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“This wine is too good for toast-drinking, my dear. You don't want to mix emotions up with a wine like that. You lose the taste.”

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Rainbow Dash is the Element of Loyalty. It's her title, her honor, her life. She's supposed to be the most faithful, reliable, dependable, trusted pony in all of Equestria. And when an unexpected pegasus pays Dash a visit,at first she is thrilled. But when her loved one slowly begins to fit into her close-knit circle of friends, Dash finds herself feeling left out, and her loyalties being put to the test. And if there's one thing that she realizes, it's that nopony gets under your skin like family.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 25 )

Pretty good.
Some grammatical issues. Are you sure u have mind the "." [i.] [./] ?
Overall
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i had the same problem :pinkiesmile: it is very interesting also i noticed you put pegasuswas it is like this pegasus was

you put the italic sign down then click in the middle then type what you want then click out of it :pinkiehappy:

Glad to be of some kind of help :derpytongue2:

still a few grammar errors here and there but good so far

you are getting better at this i saw 2 grammar errors awesome job:derpyderp2:

awesome i did not see anything

Wait, this is complete? No offense, but that ending was anti-climatic to say the least. There's too many questions left unresolved. What's Rainbow Dash going to do? Will her friends forget about her an replace her with Lightning? This story can't be complete just yet. Or if it is then you have to have a sequel.

"But you have you realize that breaking your wing on that cliff was much better than the alternative. I mean…if something were to happen to you, I don't know what I—we would do. So be glad you're still alive, Rainbow Dash." Then she whispered faintly so Dash wouldn't hear, "I know I am."

Am I sensing a hidden Twidash in this story? :trixieshiftright:

Let's see what happens when RD does go up to apologize.

594249 I would forgive her then punch her for pay back :rainbowdetermined2:

I have noticed a lack of comments. As a fellow author, I know how annoying that can be.

So, here goes nothing.

That was an amazing chapter, I can't wait to see what happens next. Just as a comparison, if this was happening to me, I would have given up along time ago. This story is fantastic.

Manly tears.
Almost shed.

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Thank you good sir, for the comment and the kind words. Five days man, five days without a siingle comment. How have I managed to survive?!?!?! I have slowly lost my mind?!?!?!?!?!!??!?!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!
So yeah...thanks again.:rainbowkiss:

Great ending! Wrappep up nicely.

Clap clap? or Clop clop whatever
AWESOME STORY

So is this story complete now?

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Oh yeah, I forgot to change that.

Yeah why is nopony commenting on this story?
It's Awesome ooh ooh I could send it round to everypony I know so they read it

Will there be an action packed sequel where Lightning and Dash are ambushed in Mare-acaibo by the towns occupants?? :rainbowhuh:

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Do what you want, man. I'm just surprised people are still reading this considering I posted it in May.

1822040 I found it whilst looking through the Rainbow Dash category
I pick a page at Random (eg 102) and see what good stories are there

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