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This is based on/inspired by(/shamelessly ripped off from) Khakispony's "Love Potions and Socks," and Eustatian Wings's comments on same. Much love to Khakispony and Eustatian Wings.
This comment subject to further editing, if I remember anything important I should be telling you all.
Beautiful. Here, have fave, thumb-up, watch, and... yeah I think I'll read all your other stories too.
I find something strangely sexual and arousing about the word satiated. Not just the definition but the way the word slides off the tongue. That may have been my favorite part of the story. Thumbs up, favorite and a watch, for any other wonderful pieces you might pump out.
That pic is ok in my book of gusta.
577010 [This comment has since been deleted. For context, this comment was in response to 576751, and compared Spike's actions toward Rarity to attempted rape.]
I’m kind of glad someone brought that up.
Now, it’s my conviction that authorial intent is worthless. If it doesn’t turn up in the story, then any protests I make in the comments don’t change the fact that I screwed up. That said, here’s my authorial intent.
For Spike, I don’t think his actions were necessarily sexually motivated—he’s still pretty much a kid. Just like the CMC were thinking “Cheerilee should have somepony she loves,” not “Cheerilee oughta get laid.” Spike wanted Rarity to admit that she’s attracted to him, and he probably wasn’t thinking beyond that. Was it an immoral act? Totally. Was it done maliciously? Not really, I don’t think. And it was ultimately ineffective, so from a consequentialist standpoint I suppose it doesn’t matter.
As Twilight points out, the potion is basically magic alcohol. Love potions in fiction always creep me out a bit, because it’s way too easy to make them rape potions. But getting someone boozed up is, for the most part, socially acceptable.
http://www.smbc-comics.com/index.php?db=comics&id=2199#comic
Don’t get me wrong, Fluttershy’s actions are still kinda sketchy. She’s giving Rarity magic booze, but she’s doing it secretly—that’s the really uncomfortable bit. She convinces herself that it’s okay, and she certainly doesn’t intend to harm Rarity, and it’s ultimately harmless, but it’s still kind of crossing a line. I think her essential submissiveness helps her case some? She’d be a lot less sympathetic if she potion’d Rarity without taking any herself, or if she’d been really aggressive.
So, yeah. I tried to cast the potion as ultimately harmless, and may or may not have succeeded. Rarity certainly sees it as harmless—Spike’s use was ineffective. Your interpretation as to whether or not Rarity’s overestimating her potion tolerance, but Fluttershy’s use affected herself more than anyone. No one’s intending to hurt anyone else, and no one ends up hurt, but it is still kind of creepy along the way.
(I suppose Angel’s lady-friends might have been disillusioned, but that’s another story. One I’m not going to write. Ever.)
It was alright....I guess but a few things. 1. You use the word "clit" way to often, even the actual word clitoris would of been nice. 2. Rarity keeps jumping between sexy and interested in Fluttershy to just sort of wanting to have sex. 3. Rarity goes from just relieving Fluttershy of her want to actually having full blow sex with her, also wasn't this just meant to be a one time thing? She did say she like stallions. 4. This line "Yes, in fact, I am preparing for something special. For somepony special. You, Rarity. I want you to make love to me." It's too rushed, there's no Fluttershy character type in it and when Fluttershy say for some pony special you could of added Rarity bumping in and asking who that some pony was also there was a lot of OC moments with Fluttershy. But hey just me, but overall it was alright.
Noice.
I read this for the dl.dropbox.com/u/21167245/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octy_plot.png
dl.dropbox.com/u/21167245/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spit_rape.png
the fuck was this epicness i just read?
Wait I've read this somewhere before. Let me think here
. Oh yes this is my story. Better written version of it but still mine. Not that I have a problem with that, but please if you're going to take my ideas let me know first. If you don't Fluttershy will cry. So will Rarity. And so will I. If you'd like my conceptual idea for a second chapter send me a message and I'll let you take over from there. Ps send some love to the original:http://www.fimfiction.net/story/21002/Love-Potions-and-Socks. It helps my ego
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Thanks for your feedback. My thoughts:
1. I've never found an entirely satisfactory vocabulary to use for love scenes. (Not in English, at least. Latin has a very thorough sexual vocabulary, but my Latin's terrible. I suspect I declined "Potio" incorrectly.) Â Slang works fine for fuckin' but less well for tenderness; euphemisms always feel artificial to me; and the proper anatomical terms just get weird. There's a balance, and the balance here could probably do with some tweaking.
2. Oh, I'm totally leaning on "It's a clopfic, and so they want to have sex with each other." There's some effort at romance, but it's still essentially about the sex. From an in-story perspective, the simplest explanation is that Rarity's overestimating her potion tolerance, having never been truly affected.
3. She said she generally prefers stallions to mares—canon Rarity's pretty straight—but not that she's never been attracted to mares. Considering the skill she demonstrates, she's almost certainly had experience. As for the one-off/recurring thing, Rarity says they'll do a full discussion in the morning. While I left out that discussion, judging by the last scene it went well.
4. Hmm. I tried to provide ample set-up for this—Fluttershy's inner monologue, her potion-addled flirting, and the Socks of +5 Confidence—but I see it didn't quite work for you.
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Well, I did credit you and Eustatian Wings in the first comment—but yes, I should have asked for your permission, and I didn't. For that, I can only apologize. I've also changed the first-comment credit into a link.
To everyone else: my thanks to you all for the views/likes/faves/watches. I'm happy you like it.
576720 Your Awesome for watching How I Met your Mother.
At summery.
"Also, there are socks. Because socks."
I lol'd
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Socks require no further explanation; they justify themselves.
Socks? Well, I'm reading this!
Socks? Well, I'm reading this!
secks...
Rarity comes off a little bit bitchy to me in here. She patronizes Fluttershy pretty badly at a couple of points ("You're only an enthusiastic amateur...") and I thought the bit when they're already in bed and Rarity pauses to reiterate her position sounded a little... I dunno, awkward. Like they were pausing to record a legal proof of consent or something.
Otherwise, pretty fun as a straight up "let's fuck" clopfic. I kinda wanted to listen in on their 'morning after' discussion, but I'm kind of a romantic at heart.
Fluttershy had left a dish of love potion out on the porch; apparently there were more bunnies living nearby than she had thought, and apparently several of them already had a "pre-existing attraction" to Angel. Oh angel bunny, you little player you. Aside from that though I must agree with Jot Jiggety Jog, Rarity almost seemed (in my opinion that is) impatient with Fluttershy at times and at other moments Rare's simply spoke as if it was a chore to tease Flutter. Looking past that and the few things Jiggety has mentioned i declare you earn
four mustaches. Keep up the good work!
Excellent fic, good sir/madam!
out of 
I shall rate it...::
This story was AWESOME!!
Because Socks, of course. Best explanation there ever was.