Hearth to Heart

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Elkophys

Elkophys #1 · Jan 21st, 2015 · · ·

1st.
Nice story

2nd.
Usefull link

3d.
You should use some kind of border here:

“Well, now that you mention it, the theme of the season is Athletic Aesthetics, Applejack,” Rarity explained, her tears gone, and her face suddenly clear of all signs of distress, “and if you would be so kind as to assist me for the evening, I think I may have an idea...”
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“Err... Rarity,” Applejack asked, choking back nervous feelings as she looked at her excited friend, “I'm happy to help, n' all, but you don't s'pose I could just... hold some cloth for you, maybe fetch something for the market?”

“Don't say that just yet, applejack. I've only just begun.”
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The two ponies were both becoming a bit tired, the outfits and designs were coming along splendidly, but even AJ's stamina was wearing low.

Mistress Frostflame

Mistress Frostflame #2 · Jan 21st, 2015 · · ·

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Thanks very much for the compliment as well as the helpful link. I'm overjoyed that you enjoyed the story.

OmniFox

OmniFox #3 · Jan 21st, 2015 · · ·

Now I know who Opal reminds me of: Grumpy Cat!

AmblingAnarchy

AmblingAnarchy #4 · Jan 22nd, 2015 · 1 · ·

I read a lot of Rarijack stuff (OTP and all that), and, lemme tell ya, I enjoyed this more than most of it. Yeah, there were a few mistakes and some stuff was worded a little strangely, but I can tell that you put a lot of yourself into it, not just going though the typical, 'Let's rub out privates together hurr durr' fan fiction mentality. Way to be. Please, have my favorite.

Mistress Frostflame

Mistress Frostflame #5 · Jan 22nd, 2015 · 1 · ·

5533668 Thank you so much for the compliment and the favorite. ^_^ I'm so happy people are enjoying it

Zeyon The Green

Zeyon The Green #6 · Jan 22nd, 2015 · · ·

Unlike a firetruck, Rarity did stop for red lights. I was worried there for a second. A good story.

ninja jackal

ninja jackal #7 · Jan 22nd, 2015 · 1 · ·

MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRRR RARIJACK

Mistress Frostflame

Mistress Frostflame #8 · Mar 21st, 2015 · · ·

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Thank you. It makes me feel great to see my work so well enjoyed. I hope you continue to enjoy my writing in the future.

DragonessPonyWolfess

DragonessPonyWolfess #9 · Apr 4th, 2015 · · ·

Very nice. I admit, I saw... a considerable amount of typos, but the story, the detail, and the execution were all excellent. Thank you for typing this.

Mistress Frostflame

Mistress Frostflame #10 · Apr 7th, 2015 · · ·

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Thank you very much for the compliment. ^_^ I'm working on some more fiction at the moment. I hope I can continue to impress and improve.

iluvpotions

iluvpotions #11 · Apr 8th, 2015 · 1 · ·

Wow! This was amazing! Honestly, a few typos, but in all other regards, absolutely flawless. I can't believe this is your first clop. It was that well written :3