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The SideKick


I do stuff that might fall under your purview of "Good Writing". Perhaps you would dain my work as the opposite. Either way it's here and you may look upon it and draw your conclusions thusly.

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"Hi, my name's Mike Connerson. I'm eight-teen years old, I've just graduated high school and have a job at Burger King. I plan to go to college for video broadcast production, and I'm a brony. If you're reading this then your most likely a brony too. So let me ask you something. Would you say yes if Celestia herself gave you the chance to live in Equestria as part of a plan to try and slowly begin bridging the gap between our worlds? I ask because that's what happened to me."

"And I said no."

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5685892 Being strong in your convictions doesn't make you, or me, a loser. So don't worry, be happy!:ajsmug:

I'd say yes, but not without saying my goodbyes and asking Celestia if I could be a changeling.

...That'd actually be a good topic for me to build a story on. :rainbowhuh: Too bad I'm already working on Time Vigilante and Champion of Equestria. Otherwise I'd do it.

I plan to go to collage for video broadcast production,

*college

Earth is my home, I also couldn't leave my family behind too. They mean a lot to me. If I went to Equestria, it would have to be only for vacation reasons.

Dude. Are you speaking out of your own personal thought or just from someone that you now? Because honestly I'm very curious as to who this person represents in your life.

An interesting story, but I don't think it addresses the most interesting aspect that it brings up nearly enough. You've introduced to Equestria the mother of all existential crises, and they're either intentionally ignoring it, have dealt with it way better than one would expect, or are blissfully ignorant that it's even something to be concerned about.

They are literally someone else's fiction. And they're aware of this! Of the four known worlds, you've acknowledged three are representative of the fictional creations found in the fourth. That fourth is not mirrored in any way in those first three. That would be an absolutely mind-blowing revelation; that you may be someone else's imagined creation. To know that you are not alone in existence is a staggering enough revelation. But to have your own autonomy, your own free will and very existence called into question by the discovery of that same Other is wholly something else again. It's like finding out that God is unaware He created the universe and is equally surprised when you show up and say hi. I mean, how do you deal with that? What lengths would you go to to test where their imagination ends and your own, independent existence beings? And what would you do if you found out it didn't exist at all? That has some truly frightening implications.

The story itself was fine. I just feel it's one of those rare instances that raises more interesting possibilities and questions than it acknowledges or answers.

Oh, an additional thought; this begs for a sequel.

Personally, I want to see what happens in a year from now. Mike said no; other did not. Don't forget that. In a year, probably a lot of them will be going back. You're going to have on your hands what's effectively a Brony Rapture movement. I would love to see Mike's thoughts on how the whole thing unfolds globally. Are these people viewed as insane? (Probably). Does he know they're right, and would he want to speak up and admit as much? (Maybe, maybe not.)

You sound like you're from the US; you know what christian fundamentalists sound like when they talk about being saved by the impending rapture and their absolute certainty about the date it's coming. You have the Brony equivalent of that here... except it's real, and Mike knows that.

So, again, I would love to see a sequel to this, one year hence, as Mike reflects on the impending Equestrian Rapture. What happened to him and the world over that past year? Does he regret his decision? Would he still go if offered? Can he still go? Was it all even real, or just some mass hallucination? And, best of all, what happens on the morning of, to those who are to be "saved" and the world's reaction to it?

Hell i go though only to spread the word of the god emperor of mankind. And also snuggle tavi and coco.

I would take the week vacation, but probably stop there. Maybe another week in a year or so, but I doubt I would want to live there permanently. Doesn't matter anyway.

First off, you don't need quotation marks in the story description for something that's purely narrative.

Hi, my names Mike Connerson.

Don't care, Mike! Plus you're missing an apostrophe.

I'm eight-teen years old

It's one word, no hyphen: "eighteen".

I've just graduated highschool

And yet in your years there, you didn't learn that "high school" is two words?

If your reading this then your most likely a brony too.

:facehoof: "Your" and "you're" are not the same word.

Was this written because of the latest EQD poll?

5688863 No, I just thought what would happen if a brony didn't agree to go to Equestria. Simple as that.

5688300 You're fluffing amazing!

5687510 I'll go over both your comments here. First, the idea of the story would have been bogged down if I had gone over the huge implications that it brought up. I felt it wouldn't work as well anyway since I was using a brony as the main character. He is already open to the idea of other worlds, wanting to go to Equestria as much as the next brony, but the focus of the story is that he didn't, obviously, so while I tried my best to put in what would only logical made sense, such as if Celestia knows he is a brony then of course she would know about the show, I didn't want to take away from the main topic of the whole thing. I thought I had also made it clear that afterwards he needed the time to collect himself before he could do anything, just going through the motions at home and laying in bed doing nothing.

Now about that sequel. I think it's a good idea, I might just make it. But I have other projects to come first, so it will take a while for me to get to it.

5687366 It's half and half, with many changes to the real parts for safety's sake.

Sorry, Celestia. You're cool and all, but there's just no way you can compete with working at Burger King.

Is it sad that the entire time I was reading this, all I could think about was how the main protagonist Mike Schmidt was about to kick the bucket as night guard at Freddy Fazbear's Pizzaria and Diner. Then I hid the end and found out that the main guy wasn't Mike Schmidt.

5689320 I wouldn't put any of my character's through that kind of torture.

5689737 Good on ya, cause I know if the story calls for it they will suffer until I can find a way around the rules and end the problem for them.

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Fair enough. The story, as written, wouldn't have been a proper avenue to explore any of those questions anyways. It's just that those questions and dilemmas exist by implication within the universe the story sets up. Perhaps a different story for another time to look at that kind of thing.

Glad you like the idea for a sequel. I hope that you are able to get to it at some point. Far too often I see stories like this that raise interesting ideas, set up situations where the future payoff would be very fascinating to see, and then nothing happens. Like I said, I'd love to see Mike's reaction to sitting on the sidelines to the whole thing in a year, possibly wondering and regretting (and ultimately up to you deciding where he lands) about his possible role in the whole thing.

Ya know, awhile back there was this story that had Twilight saying no to Celestia to go save Equestria. I'm I the only one that thinks of that story when I look at this?

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No, I loved that story and remember it to this day!

~Squiggle-Squiggle~

I'd think that with the level of surveillance that Celestia had on you, she probably already knows how you felt after the fact. I wonder that in her wisdom, Celestia knew some people would decline. Those people would help spread the word to others that would accept.

Oh shit... my thinking has turned this in to an "Optimalverse" story. (walking away)

5690615 What is the name of that story?
5690437 Where can I read that story?

Do you think that this counts as a brony in Equestria fanfic?

5701783 Since it toys with the human in Equestria itself I believe it fits somewhere in the realm, but since he never actually goes, it's not a real human in Equestria story.

5701944

I think it's called She Said No.

I'd probably also decline the offer.

Would you say yes if Celestia herself gave you the chance to live in Equestria as part of a plan to try and slowly begin bridging the gap between our worlds?

I come here to find pony fics, and instead I get an existential question that has launched me into deep thought. How dare you.

5702616 Technicly its both, so there.

5701776
'She said no'

~Squiggle-Squiggle~

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Dammit, now I can't help but take a good, long look at my life, and weigh the pros and cons of going to Equestria if ever offered. Why did you do this to me!?!?!:raritydespair:
No, but seriously, nice one-shot. Definitely a good fic, and with a message (if you look at it that way.)

5778790 There's a message if you want there to be. Really it's a what if story for the sake of it's own self. If you find a deeper meaning in it than what I intended, that's great! Any decent work in any form of art will get people thinking, rather it's in line with what the creator meant it to say or not. So while to me the story has no real deeper meaning and was just a chance to explore this scenario it can mean so much more to you if you think there's more to it.

But whatever you think about, just thanks for reading and the positive words!

5702616 Ditto. I have three big reasons I'd say "no".
- Same as the story - I'd probably be torn between not getting to stay in Equestria and missing my own life.
- I'd probably have the responsibility of Earth's ambassador and I don't think I could handle that pressure, let alone do a good job.
- For a place of rainbows and unicorns, Equestria can be a pretty freakin dangerous place. Tornados are common occurances, animals like parasprites and hyrdas live close to cities, then every once in a while someone like Tirek comes along and targets every pony.

I'd probably stay for a weekend, but no longer.

By the way, Celestia saying "humongous" really kills the suspension of disbelief.

5794778 What, you think Celestia is some snob that's above using silly words like humongous? If anything I'd think that if she wasn't tied to her duty as princess she would be like some weird calm version of Pinkie Pie. Still acting silly and stuff, just not as bombastically and loud as Pinkie.

5778790 Um...I just realized that I mistook your for a different user. Your name is very similar to theirs, so I sent you a wall of text based off my thoughts meant for someone else. Sorry about that.:twilightblush:

5795774
Meh, no skin off my bones, so don't sweat it.

3 words.
Miss, my, Family,

5929460 I'm a bad person for this, but I would go if I was sure my family didn't need me. I won't say here, but there would be something very specific I would look for if I ever went, and the drive to find it would make me go should no one I cared about suffer greatly with me gone. I know it sounds terrible that I would choose to leave them, but I can't help what I want. All I can hope for is that it would have been worth it and that I could redeem myself at some point afterwards.

...I have some deep thinking to do :moustache:

Nice story/log though :ajsmug:

I'll admit that this certainly deviates from the normal 'Brony accepts offer' story, even if it was a temporary visit. I like how you portray your internal thoughts without going on a full tangent and I honestly enjoyed it.

As for me, I'd say no as well though not before pointing Celestia in the direction of a few brony friends who really want to go there. As for whether she takes them or not, that's her call.

I imagine moving to Equestria is much similar to moving to another country. How many of you have done this?

id also say YES there and then that is IF i dont have certain responsibilities for my family:yay:

In the heat of them moment, I think most bronies would hesitate for only a few seconds before deciding they wanted to go. For others like myself, it's a much more conflicting decision. One the one end, you get to go to one of the most peaceful universes out there. On the other, there's no real guarantee your friends or family will meet whatever requirements might be met. Even then, who says that they'd want to go in the first place? Personally, I think I'd go. It's a fresh start, and it seems like you're completely allowed to give a goodbye to those you love before you go.

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I respect and understand your choice, but-

one of the most peaceful universes

Lol.

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