Black Eye, a name that had begun to strike fear in the hearts of those who new they were targets for bounty hunters in the Wastelands. And for good reason. But now, he gives up his job to pursue the one who had almost killed him.
I would suggest leaving a line between paragraphs though it just looks neater.
That. I would definitely recommend to do that. Otherwise readers may get the wall-of-text-to-the-face feeling and that makes many go away. Spacing is important.
5547892 It looks much better now. Although some of the paragraphs are still a bit big. 5-6 lines are good for a paragraph and look professional. 8-9 still look a bit wall-of-text-like.
5547916 I don't know why you ask me, but I think so. If you've got anymore questions, check this out. The wiki often helps to clear things like this up. Oh and since I'm already here, you should take a look at our FIMfiction Survival Guide for FoE writers.
5547952 Alright, I've just spent a good chunk of my day reading up on the dos and don'ts, and I have a general idea on how I should go about writing the rest of my story. Since you would know more about the cliches and things to avoid, please let me know if I'm straying to close to a very, very cliched story. I've had experience writing stories in the past, and I'd rather not screw Black Eye over in this one.
That. I would definitely recommend to do that. Otherwise readers may get the wall-of-text-to-the-face feeling and that makes many go away. Spacing is important.
5547652 I'm not mistaken in that Junction R-7 is actually a town, right?
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It looks much better now. Although some of the paragraphs are still a bit big. 5-6 lines are good for a paragraph and look professional. 8-9 still look a bit wall-of-text-like.
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I don't know why you ask me, but I think so. If you've got anymore questions, check this out. The wiki often helps to clear things like this up.
Oh and since I'm already here, you should take a look at our FIMfiction Survival Guide for FoE writers.
5547952 Alright, I've just spent a good chunk of my day reading up on the dos and don'ts, and I have a general idea on how I should go about writing the rest of my story. Since you would know more about the cliches and things to avoid, please let me know if I'm straying to close to a very, very cliched story. I've had experience writing stories in the past, and I'd rather not screw Black Eye over in this one.