Your Human and you: Fight for Freedom

From a business owner and engineer. to political and tribe leader. This is the life of Chris Rodriguez, Owner of Rodriguez Tech. and it chief engineer, But during a final test run of his teleporter, his was sent to Equestria, where bipedal ponies are the one in charge and humans are nothing but beasts of burden and pets. When he learn the true however he vows to change this and give his kind the freedom they deserve, but he realizes how futile fighting will be so instead he'll use a skill that is often overlooked for shotgun diplomacy, his words
A story of law, politics, and very little fighting A more peaceful fight for freedom that some other YHAY story I read The Regular idea came from beowwulf and a YHAY Theard
this noncanon to Your human and you
Yhay was created by MadMaxtheBlack

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Eon333MS

Eon333MS #1 · Sep 25th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Interesting but I think it needs a litte more work, better pacing and paragraphing.

“Let Me Go DAD!!!!!!” he was able to slip past them and ran to the thing with tears in he eyes
“No dad don’t dead you're the best you can’t die!”
“he just saw his dad die we can’t just tear him away,”
“ I don’t care, Get that kid off the field !”
“NOOOOO DAD DON’T DIE!”

Around here I started to notice some grammatical errors. I'm too tired right now to write more.

Kindabrony

Kindabrony #2 · Sep 25th, 2015 · · ·

6460048 know anyone good with grammar and punctuation to help me edit?

Eon333MS

Eon333MS #3 · Sep 25th, 2015 · · ·

6460675 No I don't all I can suggest is that you keep looking around the editors group and other related groups for help.

I stabs you

I stabs you #4 · Nov 6th, 2015 · · ·

MOAR!!!!!!

nighters

nighters #5 · Nov 6th, 2015 · · ·

ooo politics the plot intensifies! I hope this doesn't turn into a total war feast maybe riots, fights and hate crimes it expected since change is hard to accept for some. lets see how it goes.

SilverFlash

SilverFlash #6 · Dec 3rd, 2015 · 2 · ·

It doesnt matter about, plot, grammer, pacing, as you have already won. Why? Because your second name is Rodriguez, so you must be somehow related to Rico Rodriguez, which therefore means you are an immortal physics defying god of chaos.

TheSpaceDuck