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CosmicWrinkles


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let me be the first to say, Bucking HILARIOUS, also Hawt, and HOLY MOTHER OF LUNA, FLUTTERSHY IS A CLOSET RAPIST...... HAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWT!!!!! :heart:

That banter in the beginning was real fun.

I laughed so hard I got a a headache :rainbowlaugh:

Poor, oblivious Anon :rainbowlaugh:

I require more of this :twilightsmile:

Fingers are Magic

Oh, this cracks me up so much :rainbowlaugh:

You should totally write a piece for everyone of the Six, and possibly Celestia and Luna too for the lolz.

Or maybe Chrysalis. That'd be awkward for her, brought low by the fingers of a magic-less alien that probably didn't even realize what he did to her xD

5502808 I second this comment.

The general idea behind the story is great! But what took my attention was that specific part about the reversed gender roles! This opens a whole world of opportunities which I will positively use! Thank you dear author!

-Zeph

Several booths away a mint green unicorn was franticly waving down a waitress only to point at Rainbow Dash and demand, “I’ll have what’s she’s having.” From the confused waitress.

Well, at least we know Dash isn't faking. :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowlaugh:

so it is set in a xenophillia like universe, does that mean herding is a thing or is it a monogamous world?

Pretty brazen, how hard you're ripping off the first chapter of Personal Touch there. You could have at least changed the location.

5503717

>tfw someone points out a reference before you

love everything about this need more

5503846 I am honestly not familiar with the story “Personal Touch” and have never read it so I don’t see how I could have ripped it off. The location was chosen because it is a well-known meeting place in the show and besides the spa I couldn’t think of another off the top of my head. If this seems like a rip-off of the other story I’m sorry for that, but it isn’t. In order for me to steal of plagiarize from another author I’d have to have read their work in the first place. I resent the implication that I knowingly and brazenly stole another’s work regardless of how it seems. Having said that, if the author of that story feels insulted or “ripped off” by my work I’m sorry for that, I really am. This was just written as a silly bit of fluff off the top of my head, not a “brazen” attempt at literary theft.

5503613 just don't get too kinky it'll turn off some readers

5504246
How could it be too kinky if I aim to write a clop story?

:D

Anon+fingers= The perfect stallion

5504344 I just mean balls to the wall crazy

5503613 If you like the reverse gender role idea look up Xenophilia they do that and also polgamy. It may be a clop fic but its very well thought out and has some good world building to boot not something you would expect from such a fic.

5505094
Thanks for the tip, I'll check it out for sure! Though, later. Nowadays a man can't have his rest, I'm typing this at 1 am, no other free time remained for me than in the night.... bloody hell...

5504141 congrats on the feature

Ohhhhhhhhhhh my~

5504141 Damn, that may have just been "the" most formal thing I have ever read on this site. Aside from that I'd just like to let you know I have encountered many "obvious" grammar mistakes. Such as misplaced quotations marks or marks that haven't even been placed at all, some minor redundancies and some awkward phrasings.

However, if you plan on continuing this story I wouldn't mind prereading the next part. I really enjoyed this a lot.

5504141
If that is true then I apologize for unfairly accusing you like that. The story I was talking about was featured just a short while ago and, except for yours being more explicit, the whole incident in the shop goes down so similarly, you'd probably think you cribbed from it yourself if you saw it. It's uncanny.

I don't know why... but I can strangely fell my ego growing as read this.
Maybe it's because I have fingers?

this is a good story

I .....I want moar............moar................MOAR!

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5504690 And apparently so do the rest of the ponies.

I like the story but hate the use of 'Anon' as a name.

This is the first time in my 4 years of reading fanfics I'll comment this and it deserves it......
MORE!!!!!

5505635 Wow, OK I just read Personal Touch and I completely understand where you were coming from in thinking I copied that story. I swear I never read that till just now but dam if it isn't basically the setup for the whole scene with Rainbow Dash in mine. It's freaky how similar they are. It blew my mind. Honestly I would have probably thought the same thing you did if I had come across both stories.

5505433 Thanks for the offer. I might just take you up on that. I know there must be tons of miss used punctuation and odd sentence structures in the story. I try and make it read out like I hear it in my thoughts by slapping commas and dots all over even though I know I'm most likely miss using them. Any help in making a story more enjoyable to the reader is always appreciated. :)

The next 7 chapters are going to be Nonny unwittingly getting off the 4 remaining ponies and 3 Princesses.

I hate when the human is just called 'Anon' ... completely ruins any sort of immersion, at least give the poor guy a name. :(

Thanks for this funny stuff. I'm lookin forward to the next chapter!

Clop parts aside, this is hilarious.

This takes place in a reverse gender roles version of Equestria where the females take on the general roles /attitude of males.

Really?

With all the Bits I’ve blown on dinners and flowers and stuff for the guy, I don’t think it’s asking too much for a good BUCK now and then!

So all men care about in relationships is sex?

“Just throw one down… (pant gasp). Right there in the middle of the street… (groan) YES! (gasp) and.. and (puff puff). BUCK HIM! BUCK HIM HARD AND LONG, LIKE THE NAUGHTY LITTLE PLOT TEASING STALLION HE KNOWS HE IS! RIGHT THERE, IN THE OPEN, FOR EVERYPONY TO SEE!”

So men routinely think about raping people?

Granny Smith would have herself a darn right fit ifin Big Mac was ta fool around with any filly before he was married proper like.

So men are possessive and controlling toward their female family members?

“I swear if any stallion did have half an idea what was on a mare’s mind most of the time, he’d probably never set a hoof out his door again.”

If what these mares talk about in public is anywhere near as bad as what they think about, I'd believe that. Not only are these ponies wildly OOC, they're also fucked in their heads. They're two steps away from becoming psychopaths of the worst variety; and you, author, are barely any better if you really think that's what the "general attitude" of men is.

5506969 You're much welcome! And trust me, I know how you feel when it comes to punctuation. The only time writing ever lets you off on it is when you're writing dialogue. Even then though, you don't want to get carried away.

5507137 Agreed. The name "Anon" just feels like an excuse because the author couldn't think up a proper name.

Nevertheless, I still enjoyed this.

Interesting. Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work.

CosmicWrinkles: If you haven't already seen it, I'd like to point out this thread that covers similar ground.

5507517

It's an exaggerated version of inverted gender rolls. Statistically the described male behavior is an outlier (men assuming "all women want it", controlling their sister's relationships) but they are no means unheard of. It's a little horrible when you think about it actually occurring in real life, but this is a fictional story about cartoon ponies. I wouldn't worry about it too much.

5503832

Well, let's look at it this way: how many women do you know in the real world that have their own harem?

There 'ya go.

5507517
these are specific personality tropes dedicated to the inverse of their actual personalities... It's a parody...

Comment posted by Opponent deleted Jan 15th, 2015

5507810 objection!! this is a fictional universe where six characters are so desperate for attention they are trying to get their friend to molest them, the story also implies that other ponies in the restaurant also would like to be cuddled and scratched by him. i was asking the author about the world he was writing and wants in the story.

All I can say is - MORE!!!!!

This story has potential, but don't let it sink into a musty corner

5506929
Glad you understand. That's one hell of a freaky coincidence.

5507517
Read up on the "pick-up artist" phenomenon one of these days. You wouldn't believe how many people actually think like that.

5508292

I want you to go find members with the names Carter, Daniel, and Tie'lc.

And become best friends with them.

5507835 also remember that mares go into heat so sex would regularly be on their minds

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