"Hey there" The cerulean blue mare said in a calm tone of voice. Everything you could think of was frozen by the sound of her crisp and sweet voice. You felt your cheeks burn and your heart melt at the tone of the pegasus' voice. Everything on your face displayed the signs that you liked her, so much so that if it wasn't for your control, you would...
"Hello? Anybody home?" Rainbow Dash said in a more annoyed voice than her previous introduction. That very tone snapped you out of your fantasies and reminded you that you were on the job; you couldn't flirt with her just yet. You took a deep breath and prepared to serve and work.
"Hello there, welcome to the shop. How may I help you?" Your sound was relaxed, calm, professional after you took that one deep breath. Your thoughts started to focus on your work and less upon the pony you have always dreamed about. Despite how obvious your face showed that you like her, she didn't appear to be affected at all. You were not complaining about that though; the less she knew right now, the better.
"I'd like to order three coffees to go please. A few of my friends have to go to the rainbow factory to make sure everything is running smoothly." Easy enough, three coffees, one of the easiest drinks to make. You set right to work on making the drinks while the polychromatic mare worked through her saddlebags for a few bits. After two minutes you pumped out all three drinks flawlessly, a much better routine then your test run. You took all three drinks and set them in front of the pony of your dreams. The thought of satisfying not only your first customer but also the mare of your wildest fantasies made you smile as wide as Pinkie Pie herself!
"That'll be five bits" You pronounce. She gladly shoved the bits closer to you which you failed to notice. You blush slightly but take them and put them in the register with ease.
"Thank you" Rainbow announced in a friendly manner, her voice sending waves of relaxation throughout your body.
"Please come again" Rainbow smiled at you. Goodness, she was smiling at you! You felt the smile on your own face grow at the sight. Your dream mare was smiling at you! The pure excitement of seeing that smile sent your heart into a pounding fit.
"I think I might. See you soon" Rainbow walked out of the store just as she walked in, relaxed, slow, and overall amazingly. Everything about her was amazing to you. Her powerful hind-legs showed off their muscular power with every step she took. That tail which swished around, the way her cutie mark glowed. Everything about her was just as you imagined her to be! She was out the door and turned to the left. Celestia's sun was barely starting to rise with its rays of beautiful gold already beaming across the land. Rainbow just fitted perfectly with that sun, everything about her was shown in uncensored detail in the sunlight; it almost looked like she was glowing.
When you saw the last bits of her tail leave your line of view, you let out a great sigh of relief and fulfillment. You severed your first customer, who happened to be your dream mare, which was rewarded in her smiling at you and possibly going back to your shop! Silver Java was going to be so-
"I'm amazed" That was fast of her to say; you were just thinking that. You turned around to see that Silver had a warm smile plastered onto her grey lips. You were thankful she was not using that other tone of voice on you today. "Generally, ponies are more normal when they are on the job for the first they. Guess your species has a lot more confidence than I previously thought. You are on the job fully now" Add impressing your boss to the list as well. This day was perfect! "You served one customer, but I say in about thirty minutes you will need some help." You thought of that as well. This was just one customer. Soon you would have to deal with a least thirty at a time. You showed no fear though.
"I will not fail you Silver Java!" You made a salute to her which only made her smile blossom. You felt her hoof punch your stomach lightly.
"Don't grow so cocky. You may be surprised at how hectic it get when the crowds start to pour into the shop." In the back of your head, you were scared on how you would handle everypony's request. Would you crack? What if you messed up and order? What if you injured a pony by accident? Wh- No! You were not going to mess up! You served the pony you loved flawlessly. How hard could it be to serve thirty ponies? Right? "I will be here to help you though. Even Spoony himself needed the help. So don't worry." her friendly manner of voice put the rest of your mind at ease. Silver smiled again before leaving you to your business.
This was going to be a long day, but you could only get better. You looked over your tools again, recited the recipes in your head, and pretended you were serving a drink. you were ready for this crowd.
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Four in the afternoon was the time you would get out of your shift. You had ten minutes left. You were holding yourself up on the counter. Eyes were starting to droop shut. That crowd drove every ounce of energy out of your body. The constant talking, the endless order, even their bright and wondrous colors all added up to one killer headache. Your head was pulsing on rhythm. It was a metronome of pain and was not going to vanish any time soon.
Silver Java was faring much better than you. Your eyes drifted over her energized body; she looked like she actually gained energy from that rush all those hours ago and still had it! Her eyes wandered around until they looked into your very own. "Only eight more minutes. You did an amazing job today. I'm glad I picked you for the job, even though you were the only one that applied" She giggled a little; why was she? "Anyway, tomorrow isn't as bad since it will be the weekend. Not too many ponies then" Her demeanor was friendly throughout the day. You thought she lost the tone. That made you do a mental sigh of relief.
You took a breath. "It was great working today Silver Java." Your voice was much more raspy and tired. This day was a killer on your body, but it was almost over.
"I think you are going to make my shop the number one cafe in Ponyville" You felt your cheeks redden. Making the shop the most successful one in Ponyville was a compliment you never got your entire life. All you got was labeled. You thank her kindly after that. Then you saw the clock with an owl on it hit four. It made four dings within ten seconds. "Ah, time for your shift to end. I look forward to tomorrow. Have a great day." You returned her friendly words with your own then proceeded out the door. Your head buzzed with so many thoughts on your first day of work. Serving Rainbow Dash, impressing your boss, going through your first crowd rush, this day was perfect.
Once you heard the shop's door close, you looked around. It was four in the afternoon. There was plenty to do in Ponyville. What would be first? Only one way to find out. Your legs were carrying you. This town alone was beautiful. With it being filled with shops, recreation, homes, hospitals, and more. Nightclubs were yet to be open. Shops were starting to fill with ponies getting off of work. You made a mental note not to go into a shop at this hour. Ponies were smiling everywhere, walking the town on their own business. Some said hi to you and other just waved. You thought back to Earth. People there were hectic; always moving alone. They never stopped to say hi, nor did they smile. It was work and stress. Here it was peace and friendliness. How could Fox leave a world like this?
Around three hours past as you endlessly walked about the streets. The sun was starting set set in the distance and the moon's beams of white light would soon blanket most of the land into deep sleep. You made your way back to the apartment. Room 314. It might not be the house like you had in District 9, but it was still home. You went inside and found Zach just glowing with energy.
"Hey man! Today was just awesome!" Zach was shaking. Whatever happened to him must have made really happy.
"Oh really? I had a great day as well" Your voice was much more normalized now that you had a chance to rest when you were exploring Ponyville and saying high to a bunch of ponies.
"Well go on man! How was it?" You wondered if he would ever stop shaking. You began to recall the events of your job. You decided to surprise him a little by starting out with your first rush. He was sitting down more calmly as he listened to you pronounce how you did your first rush with no flaws. From there you told him about your boss' compliments. He was already smiling; yet when he heard that, it grew so much more. "Wow, that's awesome dude!"
"Let me tell you the best part. I got to serve Rainbow Dash. She was my first customer." You said this coolly, Hearing that made Zach jump out of his chair.
"No way!"
"Yes way. Best part is, she smiled at me and said she might come back." You were just smiling more and more as you recalled the memory.
"That is so freaking awesome dude! My day was just amazing. Okay, so..." He went on to retell the story of his work. It started out with him going on about how he was working at the library. He didn't seem like an egghead but he was. In the back of you head, you thought he was perfect for Twilight. He then went on to tell you all about how his work was mainly sorting things for her. He also had to check out a few books to a few regular clients his boss had. He was smiling and jumping as he told you all about it. You noticed his cheeks light up a little which made you smirk. He was talking about how his day was ending. Twilight apparently was just as impressed as Silver Java was. Zach was requested to come over to Twilight house. He cheeks lit up. "I said yes. I think she wants us to form a little book club. I mean, I am really excited, but I'm also nervous" You knew the feeling, so you told him just to relax and be himself. He smiled and hugged you.
Once you two broke off, you went into your bedrooms. Being one less member short meant the rent wouldn't be as high. Food charges were less. Everything was setting in. You had a job. You served Rainbow Dash, and made a few new acquaintances along the way. You thought things could only get better. Your thoughts drifted of you and Rainbow Dash being together and cuddling. You smiled as you fell asleep pretending you were hold her in your very own arms.
Really awesome chapter man! Welcome back to FimFiction to by the by!
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Its been too long and I need it now.
1845033 I'm happy for you. Would you care for a chat on Steam?
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I'm going to nap, so later.
1845075 Sleep well!
great chapter, love that its got an update now. things are turning out awesome and glad you got out of your funk hunterz.
this was awesome but i have to ask, don't you have an editor or proofreader or something hunterz? just curious to know because like a derp i had a brain fart and forgot a ton of things
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uh no... I do not have an editor. Everything is checked by me only.
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well that really sucks, what about at least a proofreader?
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None there either and personally I don't mind it.
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ah, sorry i asked i was having major brain farts all day after my power went kaput and i had to have my dad work that out sorry again if i troubled you by asking these silly questions
Great story dude, I love it!
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Hehe, thank you. I really still don't find it at all well-made. I must say that I do love the positive reception it has been getting. This is my first story. No way did I expect to get 766 views! That's insane! I am thankful for it however. I am not quite sure how long I will let this go, but people like you always get me in the mood to write! Thank you.
Dear lord. Thanks so much for writing this. XD I love reading fictions like this. Its one of the best fics i have ever read! Please update
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Oh my... one of the best ever? Impossible....
To be honest, when I started this story I was going on pure fantasy. There were no outlines, no ideas, just a goal. And yet, I made this one unique apparently. So, I ask you this.
Why do you like this story?
1939023 well good sir. I love a good Human In Equestria. I also love Rainbow dash so I happened to stumble upon your story one day. And I just read it. I like it because its a idea I haven't seen and also the possiblilty of this Mare he is working with taking away his dream mare Rainbow Dash. It just is great but if you need someone to edit it I could :p I was gonna write a story myself but didnt work out XD so yeah. But any idea when the next chapters coming?
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Finally! Someone that answers that question!
Okay, you say I have a unique idea. I'm not sure what it is beside Java taking 'you' away from RD. I have some future ideas for the story that may need some audience input on where it ends up... Let's just say, when humans start messing with guardians, things will start to go off balance... Hidden spoiler
Let me tell you, this story was rough when it came out. I had so much bad reception, yet slowly it became good. My tip is, keep writing. No matter how bad it seems, just keep going like what I did here.
I am planning on doing it this weekend. Now all I need to do is sit down and get some ideas flowing as well as re-read my own story!
1939146 Well my "opinion" XD is for the character/Me to be involved with both Java and Rainbow Dash, for instance me/Character figures out that both Java and Rainbow Dash are in love with him. Of course he liked both of them so its forced to make a difficult decision. Because both have good reasons to be his Mare friend for say. And this could lead to GREAT Cliff hangers that the readers would "love" ;) so other than that. you could have a instance where Java or Rainbow Dash is in trouble or something and that you save them which lead to Romance. XD Just my opinions!
Good luck on this. Ever need anything, talk to me brotha XD
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Drop me a watch now!!!
Okay, not so bad of an idea there; I actually had that in my head too (not the one where 'you' get both mares). I must say this story is more of everyday life than the 'big adventures and you are the hero that saves mares'. I do not plan on putting violence in here from chapter 3 on wards. First off, I'm not good at it and second of all, who in Equestria fights? Let alone in Ponyville.
I do have a "choice" system in play. The readers would be given two options and the comments would act as votes. Once enough are in, that branch is set from that point forward. The problem there however is feedback and trying to make it have real consequences
Wow dude, I need you on my watch list!
1939203 What I mean't by coming to the rescue was like...Idk...A ACCIDENT OR SOMETHIN
But yeah I DROP YOU A WATCH MAN! the Violence wasn't bad but I understand why you don't want it in there XD I love the idea of letting Readers decide. Very few authors I know do that :/ But yeah. This has great potential and it's coming along nicely. Thanks for watching me for I do have one story in progress XD (not going far) but yeah Keep writing man and Talk to me sometime. I get bored
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What type "accident" however?
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Nah, just kidding; there will be no clop... I think.
I am trying to write a Fallout: Equestria side story, but that is going horribly. Strange, I can write humans fighting each other for trying to get the Mane 6, but I can't write a story to my favorite book of all time. Strange.
The idea thing is a unique thing for me. I know I'm not the first, but for a story like this... I just feel like I am.
GET ME THAT STORY NOW!!!
1939275 Dude add me on steam! I GOT MA BRAIN FLOWIN WITH DE IDEAS!!! XD
Hello! I'm that guy you talked to on youtube. You asked me for my account, so... Here it is!
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Thanks dude! Anyway, how is it that my story is good?
I'ts hard to really say but, I just REALLY liked it! So far i see a lot of potential of how the story could go, I am also just a huge fan of Rainbow Dash. Honestly, I like this story a MILLION times more than that stupid story My Little Dashie! I don't like that story. Mainly because i'ts not first person. That's another reason why i like this story so much. I mean come on! I'ts about me! (And you, And every one else of course.) I don't like reading/ listening to some guy tell me about how he is pretty much living all my hopes an dreams! (I probably sound really weird for some reason. So i apologize for that.) Anyway. Like i said in the youtube comment. I'm putting together a little fan fiction act out thing, And wondered if you were interested. (Sorry. Not your fiction. Just your voice.) Here's the link to the fiction if you want to rad through it and see if you think you could do any parts in it. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/40634/under-a-luminous-sky#page/2 Thanks! Bye!
~Saint
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Wow, you think my story is better than My Little Dashie? That makes me feel amazing, but I highly doubt it is as good.
*Cough* Fallout: Equestria...
Voice acting is not my forte I'm afraid, I cannot do it. I am already making an audiobook as it is and really can't get into acting at the moment.
And your dreams? Bah, mine are really strange!
Yeah, That's alright that you can't do the voice acting thing. (And sorry it keeps taking me so long to write back. I am directing in a play for my town and i don't have a lot of time to see my tablet at the moment. I'll talk to you some other time. And hope fully you are still writing the story. (I'ts ok if you lost intrerest. I don't want to be all like: "Holy crap finish iiitt!!! People do that to me and i'ts really annoying.) Anyway. See ya later!
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Oh no, this is the main story I am focusing on! I freaking love it!
Anyway, that is pretty sweet you are directing towns play; all I do is vector, write, role-play and talk!
Yeah its pretty fun. (I am out now. It usually gets out at 12 on Friday, But we did it really fast.) If you were wondering, The play we are doing is The Sound of Music. Ehh. I wanted to do some other ones but. I had a lot of girls want to do this one soooo, Yeah. Also, I am directing/ acting. But only background characters. No one too special. (Sorry about me talking about myself so much. I do that sometimes )
Oh man, after all that work, i'd be walking the streets chanting to myself "YEAH MAF****, I'M F***** SICK KUNT, YEAH WOOOOOOOOO!"