• Member Since 26th May, 2014
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Skarsnik


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While MacBloom is one of my favourite MLP incest pairings next to Twining (depending on my mood), this story needs a lot of work. If you can, try to get a proofreader and/or editor to help you out on the grammar and so forth. Maybe I could help out. Private Message me if you want me to proofread the story for you. :twilightsmile:

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FUCK YOU
MY EYES HURT AFTER READING THIS.
PLEASE, JUST-JUST GET A EDITOR OR SOME SHIT
I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE.

Eh... I don't even want to read this.

nope nope nopity nope nope nope

An Apple Bloom x Big Macintoch story.

*unzips pants*

It's not a clop story as there is no lengly description of intercourse, but sex is explicitly mentionned.

*rezips pants*

Huh, well excuse me gentlemen. I have some buisness to take care of.
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If you find that kinda creepy is probably normal.

For the editor part, sorry my english is not my native tongue and well It's kinda hard to go to a friend and said "Hey can you help me correct my incest/foalcon story".

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I bet that it is. Well my friend you story gets to be featured in a group.

Hey Skarsnik, if you ever need an editor/ proofreader, hit me up. I'll correct every little mistake in your stories and ensure they're top quality.

Nice overall story, with a sadness aspect thrown in along with some cute moments. But as everyone has already said you really need someone to go through this and correct the grammar. It's probs why there is that many downvotes. Still I'll give it an upvote but I'd give it a fave if you correct the grammar.

Also may I suggest you change "Macy" to "Macc-ie" (I'm guessing that's how you want to pronounce it) or change it to another nickname because "Macy" would be pronounced as "May-see" as its spelt right now.

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...lucky colt :rainbowwild:

I can't even finish reading this because the grammar is sooo messed up. Im not trying to be mean but you really need an editor ir something because it's making me not want to finish reading it.

The grammar is a little painful, but it had a good plot-line and it flowed nicely. It's okay if English isn't your native language, but all in all, slightly painful, but a good read over all. Rating it 7/10.

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