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StoneWare13


Hey everypony iam stoneware am an artist from canterlot.

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Front page is a popular gossip column writer and after getting asked by a popular DJ to do some writing for her, nothing could prepare him for the truth about miss scratch.

This story was done as part of my English Corse work, the story in based of 'interview with a vampire. Art work done by myself.

Enjoy
LemonZing

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Chapters (1)
Comments ( 11 )

I mean, no offense.
But This is a pile of shit.
The Plot is uninteresting,
There are already 9000 Stories featuring Vinyl In some messed up situation.
In-Short,
Don't make any more of these.quickmeme.com/img/f0/f048edb7ead27c35e45e0da6b5f452304a5deb074bab47ceb7d19ffa82046706.jpg

Comment posted by Deactivated27683799 deleted Feb 13th, 2015

5619423 This is garbage. Many spelling errors, uninteresting plot, and everything else he listed.

I did say this was part of my english corse work, but I thank you for you opinion:ajsleepy:

I think it's really cool! I like how sudden the ending comes! Cool twist! :pinkiehappy:

Okay, the grammar and punctuation isn't that good, but the story is interesting, but why Vinyl would just tell him of all ponies, is unknown to me, and the ending was a bit... how do you say it? Rushed? Iffy? If you want better reviews you should work on this, but I can see you tried and I over-all enjoyed it, and the ending showed intensiveness, I like that. Also, if you want me to look over it, and fix a some mistakes sometime, just say so, I have no experience in editing, but I could try my hoof at helping a bit,

Thanks, but I am leaving this story as it is because it was done for my English Corse work. I won't be adding to it. yes I was disappointed with the reviews but it won't effect me because I am proud of my work but, thank you

5619574 No problem,:twilightsmile:

5619574 I suspect you might not be getting a great grade, if the summary is any indicacation. Apropos of anything else, "Corse" is incorrect; the word you're looking for is "Course". A more in-depth error correction of the summary is as follows, with words stricken through as incorrect, and the part in red the correct version. The part in brackets is an explanation.

Front page Page (names are always capitalized) is a popular gossip column writer. and after getting He was (In and of itself, this isn't incorrect, but it makes no sense when paired with the next section) asked by a popular DJ to do some writing for her, but (Without this edit and the previous one, the sentence doesn't flow logically) nothing could prepare him for the truth about miss scratch Miss Scratch (Miss is always capitalized when paired with a name).

This story was done as part of my English Corse Course (or coursework, depending if you're referring to work done in a class called "English Course" or coursework done for an English class) work, the story in is based of off 'interview with a vampire Interview with the Vampire. (Most words (in this case, "Interview" and "Vampire") are capitalized in a title. Also, "the" instead of "is"). Art work Artwork done by myself.

Enjoy

LemonZing

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"Who's that?"
*multiple gunshots*
"A real fucking vampire"

I think the worst part is that this COULD have gone somewhere interesting.

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