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It’s Celestia’s two thousand’s year old birthday celebration soon. It should be a happy week for everypony, right?

Well, it was... until the royal cooks received Celestia’s birthday cake request.

Cover art made by: Ric-M

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Huh... nice little story, good job.

Heh...
This was fun. Perhaps a bit short, but it was enjoyable nonetheless.
Well done. :raritywink:

Ha! This was great, and the royal cake bakers were hilarious.

It was written well enough, and I didn't see any obvious errors, but I'm not sure what the Comedy tag was really for. There were no jokes.
The last line was just a reason. A perfectly logical one in fact.

5587485 I'm glad you liked it!

5587810 Thanks!

5587608 We all have different opinions:twilightsmile: Thanks for reading my story though!

It was alright. You need to look for an editor to take a look at your next fic to polish it up. The chefs' dialogue seems a little unnatural and I'd like to know how they knew Pinkie Pie, but besides that, there's not anything majorly wrong with it. I liked the joke at the end and, honestly, any pic with Celestia eating is cute (for some reason) so I really have to give you points for that cover.

If the royal cooks in Canterlot knows how to contact Pinkie Pie in case of cake/cupcake/sweets emergency, I wonder if the other ponies in Equestria have a similar system as well?

:pinkiehappy:: I'm always here to help!

I'll take that as a "yes".

Mix suddenly realized something. An alternate way.

Twilight looked confused. “Do you know why?”

Move down a line.
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She’s the element of laughter,

Cap.
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Cute fic.

Um... So the alternate way was to make Pinkie Pie have a sugar rush?

Otherwise the story was kinda story. Good but boring. Sorry man.

Layer held his hoof forward indicating Flour to seize talking

Should be "cease"

I like how you tie all of your stories in a neat bow tie at the end! Like in the heaven one, Twilight said "get your spacesuit" of something like that! I really enjoy reading your fics :pinkiehappy:

5703644 Thanks! It makes me happy other people enjoy reading my stories:pinkiesmile:

5704383 Your welcome! I'm glad I discovered them! I had them in my read later list for weeks, and I decided to finally read them last night :pinkiesmile::rainbowlaugh:

Really funny. Cake problem is solved with Pinkie Pie. And they discuss if they will be send to the moon. Hahahaha!

6077545 Indeed! The only sane solution to an insane problem is insanity:pinkiehappy:

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Yes. Extrem situations need extrem solutions.

Flour rubbed the back of her head again. She then released a nervous laugh. “Umm… well… it’s kind of a holiday for us since it’s two days until the princess’s two thousand’s birthday. The plan was to start baking one week ago”

*thousandth

After shaking for a few seconds, Flavour answered. “Yes. It’s our only choice.”

Who is Flavor?

Layer turned to her, slightly surprised. “Oh, princess Twilight.” He bowed. Not long after, he stopped.

Titles should be capitalized.

Layer suddenly remembered. “Yes, she helped us with the cakes… a lot. Loads of thanks to her by the way. Although, I think she’s at home, resting.” Twilight looked confused. “Do you know why?”

There should be a seperate paragraph for this.

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