[Third Person] [World Building Exercize] [Stand Alone Story]
Long ago Equestria waged many wars of conquest to expand its borders. When word of Princess Luna's return reaches the distant Neighponeese Empire, Emperor Nori begins to fear for the future of his people. Worried that Equestria may end its thousand years of isolation and once again seek to expand its borders Emperor Nori invites the other world leaders to debate what course of action to take. Unfortunately, he is also visited by an uninvited guest.
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Whats the worldbuilding tag for.
I liked it overall, though I feel the whole cyborg dog was a bit of...I don't know...downgrade? I mean, you could have just avoided the whole human thing and just had the changelings or something be the spies for the council. Normally I enjoy HIE but this one left me with a meh. Overall well done but just not my cup of tea. Carry on.
Eh left a lot to be desired in the way of more story and point of story but it wasn't a bad story...
5587621 This story establishes lore for my AU. It's exposition disguised as entertainment.
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As the author's note said, this is more of an exposition dump then a story. All of my stories take place in he same AU. Think of this more like an opening cutsene, or that moment when a comic pans away fro a page or two to clue in the readers. It's here for me to point too later.
5641785 My brain is the Large Hydron Collider of fiction. Everything I read gets smashed together, broken into it's fundamental particles, and rebuilt into new things.
The worst man of the Final War, hmm? I seriously hope that he doesn't have access to certain war machines if it is the same Final War I'm thinking of...
This really is a great bit of world building. There isn't much story, but there's not supposed to be, like you said. And the background that it builds is great. I find myself rather curious how Celestia or Luna would react to learning of this awful Tribunal's actions and goals.
5690053 There may or may not be some inspiration taken from the works of David Webber. Bridesmaids 2 (Electric Boogaloo) will touch on Celestia's awareness of the Tribunal.
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I thought I detected a bit of Weber. The Final War ref was a subtle one.
5813515 Yeah, you can blame NFire for that one :P
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This explains some things from Across the Sea of Time. If I had listened to what you said to Mugen back in chapter 8, I wouldn't be playing catch up now.
So, the Admiral gets the outside nations to deal with the Tribunal. Later he gets to have "fun" with the ponies. Very clever.
did you misspell "apfelstrudel" on purpose
6002340 Yes I did. I spelled it given it's pronunciation to emphasize the accent being used.
6003166 its just that i am german and i didnt know what it was supose to mean.
6004022 Oh! I applogise if I offended you. That was not my intention. I lived in Welshbelig near Colone for 3 years, and while I learned to speak a little German, I never learned to read or write it.
6004081 A. You didn't offend me but
B. I don't want to be a grammar nazi (get it?) but I as a "echte kölsche jung"(real colognian guy) have the duty to tell you that you misspelled cologne. (p.s. I don't want to attack you personally, it's just something I HAD to say.) (p.p.s by the way good story)
6004196 Well naturally, I am illiterate in your homeland's language. Also great joke!
Why the fuck have I not read this?
Reading now
This raises more questions than it answers....
6050832 That was the point!
6050867 of course
Sovereign's Guild? Neat idea.
Heh, this would be really surprising world-building if I wasn't already familiar with the Tribunal from the main series. Oh, the errors of reading stuff out of order. I can see why the rest of the world was described later on as being somewhat vulture-like towards the war ravaged Equestria.
Oooo, the Admiral.
That was interesting, it pretty easily explains the state of the world we see later on and how it got that way.
6200715 It's okay! No one else read this ether XD
Wow that's a lot to take in.
This is some excellent world building and it pains me to say that there are not many other authors that attempt such a vast expansion of lore in any specific media. Although the MLP community tends to build way more than other fandom so there's that.
7034171 Thank you very much ^.^ I would like to thank my irrational love of the FiM World as the source of all my crazy nonsence >> I would also love to think readers like you for enjoying my sillyness :P
It really was an exposition dump, but a good one at that. So credit where credit is due.
know that I am late to the party but found these for you. Would like to see more of this story. By the way heard anything from Nfire lately we're both bolo fans.
find ways for the grate nations to assist lesser ones [great ]
clothing's minor wrinkles straitened out. [Straightened ]
expertly Celestia dose not even know I exist [does ]
“Yes, but not immanently [ Immediately ]
What a fun read. Who is that Admiral? Forgot to read through the comments first, I'll find out in one of the future stories... well future as in chronological order... I think? :\
You would be correct to think so. ^^
Ww2
7504385 He's alive, just realy realy buisy with IRL work stuff.
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Thanks for the info. If you happen to talk to him tell him that this old dragon and blackthunder were asking about him no reply from him expected.
OK. As you need a little boost I will now put this in the open comments. I left it off so I could see if any one else would catch it. after all this time if they haven't they aren't going to. you have a "Ming the Merciless" Are you going to add a Dash Gorgon or perhaps Flash Sentry would do?
I've been informed that these double as battlebanners with buffs in a pinch...or ritual components if you really need them too.
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yikes.
Well that was a tensely written council! Nicely done and pretty plausible!
This all leaves me curious about the Admiral, along with how much of this you used or scrapped for subsequent stories.
All in all, aside from the slightly dry beginning, twas quite well written!
I like this. I love this. There was a couple typos it took me a second to process, but I know you all try your best.
This one's goin on the shelf. :3