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Two friends descend onto the Royal Canterlot Magic University seeking fun, friendship, and and maybe an education, if they have time. They are joined by one Manifest Destiny, the first earth pony to attend the prestigious college in history. Together these three will explore their world's, finding a place in life for them. Only time will tell what will happen, but they'll try their best to have some fun along the way!

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1 - As Goes Canterlot · 13th May 2012 · 2,788 words
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2 - So goes Equestria · 13th May 2012 · 4,689 words
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mau5! #1 · May 4th, 2012 · · · 1 - As Goes Canterlot ·

DUDe this is epic it's like you wrote with weeedd and opium \sperm keep it up!

friendly100

friendly100 #2 · May 4th, 2012 · · · 1 - As Goes Canterlot ·

1) You should probably get an editor. I spotted too many small errors that I'm not going to bother posting them here, but if you want I'd be glad to help you out.
2) So Manni is orphan pony? I ask because I'm not smart on these affairs, so it seems a little too subtle to me. :\
"What? Didn't your parents have anything to say about that?"

Manni's frame further drooped as he turned his head, eyes locked on a knot in the plank floor.

Alchy's eyes bulged as realization dawned upon her. Glancing over at Grey she saw that he had gotten it too.

3) Awesome story!

4) You did a really great job of not only introducing the characters, but building them up as well. I can't wait to see what dynamics you have in store!

Zorotokon

Zorotokon #3 · May 4th, 2012 · · · 1 - As Goes Canterlot ·

543572 I have five editors. If something got thru them, it was probably a stylistic choice and not an actual error. Thank you for your comment, and yes, Manni is an orphan. I specifically downplayed it because it's a real bummer, man, and it was more realistic for the characters to avoid going in depth.

friendly100

friendly100 #4 · May 4th, 2012 · · · 1 - As Goes Canterlot ·

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They do seem to be more of a stylistic choice than anything else. And it does add a nice piece of realism having the characters avoid digging into Manni's personal life. It's really just that I'm not quite good at picking up on subtle hints in writing, without getting a second opinion. Thanks!

friendly100