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A thousand years ago the princesses both had a devoted pupil. A special spell had been placed upon these students by those loyal to them. If ever a princess should be incapacitated, than the spell would place that princess's student into stone until the princess regained their position. When this spell was originally created, it was merely thought to be a method of keeping the student under the control, it was never thought that one of the two princesses would ever actually be incapacitated, that is until princess Luna was banished to the moon.


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Excellent job, and tracking. The story has got promise. Keep it up!

this chapter title is miss leading

Thank you very much for commenting, I'll do my best to match your interest.

I agree with gnome and martias. This story has an great concept and a lot of promise.
Receive my mustaches:moustache::moustache:

I gladly accept and thank you for them. I hope to live up to your expectations

Very nice start on a very unique concept.
I think I'm going to enjoy this.:pinkiehappy:

So....that's why she was sent to the moon:rainbowlaugh:rainbowlaugh:

LoL at the moon being time out:facehoof:

I found the reason to send Luna to the moon to be a bit... ludicrous... It had me laughing! :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

Before story:Lemme guess, Discord is Luna's student?

After reading a few sentences : Discord isn't Luna's student :fluttercry:

Almost halfway through and first mistake: "Of course being one of the only ponies still awake during the night didn’t give me many opprotunities to practice, so it hasn’t really gotten much better." It's opportunities :twilightsheepish:

Finished the first chapter: Well well well. I feel REALLY sad for Dusk. really really really really really :raritydespair: :raritycry: bad. :fluttercry: :applecry: :ajsleepy: :pinkiesad2: WHY DID IT HAVE TO HAPPEN TO DUSK WHY WHY WHY HWY HHWYWHWYYH YWYWHWYY Y? I LOVED DUSK IN THIS STORY! WAAAAA

Edit: Also, tracked and liked, :pinkiehappy:

okay, so this story is from the POV of a very confused stallion! the term for a male foal is colt, and when there is a male and a female together the term is foals.
I'm sorry for being nitpicky, but this caught my attention.:scootangel:

Thank you for the correction, I'll do my best to correct them.

Don't worry about it, I'm actually rather nitpicky myself, so any help correcting it welcome.

Wut? Wut? Whatwasthat? Time out? Whattheidonteven. Bookmarking.


Very interesting start im looking forward to the next chapters. Also loved how he is related to pinkie pie that will be interesting to read about when he wakes up in the next thousand years. The sleeping thing seemed more harsh than anything. :rainbowwild:

So he was stoned?
Hope he had a good time.

I liked the idea. It's a nice concept to have Luna having a student and the connection to Pinkie and Twilight ought to make for some good scenes between the past and present.
Only problem: Was the scene that would explain Luna's banishment supposed to be a joke or is that really what you're going to go with? Kinda kills the mood of the story when you're being serious then BOOM "TO THE MOON, YOU'RE HIGHNESS!"
I get that you're trying to get to his reawakining 1000 years later as soon as possible, but doing that scene as it was supposed to be would have kept the flow of the mood of the story smooth and not rushed.

550546
At the moment I am going with it, but I can see your point and if I find some time I might go back and add a little more to the transition to make it fit better. Thank you very much for the thoughts. Like I said, suggestions are greatly welcomed.

this makes more sense than th' original story.

:flutterrage:I DEMAND MOAR!!!:fluttershyouch:I mean, if that's OK with you.

that does not make sence to me Celesita sent luna when she was still luna:trollestia:

the reasoning for 1000 years of banishment is ludicros but i love the story. keep it up :moustache:

AHAHAHA a timeout! That has got to be the best original Mare in the Moon take EVER! +1 good sir :rainbowlaugh:

I'm sorry, but I was just wondering when the next one is coming out. i know this is a pretty new fanfic, so I would understand if the next chapter required me to continue to wait.:duck:Anyway, good job on the fanfic. Accept my congrats smiles.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I'm working on the chapter and with any luck it should be out by Saturday. Thank you for all the Pinkies.

:flutterrage:NOOOOO! MOAR NAOW!!!!!:fluttershyouch:Please.

Man, would he be pissed if he find out the real reason for Luna's time out.

Twilight has one big purple star surrounded by 5 smaller stars not 6

Fixed it.
Didn't realize that, thanks for the information.

The first thing I would have done is get a megaphone and screamed in Trollestias ear as loudly as possible.

Anyway, Thanks Myworld93. Awesome story by the way. I can't wait to read the next one.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Honestly, if it wasn't for the fact that is guy is from Pinkie's family...I would be questioning how he stayed sane-ish all this time...

Oh crap...I can already see the insanity thats going to fly once he sees Luna again...or Celestia for that matter, this guy needs some payback.

i see funny in th' near future.

A pretty interesting story, can't wait to see how it's all going to turn out!

That being said I find Celestia's Behavior irksome. Sends sister to the moon for hitting her with a pillow? A student gets encased in stone for 1000 years and she's smiling about it? What gives? I'm guessing that theres a reason behind that, and it will be revealed in due time. But for right now Celestia's itching for some comeuppance in my book.

Other than that? Great story! I'm liking the perspective and character.

I feel so bad for Dawn. :fluttercry: So unfair, so bad. SO BAD I TELL YOU! :flutterrage:

I'm loving this story.

Like Ice cream.

I love Ice cream

I hope that he gets to meet Pinkie and Twilight

love the quick update

Woot! Update! :yay:

I'm not sure if I should feel sorry for Celestia or just laugh at her, but I'm really looking forward to the insainty these two are coming up with :pinkiecrazy: .

yes. all of mine.

HA!
I LOVE THIS STORY!
HA!
BYE BYE!
HA!

Man, despite everything...Dawn really has bad luck, makes me wonder if he could even survive half the crap that has happened in this if he wasn't a Pie.

Also...THE PIES HAD COLLIDED! PREPARE YOURSELVES! THE MADNESS HAS ONLY JUST BEGAN! :pinkiehappy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy:

Pinkie has family who're similar to her...

to quote Iron Maiden, "RUN FOR THE HILLS!"
*EPIC GENTLMAN RUNAWAY*


and i'm not sure if i like what you did to Rainbow Dash.

613479
Out of curiosity, what don't you like about it?

613489 well, for th' most part, you've stuck to th' storyline, only changing what was needed for your story. now, there's a major, blatant change in one of th' mane 6 that dosen't seem to even have anything to do with th' story.

613497
Ah I think I understand, unfortunately the reason won't show up for awhile. I hope it doesn't put people off too much. Thanks for the feedback.

I like how you made Rainbow a 'Night Pegasus'.:twilightsmile:

A pie with a pie. This'll be...interesting.
I assume the rest are blowing off Pinkie's rants as pinkie being pinkie?

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