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I am on the verge of tears due to the simultaneous, sadness, joy and the beauty of this.
A rare feat indeed.
An interesting concept.
Short, sweet, and awesome. The only issue I see from reading through once involves inconsistent capitalization of proper nouns, but that's about it. Nice work!
Very nice creation myth... thing. Sadly it is very short, so the emotional punch I felt was not that heavy, since there was no real builtup and no way to truely care about the characters (especially dog, I think you assumed we would all project "our" god here, but since I am an atheist I had a hard time giving him his "background".). This means that I only just now managed to see him as what makes most sense: A father loving his children even though they never did any good. A father still mourning the passing of his children even though he had every reason to hate them. Had you given this impression some more time to grow it woul have mattered much more when he revealed he had passed his power on to Luna and Celestia.
Still, very well written and very creative. I like the unconventional twist here.
Have 5 Stars and my compliments.
I don't understand it, but I kind of like it.
...wow. If it was little longer, it would be damn near perfect.
SHUT UP AND TAKE MY 5 STARS, DAMN YOU!
Interesting idea.
Less touching when you weren't raised Christian and aren't conditioned to accept anything referencing it as automatically deep and profound. Kinda provincialist, could've at least tried to be a bit more universally applicable.
WAT DA FAQ I JUST READ??
7985322 Twilight just had a short chat with God.
This has been an interesting read—and let me just state that I’m an atheist. What I really like about this story is that while it has its flaws—lack of capitalization of names and I, and also some pretty rough sentences—it still offers some food for thought, as well as some rather nice lore about the best forest.