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SeaBreeze173


You can't get to the light without walking through the dark first. There are twists and turns and sometimes it feels as if the light has disapeared, but it is there. You just have to look.

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sequel to New Town, New Beginnings
Love.
Everypony experiences it at one point or another. Sea has known what love is all her life. But she never knew what love truly is until she met Thunder Bolt. Now six months after moving to Ponyville, Sea and Bolt are as in love as two teenagers could be.

Ponyville's First Annual Music Festival is just several weeks away. Excited that there is to be a singing competition and desperate for her cutie mark, ten year old Daisy Juniper enters herself and her big sister Sea Breeze without the older mare's permission. When she finds out, Sea panics, as she does not do well in front of large crowds. After being comforted by her coltfriend, Sea agrees to accompany her little sis, but she can't help but having doubts about herself.

Meanwhile, Angus, Sea Breeze's loyal canine companion, still has ill thinking towards Thunder Bolt. Though he knows that the colt is a good one, the dog's deep rooted instinct of protecting his owner refuses to let Bolt in. After many months of being treated as if he is invisible, Angus begins to feel that Sea no longer loves him.

Book 2 of the Life in Ponyville series.

Book 1: New Town, New Beginnings http://www.fimfiction.net/story/240078/life-in-ponyvillenew-town-new-beginnings

Side story 1: A Blast to the Past http://www.fimfiction.net/story/244244/life-in-ponyville-side-story-a-blast-to-the-past

Note: Sex tag for lots of kissing and other lovey dovey stuff. No actual sex.

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 3 )

Alright, I saw a bunch of downvotes and no comments so I decided to take a look. Honestly, it's pretty well-written from a construction standpoint; however, it's light and fluffy and very slice-of-life, and I get that that's what you were going for but...it's a little too light. Honestly, OCs are tough to make interesting, and very few really nail it. My advice would be to spice it up; maybe give the characters quirks so they'll feel much less like a generic nuclear family (yes, that's a real term). It isn't really my thing so maybe I'm a bit biased but I'm just giving my two cents.

Six months since her father and dog began plotting for her love’s demise.

Also unsure of what you mean there.

5612475 I know how the first chapter isn't very exciting. I probably re-wrote it several times. I've always had this problem, even when writing non-fiction. My mom is the better writer in our family but everyone always says that I'm pretty good at it as well. I really don't care what other people think, just as long as I have fun. Thanks for your help and I hope you continue reading:twilightsmile: Don't worry, they begin to get much more exciting soon. They are based off my own family and God knows we aren't a normal family.
oh, about that sentence. Sea's dad and dog really don't like her coltfriend. They act pretty much the same way my dad and dog do around any boy that pays attention to me.

5612475 also, this is the second book in the little series I'm doing, so if you haven't read the first one, you won't be able to really understand this well. Apparently the downvoters did not read that little part that says "this is a sequel to New Town, New Beginnings"...

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