• Member Since 25th Mar, 2012
  • offline last seen Oct 6th, 2014

Nicolasmandias


E
Source

Times are changing, Harmony is at its best and Equestria is in peace. But this balance cannot last. Discords Escape was the last sing Princess Luna needed to make her decision, her sister needs help.

To keep peace through the land Luna seeks the help of three ponies, convincing them to help by one way or the other, these new found companions must overcome beasts and enemies to maintain peace trough the kingdom.

This is but the beginning of the journey, one filled with adventure, fun, love, might and magic (in all of its ways). This is the tale of how Macintosh, Trixie and Derpy Hooves became the Princess’s right hoof and heroes of Equestria.

-----------


Chapter 1: How the apple met the night. (told mostly from Mac's perspective)

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 16 )

Standard adventure fic... although not including the Mane 6... interesting. *strokes chin*
Thats very interesting.

Nah, Jk. Ive seen this hundreds of times before.
Ill check it out to see if its any good.

Interesting, althought there are gramatical errors here and there. I hope you continue this.

Just like Azkhare said, i do see grammatical errors. However, i DO like this story, also like that image.

black ops pony style? I like it more please :rainbowkiss:

This was very good, i can't wait to see what's next,

Hmmmm an adventure fic NOT including the Main 6?, unusual...

Well i can't wait to see more

Question about the picture, was it made in spirit for this fic or was it vice versa? And in either case, does this mean we can expect Spike to join?

(Also, I have to make an obligatory reference. Big Mac, Trixie, and Derpy are... Luna's Angels!)

Very promising start. You get a favourite and some thumbs from me. :moustache:

(Removes thumbs and throws them at screen)

Good start, here. Almost like Nick Fury. ;)

Very nice, looking forward to more :)

another Chapter awesome. now with 100% more :trixieshiftleft:

This one was a little muddled compared to chapter one... but that's likely due to the differance of Trixie's last appearance to her now as opposed to Big mac who is pretty much the same as always. Maybe it's that in more redempted trixie stories follow the redemption as opposed to have it as a footnote. I can't put my finger one exactly why it's not clear it just seems like all the various background info you wanted to cram in there tripped over itself a bit... in the end I understand everything you wanted to pass on but it was just a little rough.

Good to see more of this though, I'm LOVING the concept and can;t wait to see it really get rolling. now I wonder if Derpy will be getting a chapter next or will she be further down the line so Trixie and Mac can get a mission in. Interesting either way

ps - I normally don't notice grammar but this one stuck out to me
"This knowled brought her peace..." I'm sure you meant Knowledge there

I saw a few errors... Im guessing typos, but "knew" was used lot and "this" was used wrong. Not having english as a first language, so it is huge for me that i noticed... "know" could replace a few "knew"s and "these" instead of "this"

This was a realy good story,can't wait for more =)

PS: Did you want hunt or hawnt? : The ghosts of her past hawnt her...

Stop writing clever chapters when I'm too tired to follow what's going on. After a forced nap though, I can say that was excellent :D

This chapter turned out quite long, and I'm not sure how happy I am with it yet. So I hope you like it.

And in case some of you go 'too long didn't read' here goes a small summary.
- Mac is considering if he should accept the deal princess Luna offered him before.
also, has an encounter with Rarity, gets to know better Tinder (that guard that was with the princess) and Luna herself.

That's about it, thanks for reading now and all those who did before.
(also, I did try to write better, grammatically speaking; but if you come across an error, which I hope is unlikely, just let me know and I'll get it done)

nice chapter glad you updated it can't help but feel a spark growing between luna and macintosh

this story is turning out to be quite good Macin'Luna! :yay:

Login or register to comment