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wow, and just after i created a Guardians of harmony clan for Destiny, i'm glad too see i wasn't the only pony to come up with this idea. n.n
Lol I'm in one called Guardians of Equestria and that's the title I wanted to use, but unfortunately another user has a different story with that exact title.
Interesting. My own guardian is purple. I run an Exo Warlock and I commonly use the scout rifle. What do you guys happen to go as?
I found this very interesting and worth attention. I'll be following this closely.
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I main an exo Titan who wears the Frostfire shader. I also have an Awoken Hunter with green hair that has yellow highlights, but no shader yet.
I have a human Warlock, but I started the story before I made him.
Frankly, I'm partial to the max RoF autorifles because I like the way they sound.
I haven't played Destiny for months. Been too busy with Warframe (which I've been considering doing a crossover with). I haven't even downloaded the expansion, even though I bought both when the game first came out. I really need to play it again.
Anyway, I'm surprised this isn't more popular. I'll have to see about sending some of my readers here.
I have been trying to find MLP clans on Destiny. Glad to know they are out there.
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And send them here you did! Or at least one, so far. I have destiny, but can't play it quite yet. I need an HDD for a 360, and a 360 itself . I really do wanna play it, though.
Shiro was right. You are doing a brilliant job.
Needs more chapters
I have yet to read this but I expect great things.
Wow, was not expecting such a positive response by day two.
Here's hoping I can hold momentum!
Ok first off im loving this story so far. The character dialogue is very natural and i can feel the chemistry from the Guardians as a reader. I also love the characters' backgrounds. Also props for giving the ghosts names and personalities
Your also very capable of depicting action scenes. Describing both the Weapons and methods flawlessly.
----Now if i may be so bold as to offer my criticism and opinions. Please don't think im trying to belittle your story because i actually rather adore it. The following are just some suggestions and criticisms from a fellow Destiny and MLP fan. So if your still reading let us begin
1) Having Equestria and Earth in the same Galaxy. I've always thought they existed in seperate realities, but this is only my opinion. If you can properly explain how and why these world collide.
2)Twilight is aware of the Destiny world but not the other way around. By having the Equestrian world able to "view" the Earth you have subsequently placed Equestria on a higher technological playing field than the Guardians. I do not mind this fact too much...okay it's kinda unsettling to think pre-industrial age ponies can view our most advanced societies whenever they feel like. Now im not saying the Equestrians can't be able to view Earth (and from what i've been leed to believe only the princesses, who have the magic and rescorces can accomplish such a feat which i like), but i don't think they should have such an intimate knowledge of what is happening in our world...at least not yet. As i stated doing so places Equestrians on a kind of technological/magical pedistal. Plus it's kinda heartless to imagine the Equestrians know all about are struggles and attempt to do nothing.
My honest remedy (if you decide to hear me out) is that Luna, being the patrion of the sky and subsequently space, is aware of Earth but keeps their whereabouts unknown. Maybe she can confide in Twilight that she holds the inhabitants of "Sol" in high-esteem but keeps the reason as too why a secret.
3)Explaining the Destiny lore via exposition from Twilight. If Nostalgia Critic, or the brony analysis on Youtube have taught me anything, it's that one should not simply spell-out a backstory. I know why you did. To inform readers about what their about to read and their backstory. But this can really break the flow in a story. Let the narrative revel the backstory. Or better yet do a prologue. Kinda like what you did with the Horses analogy in the beginning (genius by the way).
Or have a oment where the Guardians themselves explain the situation.
ps: I was also considering writing a Destiny/MLP crossover
That's why im writing criticisms. I'm emotiaonally invested in the story, and might serve as inspiration for my own.
Here are two fourm posts i made about a possible crossover.
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/199454/destiny-crossovers/thread/147636/a-possible-destinymlp-crossover
http://www.fimfiction.net/group/20/human-in-equestria/thread/147622/destinymlp-crossover
I also may be a little jelly that you wrote a crossover first, but if this all plays out right i'll have read an awesome story and gained ideas for my own. Already i see im outclassed in your characterization and attention to detail but i plan on getting better.
5512094 As Teej's uncredited editor and pre-reader (don't worry about it), I'd like to thank you for your lovely comment and criticism; we're already brainstorming ways to make improvements.
Also, the idea behind the Ghosts is that not all of them sound like Peter Dinklage, and that they have different personalities, and that not all of them may prefer to be called "Ghost".
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You have a particular disadvantage due to Destiny's low quality storyline. So readers will need extra encouragement to get into it.
Regardless, it seems like you are setting this up to be an excellent story and I hope to see more.
5515413 Your so welcome! I hope you guys continue to write and improve.
and for the glory that is Peter Dinklage
5516269 I think the story was strong, but it lacked certain amounts of exposition for it to make a lot of sense. I also think some of the dialogue would make more sense if there had been better grammar usage.
I.e. Instead of "Hive Tombships! Cutting through." It should have been "Hive Tombships cutting through!"
5521123 Even better, you know where to improve.
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Read the story...
Liked the story...
Saw LoonyToons Quote...
Died laughing...
My ghost has written this for your information as I have just passed into the Travelers Embrace...
Great story my friend, keep up the good work and I will be a return reader!
Hmmm...Love It. I enjoyed it very much. And here I thought I was odd, naming my Ghost Echo. Very good.
I'd put this off for a while, but kept it book marked for later reading. I finally came around to it. I like the direction this is going. This'll be interesting to read. And I'll be interested to see if you stick to the games way of using supers, or if you do it the way I think it would actually happen. I've always figured from a story stand point they can use the super abilities at will and switch between them mid use if they needed. Either way This is looking to be interesting hehe.
5521123 First off, you really need to learn how to use hyphens properly: there are never, ever, spaces between words and the hyphen unless you are using one to abruptly cut off a character's speech.
Get it got it good.