Guest Chapter 1 Failure with a Spark of Hope
Shining’s Story
A side story to Admiral Q Ponyform’s ‘Love…SERIOUSLY!?’
Written by RC2101_Copey
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(2days BA (Before Awakening))
“I failed her mom, I failed her.” Shining Armour sobbed between breaths. Twilight Velvet had found her son in his bedroom, face down on a thoroughly drenched pillow.
“Now Shining, stop that, please,” Velvet knelt by her sons bed, bringing him into a tight hug. “You were the only one out of a dozen guards in that courtyard to even react, and your actions are the reason we aren’t holding a state funeral right now. You did your duty.”
“But it wasn’t enough.” He looked his mother in the eyes, his blood shot and sore, “I wasn’t strong enough to stop it!”
His mother shook him violently from the shoulders.
“STOP IT. She is alive. She is alive because-of-you” She punctuated those three words with hoof jabs to his chest. “When – and I mean WHEN, she wakes up, I’m sure she will share my sentiment.”
They sat in silence for a few more minutes, while Shining collected himself.
“I know you’re right mom, but I just need some time to convince myself.”Velvet smiled at her son. His heart was too big for its own good sometimes. He would always blame himself when Twilight hurt herself under his care, and Celestia above knew she was a law unto herself.
“Well when you are done drowning your pillow, dinner is ready downstairs. You’ll need your strength; they want you back at the training barracks tomorrow morning.” Velvet smiled at her son, and left the room. Now alone, Shining moved from the bed, and knelt down, bringing his fore hooves together.
“To Celestia, to those on high; I –Shining Armour- vow to never again allow harm to come to any Princess, or any citizen of equestria. I pledge myself to the protection of all ponykind, and I shall devote myself to learning skills to do just that – may my soul rest in Tartarus if I don’t.”
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(1 day AA (After Awakening))
“SHINGING SHINING HAVE YOU HEARD?” Twily bolted into the living room. However, her enthusiasm was no match for physics; her momentum overtook her and she slid the remaining distance, colliding with her brother, eliciting a slight ‘oomph’ from the pair.
Shining Armour grabbed his little sister, and set her back on her hooves. “What is it Twily? What’s got you so excited?” She stood in front of him, bouncing slightly, a newspaper held in her magic.
“Here – read this read this read this!!!”
“Ok ok, just settle down a bit first, ok?”
Twily slid down onto her stomach, and looked up at him with a big smile. Taking the paper from her, he unfolded it, and looked at the front page. The main article was a large picture of Princess Celestia, and to the corner, a smaller picture of Princess Cadance.
“-In an address to the palace press this afternoon, Princess Celestia was overjoyed to announce that her niece, the Princess Cadance, has awoken from her coma today, and has already started to make a remarkable recovery…-”
Shining never got any further through the article. He soon found that his eyes were seemingly underwater, and that the ink on the paper was running due to an unknown water source.
All he could feel was a huge weight being removed from his head and his heart.
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(4days AA)
“I still can’t believe it, a full size dragon just up and appeared, right in the middle of the college grounds. It’s a good thing the Princess was going past at the time Shining; I’m not sure what we could’ve done.”
“You’re not wrong there Bastion, but I’m pretty sure we would’ve done something; they don’t train us for nothing.” Shining replied.
The two stallions had just returned to their dorm at the barracks, following a long day of training exercises. “I’m just glad the reports say there was no injuries to anyone; my sister and parents were there for Twily’s entrance exam. If they hadn’t confirmed that so quickly, I probably would’ve headed straight there.”
“First you save a Princess, now you’re talking about fighting dragons head on? Are you sure you don’t think you’re living in a little girl’s fairy tale world?” he snickered.
“Shove it Bronze, that’s just stupid. I …” He never got to finish his sentence, as the door to the dorm burst open, and a purple missile assassinated him. Said missile was swiftly followed by Twilight Velvet and Night Light.
“Mom, Dad, Twily? Oh thank Celestia you’re safe.” He pulled all three into a hug. Letting go, he looked at the group with an eyebrow raised. “How did you guys even get in here? The barracks is a restricted area?”
Night Light coughed, and rubbed a hoof on his chest. “As Royal Astronomer, I do get a bit of leeway here and there. Besides, with the news we have to tell you, I reckon anyone could’ve got past.”
Twily gives Shining the run-down of her entrance exam, her Cutie Mark, and her new position as Princess Celestia’s personal student. After such and information overload, it took Shining’s brain about a minute to reboot.
“Wow Twily, that is so awesome; I am so proud to have you as a sister.” He pulled her close, and nuzzled her till she squirmed.
“And that’s not everything.” Shining gave her a sceptical look. “After my surge, Princess Celestia took us to the hospital, to have us checked over. Me because of my surge. Mommy and Daddy because I kindof turned them into plants for a tinsy bit of time.”
Shining looked over to his parents, both of which were red in the face, doing their best to avoid his gaze, all but confirming her story. Twily continued her monologue, oblivious to her parent’s awkwardness.
“And while we were there, she took me to meet Princess Cadance.” Shining’s face paled, as the blood drained away. “I got to help her learn to walk again.” Twily practically beamed, unaware of the effect her words had on her brother.
-Oh no. No no no no no. It was as bad as it looked. Oh Celestia no no no no no no no no “She wants to see you.” No no no no no no no no…-
“Wait. What?”
“Princess Cadance wants to see you.” Twily repeated.
Shining gulped. He couldn’t breathe. The walls were closing in. He would have fainted had his family not immediately glomped him. He was just glad Bronze Bastion had made himself scarce; or he would never live it down.
After reassurances from his family, he decided it was best to treat this like one would a Band-Aid, and get it over with quickly.
He soon arrived outside the princess’s hospital room, and he took a minute to compose himself. Unsure of himself, he knocked lightly on the door, and push it open.
“Y-you wanted to see me your h..highness?” He stammered, worry across his face.
She gestured with a hoof for him to enter, and come closer. He did, but rather fearfully. As he got closer, Cadance spoke up;
“I want you to know I don't hold you responsible for my anything that happened. Without your actions, and quick thinking, I would be in fact be dead. You did your duty, so stop blaming yourself for this. From what I hear, your shield is one of the best the Canterlot Guard has seen in years, so I consider myself lucky that you were on duty that day. I would like to give you my personal thanks.”That caused his head to shoot up.
“But Princess, I .. I…”
“No buts Shining. You are the reason I am still here - so Thank You, Shining Armor. Now I don't want to hear about moping like that again, GOT IT?” He fearfully shook his head. Cadance gave an evil grin. “Good, now tell that sweet sister of yours I said hi and look forward to seeing more of her.” He nodded again and started to walk away. “Oh, and one last thing. That includes you as well.”
His face flushed red, and he made a hasty retreat, smiling the whole time. Once he made it out the door, everything seemed brighter. The princess had been alive, and in good spirits. He even said she wanted to see him again.
Had he just made friends with a princess?
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pls do more
6506158 I work on several stories. So my next entry will a while.
Dawwww...
Nice to see a little of Shining's P.O.V. .
Awesome chapter!
Noice.
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Well, I should write more on my version of this.
I've got the prologue and part of the first chapter done.
Hopefully I'll get the first chapter finished soon.
6506290 I don't get it?
Good chapter is good
6506307 look really close at the quoted text.
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he said planets in the story instead of plants
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WOOPS :P
You really can't edit your own work effectively
I'm glad to see some people are enjoying this
Shining's side needs to catch up with Cadance. Otherwise, mostly good chapter. Except confusing plants with planets.
6506401 naw he didn't. In this story Twilight's parents became the second sun ad moon, causing the creation of the badlands and the world heavily scared as they knew it.
6506464 ... That would be pretty bad ass, except for one thing. Gurren Lagann demonstrates what would happen if the moon were to get closer. The world just about ended thanks to sudden tidal waves, tectonic plate shifting, and so on. They ran a simulation of the moon making contact, and the result was the entire surface of the planet peeled away from the force of impact. The Sun is much larger. There wouldn't be a planet any more.
6506633 yeah true.
*Kind of
How did she turn her parents into PLANETS?
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Yeah I messed up the spelling of plants.
The 'kindof' is intentional. I tried to write it how an over excited/embarrassed filly would vomit words.
Waaait, so is this what's happening in Equestria while the story is...? But she's the wrong age and I... ugh i don't even know anymore
6506886 It starts a few days before Twilight's Cutie Mark appears and followers them through the series from primairly Cadance's POV. I plan to finish past the series known timeline.
RC2101_Copey stand up and take a bow this is a chapter worthy to be added to this exultant story.
Thing with Cadance is she was Twi's foal-sitter before she got her cutie mark -
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- so they already knew eachother, and if you take the comics as canon or Semi-canon then it could be argued that she and Shining originally met while going to school (and Shining hung out with the nerds apparently...comicsalliance.com/files/2013/09/MLP05.jpg ), and their first introduction was quite a bit more awkward than their re-introduction in this chapter derpicdn.net/img/2013/10/25/456438/full.jpeg so either this story is AU in that regard, or Q and RC forgot that detail and simply haven't worked it in yet. Though if it's the latter then they'd also need to slightly tweak some of the existing scenes because they would contradict this.
Sorry, been following this story since the first chapter, and I definitely like it, but that's the one gripe I've had about the whole thing and I wanted to put it out there.
Corrections offered without malice.
SHINING
space between # and days
gave
an information overload
I kind of turned them into plants for a teensy bit of time.”
“Y-you wanted to see me, Your H-Highness?”
missing space before That
6506980 Well we are already AU by the fact that Cadacne got injured enough to be brain dead and need Dave to fill in. In this universe they didn't become close till after Rainboom. Maybe their closer connection in canon prevented this level of injury for Cadance.
6507026 fair enough, though it might be prudent to explain that a bit better for us Canon-til-primary-divergence Nazis...
6507046 the AU tag is on the story. And the fact that Cadance isn't actually Cadance make it clear.
YAY for the new chapter. Awwww that it was not Cadence story. Don't hold me wrong it was FANTASTIC!
Hope to see the next chapter soon right?
6507486 sorry 3 are ahead of it. that's why i posted this.
6507543 OK
6507547 I have to be fair to the readers of my other stories. Even if it's not being written the chapters do go through my mind.
6507555 Fair enough
I was happy to see this update. Then I read
and was sad again, as the chapter ended.
6506393 It actually is possible to effectively edit your own work. At least, it is for me. I don't have any editors, and my works have enough errors to count on one hand.
6506633 That is the first time I've seen TTGL used for a proper physics demonstration. Then again, it is easy to forget little things like physics with just how awesome the show is, especially when there's a Giga Drill Breaker bigger than the observable universe.
6507676 I figure it be at least something. I have to be fair to my fans of my other works.
I just hope they didn't develop sentient life during that time as turning them back at that point would technically be genoside. . .
Also so thankful that it seems someone is able to use breathe and breath correctly. I dunno how many popular writers and seem to have switched them around. One particular author mixed them both up within just a paragraph of each other.
Oh god this chapter is so shitty.
No offence, but like, it's too late to try and do multiple perspectives.
Trust me.
Too many authors on here try it and like all of them fuck up.
Shit, didn't see the "Guest Chapter"
6507758 well you are entitled to your opinion. This idea was not originally planned by me. but I thought my editor should be allowed a shot at it. You can skip the guest chapters if you want.
6507760 Fair enough.
Still, feedback is feedback.
6507791 true, but i would hope for more civility next time. That annoys me more than a negative comment.
6507793 Oh no, the kiddo's at home might learn a dirty word. How horrid.
6507807 no it's simple courtesy. YOu don't have to be rude to make your opinion.
6507676 I figure the math was fairly accurate considering what a meteor the size of a cow did to the dinosaurs.
6508463 The one that killed the dinosaurs was bigger than mount everest. A cow sized meteor (if it's that size at impact) would just leave a decently sized crater and perhaps cause a lot of files.gamebanana.com/img/ico/sprays/saxton_hale-_window_2.png if it landed in an urban area or even an ocean.
6508569 It hit a fault line, which then triggered volcanic eruptions. It also made the Gulf of Mexico. I am probably confusing the size for the force comparison though.
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6508569 guys please continue this in Pms
The way Celestia keeps trying to push Cadance and Armor together makes me think she knows more than she lets on.
All it would take is Fausticorn visiting Celestia to let her know about the emergency, backup Cadance.
6508690 Celestia is pushing the ship because of Crystal Empire and her being motherly. She honestly will not know that Cadance had a transfer. In truth only two will know for sure of Cadance's secret and one will have a hint of it.
Cute.
We aren't going to see the two of them together, are we? Because at this point it would feel like an enourmous asspull.
6539060 Time will tell. I can say their relationship will be different.
Well, it's been entertaining enough for self-insert fluff, though I'm a bit curious how you're going to end up handling our protagonist's sexual orientation and identity. You've paid lip service to the topic at best, but the time is drawing near for a decision. Will she accept Shiny's advances or will she fight her body's impulses and attempt to take a mare as consort? Or something different altogether? I'm probably thinking about this too hard; Boss Luna always did say I stew too much.