Pinkie told Rainbow Dash there was a surprise in the basement. It's a cake, hidden where nopony else will find it. Or her.
A parody of Edgar Allen Poe's "The Cask of Amontillado" written for EQD's More Most Dangerous Game Contest.
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I remember reading "The Cask of Amontillado" back in my freshman year of high school, and if this story is as dark as the original, then . . . oh man.
-1 for not using the word 'fettered',
... yeah I don't really mean that; I green-thumbed it,
Phew! You snuck this one in last minute!
I might have a review of it up sometime in the future.
This is amazing.
Dammit, man! I was almost about to say that this was better than the original version by Poe! Because if you add in Pinkie's style of speaking, which you did a great job of weaving into the narrative, with the implications of her actions, it's truly a terrifying prospect. But alas, you wrote a comedic ending. I'm not going to say this is a bad story, not in a long shot, but if you had gone with a darker ending, it would have been chilling.
In terms of Poe's writing style, I think that it would have been really, really hard to even come close to mimicking his style when you are writing Pinkie as a main character. So don't think too hard about it.
I didn't actually count:
The number of chuckles that issued forth from my gullet, but I'm fairly certain it was more than two. Wonderfully silly, PP! Now I'm thinking I'll hafta do a version of "The Raven" where it's Spike complaining about Owlowiscious for my poetry collection.
Mike
That was a nice little fun story. Thank you PP. I am not familiar with the original, but I don't think that affected anything!
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The whole point of writing this is that you can't get as dark as the original if your characters are ponies. For the story that inspired me to write this, I was waiting for Rarity to find the rear exit to the cellar Applejack trapped her in. It needs a comedic ending, I just decided to make the whole thing a sendup at the same time.
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I'm sure it'll be better than this. XD Glad you enjoyed.
5547533
This is good to know, thank you! :D
Nice work on this. Poe was a master of language so you shouldn't be too hard on yourself if you feel like you didn't mimic him well enough. I think you did a very good job. I doubt you'll need much luck in the contest with this entry, but good luck anyway. It was a fun read.
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I know who I'm up against: I haven't a hope of placing. But that's okay. :D
Either "your screams" or "you scream."
Good work, got some laughs out of Pinkie Poe.
An enjoyable read, especially the interplay of Poe and Pie in the narrative voice. Thank you for it.
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Looks like I updated the document without actually updating the story. <.< Thanks.
This sentence needs to be fixed. I'm pretty sure "a feature I'd wager" or something similar; this just doesn't look right to me, even in fake Poe-ese.
Anyway, I ended up chuckling at this, but I'm not sure if people who aren't familiar with The Cask of Amontillado will find it quite as amusing. But it made me smile, at least.
This is awesome, I've read a bunch of the Cupcakes parodies already. Some of them were great stories, and some of them really fit as an homage to Cupcakes, but I feel this is the one that really does both. Somehow you made Pinkie try to murder Rainbow Dash, but it didn't really feel OOC for her, and I still can't figure out how you pulled that off.
Poe turns in his grave...
and I liked it
Heh. Reminds me of the alternate ending for Cupcakes.
Lolwat
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.
5553793
I work for Equestria Daily, I know full well what goes into posting, and that this is not good enough.
Ministrations! Ministrations!
He used the secret word!!!
(This is totally a thing now - right up there with 'fibrous nuggets'.)
I wrote a review of this story. It can be found here.
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inb4 Not Recommended :B
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(For the record, I gave it a worth reading)
Ah, that ending.
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Beaten by Bad Horse, but not bad for something I wrote and edited in a day. :B
Damn...this was really good! I really liked this. Damn...you had me creeped out a little there with regards to pinkie but the ending got me laughing. Thank you!
-frost
This was a fun read. Pinkie's perspective is so easy to get into. You don't seem too crazy about this story judging by your comments, but the voice and pacing are both really strong, I think!
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Much obliged. :) I just know that it could have been better had I decided to write it sooner.
Is it wrong that I think it's hilarious that you're a Fimfic admin who has written 51 stories, yet knighty, THE CREATOR OF THIS SITE OF WRITING MLP FANFICTION, has written a whopping ZERO stories?
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He's not a writer, just someone who wanted to help out writers. :B And I'm not an admin.
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Knighty wrote some stories. They're just too glorious for the feeble eyes of us mere FiM Fic plebes.
Er, whoops?
You mean, "mould"? Or is this an American thing?
Well, sir, you succeeded.
Sorry it took me so long.
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Not just an American thing.
A FREEDOM THING
Fun read. I'd probably get more out of it had I read either of the two Cask stories, but c'est la vie I suppose.
Nice parody. You have the tone of the original down very nicely, and it was rather amusing.
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Imitation seems to be one of my few talents. :B Thank you!
I can't resist: "The cake is a lie."
5546542 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hxzWE_0EPtg
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Aw you beat me to it
FOR THE LOVE OF GOD MONTRESSOR!
hehehe
that stunned realization right there at the end is perfect
present
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And you said you were bad at comedy. :V
I agree6576634 whatever future progressive
I love your explanation for Pinkie's speech being all poe-fied. Great characterization there.
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thankya :D
The first paragraph had me hooked, and it only got better from there.
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:D