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Thank you so much for the kind comments! I hope you find Chapter Two just as enjoyable!

Love this story, love it a lot

Yes, the continuation works quite well. I love how Twilight is in an emotional upheaval over what she's doing, because it feels very much in character for her. Twilight is, in fact, deeply emotional. She is sometimes shown to be in control, but usually that is in regards to situations when she knows what she's doing, and/or have her friends backing her up. When she's undertaking something new that she can't get help with or find a book for, she tends to break down. (In fact, her control freak attitude with checklists and whatnot is a defense mechanism more than anything.) So her freaking out over doing something that could get her into a world of trouble (and thank you for not brushing that under the carpet with a "princesses can do whatever they want"), not to mention potentially making a pony hate her, is entirely in character. In fact, had she approached the whole ordeal with calm determination like it wasn't a big deal, I would have dropped the story right off. That's not Twilight, and there are limits to how much "alternate character interpretation" you can do before you've gone fully out of character.

This is also supported when Twilight's subsequent dialogue (well, technically monologue - Trixie doesn't get to say very much) makes it clear that she's deeply concerned for Trixie's well-being and happiness, well above her own satisfaction. Despite her social shortcomings, Twilight is a genuinely caring individual, and doesn't really think that her princess status makes her better than others (a fact sadly often ignored by some writers), so she wouldn't want to take advantage of Trixie beyond what Trixie would be okay with.

I'll be honest, I can't really see Twilight being dominant in a larger scope (she's always seemed more like an egalitarian), but it works in the scope of a temporary game, a little roleplaying with a partner who she is confident is enjoying it as well. Even then, I expect her to be deeply flustered and worried what others will think if they find out. (And possibly turned on by that.) I also hope they'll trade roles now and then. I've been told it's the healthy thing to do in these sorts of thing, and Twilight did admit to liking it as well.

All in all, it's interesting, in character, and executed well with consideration to the small but important issues. Unless it takes a drastically wrong turn later, I continue to approve.

This is great. I saw almost started reading this story several times when I saw it in Twixie groups, but the fact it hadn't been updated since 2015 always pushed it down my reading list. Now that it seems to be alive again I decided to give it a try and I am truly glad I did. While I enjoyed just about everything in this chapter, what I'm really curious about now is who it was that caught Twilight. My immediate reaction would be to suspect Celestia or Rarity, though Luna or Fluttershy also seem to be real possibilities. I suppose Cadence would also make a lot of sense, though i did't think of her until I started writing this. Either way, I'm excited to read more of this and just wanted to let you know how much I was enjoying it.