1 · Feb 20th, 2015 · · · Recurring Thoughts ·

Interesting...who is she engaged to? Who's writing this? I can't wait to find out!

Bad Horse

Bad Horse #2 · Feb 20th, 2015 · · · Recurring Thoughts ·

This is all right, but you've gone a little too long without introducing any new, important information. You have a character with a strong emotion, but not a story. If we're supposed to sympathize, we probably need to know whether the narrator deserves our sympathy. For a story, something else has to happen, and we ought to have an idea what by now.

RagnuPony

RagnuPony #3 · Feb 20th, 2015 · · · Recurring Thoughts ·

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Thanks for the advice. I almost made chapter 3 about something with a bit more substance to it, but I'll try to slide that into chapter 4. . .

Hillbe