To solve the issue surrounding the destructive, hyper Pinkie clones, Twilight has worked in collaboration with Mayor Mare and Princess Celestia to create a program to convert the clones into functioning citizens. This involves creating a separate community for the clones that acts as both a therapeutic camp and a basic society.
With the program in place, many of the clones are being trained into becoming "normal", but it turns out one of the clones has a little more inside their pink body.
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This was an interesting concept. Feel bad for Happy though, but that was the point I assume.
I liked it... have a like!
Slap a sad tag and a dark tag on this cause it needs it. It's a sad little story, but that's the point, so it's a good story.
Great story, I figured building the newborn clones their own community was how that episode was going to end in the first place, right until the end. Was this story inspired by this? mlpchan.net/pony/src/1375404833761.jpeg
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No. I got the idea from watching the episode itself. I found Twilight's solution to the problem to be extreme. In addition, her rapid fire elimination of the clones was just careless, especially for her. I figured this would make a bit more sense.
I actually had this idea for a while and was going to make the story about how Twilight struggled to get the program started. The only thing, though, was that I never had time to sit down and write. But then I saw that Equestria Daily was having a contest and I decided to use it.
I'm really glad you liked the story.
Very interesting fix on what I also consider the big weakness of that episode. The cruelty of just eliminating all the Pinkie clones left a very bad taste in my mouth. Kudos to you for writing this bittersweet story and turning that frown upside down - a very Pinkie thing to do!
Hey, I wrote a review for this story. In case you are interested, it can be found here.
Overall, I found the concept very interesting, but felt that it was brought down by significant issues with the execution.
This should have a much higher rating.
I absolutely adore your portrail of "Happy Smiles", and the insights you give us through her diary-entries.
The idea of the Pinkies going through what is essentially Kindergarden is just flatout adorable.
The only thing I didn't like ... was that it had to end in tragedy.
I'm not exactly a fan of "sad", especially not "tragedy"-tagged stories.
That I read this one anyway was due to the intriguing concept of "Pinkies forming a separate society" and "being taught to integrate".
It's too bad the mane six gave up the Elements of Harmony to the Tree, or else they could've probably exorcized Sombra from her body or something.
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Wait, this is pre-season 4. They still have the Elements. DOH.
Ah well, woops.
I guess you could argue that... the Elements couldn't be used on Sombra for the same reason Celestia didn't give them to Twilight to stop him originally?
...Then what about the Crystal Heart? Or is that what ended up being used here and it couldn't tell her and Sombra appart?
But really now, I think you're on to something here with how you show us the inner thoughts of a Pinkie-clone.
How about a sequel? (Preferable less tragic than the original story, though that's just my personal taste.)
The other Pinkies settling in into their new lives, and sending letters back to Ponyville.
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Sombra is linked to an alternate equestria, using the Elements would cause catastrophic bleedover, akin to a Harmonic resonance cascade.
Good concept, and I really loved the 'grading' at the start. A nice take on diary formats! :)
Beautifully dark. I liked the way that you made Happy Smiles not just the victim, but in an important sense a hero.
Awwwww