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SUBJECTXVI


I blow stuff up 4 fun, enjoy poetry that doesn't annoy me, have recently joined the broney army, love lesbians but hate it when gay guys do their thing in front of me, I'm 18 & out of my phyche ward!

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Pinkamina Diana Pie has kept a secret from all of her friends. A secret that her greatest wish has only been for someone to notice. And now after years of waiting somepony finally has. And what sweet release does it bring for the pony who has never known a sunrise or sunset.

Random Little Fimfic That Burrowed It's Way Into My Brain.

P.s. Mr. Muffin is a Tomska creation I don't own him and I don't own Harry Potter either so please don't sue me! Also if I don't own those two then it goes without saying that I don't own MLP either.

P.p.s. This Fimfic might become rated M later on. This factoid remains to be seen and will remain in Teen until further notice.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 58 )

Holds an interesting premise, and a decent start. Update soon to show what else is in store for the readers.

I am quite enjoying this Pinkie. From her unique method of seeing to her now apparent struggle with possibly losing her ears, I feel as if i can relate to this pony more then ever. Top notch show, mate. Keep up the good work

5655642 :yay: Thank you for the vote of confidence! Please continue to review for this story, tell me what you like what you hate and i'll see what I can do! XD Also spread the love around and let your friends/followers (if you have any) Know about me! :scootangel::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

I'm really enjoying this. It's an interesting explanation on how and why Pinkie can do what she does, without the cliche line of "It just Pinkie being Pinkie". I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

5658980 Lol just leave a review on Your way out! XD

5659326 Lol actually this story IS being rushed. I'm pumping out the chapters as quickly as I can (that's why I have two under 1,000 word chapters back to back). The only reason why it doesn't seem like that is because I actually have competent beta readers working with me, and I'm getting A Lot of help from Wolfie 03, (who has been giving me some useful advice when it comes to adding certain obvious glaring facts/giving to many spoiling points.) trust me without their help this story would not even be half as well written as it is.

5660411 I just made an huge change to chapter 3! check it out!

5674822 Lol KK! Please leave a review!

5679150 lol thank you! XD Me and my betas had a lot of fun writing that particular chapter. And even though only around 1% of what we wrote was actually used, I still feel really good about what made it through.

So... Erm... Why are you in Texas? :rainbowhuh:

5683327 Well... Ah... Hmmm... Erm... Well that sucks.... I sorry about your mom and dad... :fluttershysad: Welp I can only say good luck and watch out while opening Banana's down there! If I have my facts straight Taxes has Banana Spiders ts1.mm.bing.net/th?id=HN.608027035834451738&pid=1.7 One of these suckers.

Also on the subject of the Muffin just make sure it's not sentient and out to be eaten... Pinkie is still running tests on that obscure race and has yet to identify if they're poisonous or not... (They do come from the ASDF universe... You know the same one with the MineTurtle.... Hey... MineTurtle... *Light Bulb* GTG!)

5686734 Oh! Well congrats! And yes it is not mostly desert isn't it? Then again is California but most people see to have forgotten that little factiod. :moustache:

5686764 Lol well Pinkie hasn't eaten the Muffin. She's just been studying it like a mad science pony! :pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy:

5686764 Sorry I haven't added the next chapter yet. It's proving to be a hassle. collectively we've probably written over 1,000 manuscripts, however non of them have yet to pass inspection! :raritycry::raritydespair: Ugh! Well back to the drawing board! :fluttercry:

Hmmm, that is a...curse somewhat, seeing like that.

Oh, now I wonder what made her do that?

5712017 Aw... No replies on the other chapters? #SadFaceIsSad Lol JK You'll find out in like 4 or 5 hours if I don't fall asleep. I actually cut the chapter in half because I felt like being a bastard and leaving you guys with a cliff hanger! :moustache::eeyup:

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I didn't reply on the other chapters because I was too engrossed in it to think of a comment.

5712026 Lol! I didn't know It was That good! XD But do tell! :coolphoto::moustache:

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do tell you what exactly? I'm not good with reviews, or anything like that, it was good, that's all I can reliably say.

Whoa! That got dark, real quick. Wha- how?

I have no words.
If you actually bump her off, I'm going to have a few choice words to say with you.
-The Character.

P.S: I presume RD and Pinkie are in love?

Well... that escalated quickly.

That was sad...I get what happened.

Did RB actually kill herself and this is a different universe/timeline?
Last chapter she hung herself.

Good chapter.

So did Pinkie dream RD killing herself while she was being revived?

5770210 5770159 What does Pinkie Pie's "Pinkie Sense" Allow her to do? -_-

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oh...yeah I wasn't really thinking...

This story needs a random tag:derpyderp2:
The original plot line really had me interested, but the pacing is way too fast.
The constant jumping between POVs is also immersion breaking.

Overall I would say it is an okay fanfic, but can use a bit work.

Keep writing and do not give up!:rainbowdetermined2:

5938968 Yeah sorry about that. This is my first REAL serious Fimfiction and basically just a learning device. As for the story going too fast I also apologize but I'm a bit of an impatient person and I always want everything to happen right away... I'm trying to break myself of that habit. And finally the reason for all the POV switches is because I felt that you readers would not be able to get the full picture without being able to see what everypony else's info feed.

Thanks for the helpful review.

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Why would this story need a 'Random' tag? Because I can't tell and my betas are lazy good for nothing mooching off the cash I'm paying them to help me produce stories/chapters.

6082303 Eh sorry about the long wait. Writer's Block is a bitch. Don't worry though a few more tweaks and the next chapter should be up (hopefully) soon.

So. References so far: ASDF, Harry Potter, Doctor House(?), and Minecraft.

6437892 Yes those are references... But they're not the hidden ones... Tough luck try again... and House? 0_o Where? To my knowledge (unless one of my alt personalities added it in) I've made no references to that mad doctor!

6093822 Lol sorry I've been gone for so long! In case you don't read my blogs/poems, My friend Lirianna died from cancer a few months ago in a sudden relapse. So I quit Fimfiction for a while to morn for her. I then unfortunately had a relapse of my own and fell into a deep depression. I'm back now (obviously) thanks in no small part to Fable Linked (Formly SUBJECT-XVI of Fanfiction. We got tired of accidently popping onto each other's site), Ermis Green, Amanda Green, and My loving Girlfriend.

Anywho I lost the Doc that I was going to post for this story's next chapter. Once I find it It's immediately being uploaded! So wish me luck! My room is rekt!

6606983 lol thanks I am too. I still miss Lirianna. But I can do a more for her memory by writing then I can moping about in a slaggy pile of waste! :moustache::trixieshiftleft:

6669250 Lol it's okay. And yeah she was great! A pervert and a shameless flirt even on her deathbed! She's probably in hell (Or wherever it is she ended up) right now tempting the angels to fall with her sexy ass body! Damn I miss that nut job! T-T ^-^ T-T

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