Meeting Her
Soul let out a yawn as he was riding in his mom’s car. It was early in the morning and he and his mom were heading towards his new school. He and his family recently moved into the small town of Canterlot during the summer time because of financial issues and so his mom thought it would be best to live out in the countryside near some family members.
Soul had on a black t-shirt underneath his white, half sleeve hoodie with black pants on. He was also wearing a pair of long, black, fingerless gloves. His hair was pure white while his irises were bright blue.
The car soon stopped in front of the his new school, Canterlot High. Soul climbed out of the car and looked at the crowed of students in the courtyard. They were mingling with one another while others were heading inside. Even some of the teachers were outside hanging around as well
‘Alright, new life and new school. What can go wrong?’ Soul said to himself as he took a step.
“Um, Sweetie?”
“Yes mom?”
“You’re forgetting your bag.”
Soul stopped and looked back to see his mom holding the bag up outside of the car while she looked at him with a half lid look and a raised brow. Soul felt slightly embarrassed and went over to grab his bag.
“And don’t forget to give me a goodbye kiss.”
“Aaahh, moooom.”
“What’s wrong? Don’t you love your mom?”
“I do love you, it’s just-”
Before he could finish, his mom made a puppy eye look at him while she curled her lips. Soul gave out a defeated sigh and kissed his mom on the cheek. He could hear a few snickers behind him as well as an aw from the students passing by. His face was tint with small bit of blush on them.
“There, now that wasn’t so bad now was it?”
“A little,” Soul whispered.
His mom rolled her eyes and looked back at her son with a smile. “I’ll come to pick you up when school is over. And don’t forget to say hi to your cousins and grandma,” she said.
“I will,” Soul said. “Bye, mom.”
“Bye, sweetie. Have a good day.”
Soul’s mom stepped back into the car and drove off from out of sight. Soul let out a sigh and began to walked towards the school’s entrance. Once he was inside, Soul took a look around and saw a lot of students walking around either heading towards their class or were at their lockers getting or putting things in them. He took a few steps forward until he was suddenly hugged from behind while feeling the crushing force.
“Why hey there, cuz! Ah’m glad you were able to make it.”
Soul recognized the voice and turned his head slightly. “Hey, Applejack? Can you let go?” he wheezed.
“Oh, sorry.” Applejack let go of Soul from her hug and rubbed the back of her head. “Ah always forget that Ah’m a lot stronger than you,” she said. She had on a brown stetson hat with a white, button shirt with green coloring on the top along with a blue jean skirt. She was also wearing a pair of brown boots. She had long blonde hair and her irises were bright green along with having three white freckles on each cheek.
Soul panted a few times before finally catching his breath. “It’s okay, AJ. I’m use to it,” he said. He then looked up at the cowgirl. “So how are things up here going?”
“They’re doing good. Ah was just talking to my friends about you and thought to see if ya made it yet.”
“Well, I made it,” Soul said. “Tell you the truth, I’m feeling a nervous.”
“Why’s that?”
“I just hope I can get along with everyone here.”
“Well, Ah wouldn’t worry about that. The people here are very friendly and I’m sure they would be more than willing to be friends.”
“Okay, if you say so,” Soul said. “Hey, where’s Big Mac and-”
Before he could finish, he was tackled again from behind but this time it wasn’t as forceful as the last one or as strong as Applejack’s hug. He turned around to see his other cousin, Apple Bloom. She was wearing a green t-shirt along with blue jeans while a small pink bow. She had two pairs of boots like Applejack but had ribbons near the top and were pale orange. Her hair was crimson colored and her irises were bright orange.
“Heya, cuz! Ah’m happy to see you again!” Apple Bloom exclaimed with a bright smile.
“I’m glad to see you too, Bloom,” Soul said, patting on top of the little farmer.
“Big Mac had to come in early to help out with Ms. Cheerilee,” Applejack explained. “He volunteered to help out with sorting out books with some of the other students.”
“Oh, I see,” Soul said. “Are you here to give me the tour? I was told that someone was going to give me one.”
“Wish Ah could, cuz, but Ah’m kinda busy right now practicing with my friends.”
“Oh right, you said that you and your friends put together a band last spring.”
“Yeah and they even won the Battle of the Bands a few months back,” Apple Bloom added.
“I heard about that but it was a bit sketchy though,” Soul said. “What exactly happened?”
“Ya wouldn’t believe me even if Ah told ya,” Applejack said.
“Somehow I believe that. And the fact that you never lie is what makes it even weirder or otherwise you would make that funny look.”
“Ah don’t make a look,” Applejack retorted. Her mouth then scrunch up as she was making a pouty expression.
Soul and Apple Bloom both looked at each other and back to her with half lid looks before raising one of their brows.
“Well, Ah’m on my way. See ya later, cuz,”Applejack said as she walked away waving.
“Ah gotta go too. Later,” Applebloom said and ran off.
Soul waved back at the two before they were gone and let out a sigh. He waited patiently at the front entrance as the students were going by and watched as each student was going by. He took notice a particular couple going by. The girl that had purple, curly hair while there was a guy with black, spiky hair held some books for her as they walked by. Soul soon notice two guys down the hall as his eyes wandered around. One of them was holding onto a guitar while he was tuning it and the other guy next to him was looking at a pink hair girl before she looked in his direction and hid away from her as he tried to cover his blush.
‘Okay, that guy clearly has a crush on her,’ Soul thought as he saw the two pass.
Soul scratched the back of his white hair and let out a sigh. Just when he thought about finding his way around, he felt a couple of taps on his shoulder. He looked back to see a girl behind him. She had soft, cyan iries and a flaming hair color of both red and yellow streaks. Her outfit was a dark jacket with a dark pink shirt under it while she had an orange skirt with pale tan and dark purple streaks in it. The shirt had a little symbol of a sun with both red and yellow coloring. And her boots were black with pink flames on it.
Soul couldn’t help but blush lightly as he found her very attractive.
The girl smiled and held out her hand. “Hi, my name is Sunset Shimmer and I’m here to give you a tour of the school,” she said.
Soul smiled back and shook hand with the girl. “Nice to meet you. Name’s Soul Writer, but you can just call me Soul.”
“That’s a pretty cool name,” Sunset said. “I hope that your stay here at Canterlot is going well so far.”
“It is. Just met up with some of my cousins who are attending here.”
“Really? Anyone that I might know?”
“Maybe. Do you know Applejack, Big Mac and Apple Bloom?”
“Wait, you’re related to the Apple Family?”
“Yeah, why?”
“I’m best friends with Applejack and we’re all in the same band.”
“Really? That’s cool,” Soul said. He then had a puzzled look on him. “Wait, she said that she needed to go do some practice with you guys. How come you’re not with them?”
“They just need practice with their instruments and I only fill in for guitar from time to time and they don’t need me for any vocals right now,” Sunset explained.
“So you're the lead singer?”
“Yes I am.”
“That’s awesome.”
“I better get started with the tour, classes won’t start until in a little bit and I need to show you where to go.”
“Alright, lead the way.”
Sunset nodded and started showing the Soul around the school. She took her time telling Soul about some of the school’s history as she showed him the various rooms that he would be using. Sunset kept on going until they were nearing the music room and heard loud instruments playing.
“That’s the girls playing in there right now,” Sunset said. “Would you like to meet them?”
“Sure, I would like to,” Soul replied.
“Great,” Sunset said, opening the door to the room. “By the way, did Applejack ever tell you about any of-”
“SUNSET, LOOK OUT!”
Sunset looked to see a soccer ball heading straight towards. She froze in place and wasn’t moving. Soul quickly grabbed her by the arm and pulled her out of the way as the ball zoomed out of the room. The ball slammed against the wall and bounced a couple times on the ground before it stopped.
Sunset had her eyes closed for a moment and opened them when the fear went away. She looked up to look into Soul’s blue eyes and realized that he had his arms wrapped around her. The two blushed as their faces were inches away from each other and time stood still for them.
Soul quickly let go of Sunset and cleared his throat. “Are you okay?” he asked, concernedly.
“Y-Yeah, I am. Thanks,” Sunset replied, nervously.
“It was no problem.”
“Sunset, are you okay!?” Poking out of the music room was a girl with very light, blue skin and had six different streaks of colors in her hair. She was wearing a white t-shirt that had a symbol of a white cloud with a lightning bolt that had three shades of color on it underneath a blue jacket. She also had on a pink skirt with white streaks and a black shorts under it.
“Yeah, I’m fine, Rainbow Dash,” Sunset replied. “What happened in there?”
Rainbow Dash let out a nervous chuckle and rubbed the back of her head. “Well, you see, I was really getting into the music that we were practicing. The next thing I knew, I was so into it, I kicked the soccer ball I had with me and well, you know the rest,” she explained.
“Wait, why did you have a soccer ball with you anyway?” Soul asked.
“Duh, I’m captain of the Wonderbolts soccer team. I have to keep it with me so I can practice whenever I can,” Rainbow Dash. She then looked at Soul and squinted at him for a moment. “Hey wait, I don’t remember seeing you before.”
“That’s because he’s new,” Sunset explained. “He was the new student I was showing around.”
“Oh, that explained it,” Dash said. “Nice to meet you. Name’s Rainbow Dash, Captain of the Wonderbolts and the awesomest person you’ll ever meet alive.”
Sunset playfully rolled her eyes.
“Um, nice to meet you,” Souls said, confusedly. “Name’s Soul.”
“Oh right, you’re Applejack’s cousin. She just told us about you before we got started.”
“Hey cuz.”
“Hey Applejack.” Soul waved at Applejack as she was holding onto her guitar.
Soul looked in the room to see three other girls with them. A couple of them he recognized was the girl with the puffy, pink hair who had a bright smile on her and was waving uncontrollably as she was sitting with her drums. The other was the girl with the curly, purple hair who was holding onto a keytar. The last one in there was a timid looking one as she was hiding behind her long pink hair as she was holding onto a tambourine.
“Hello,” Soul said.
“Hiya! My name is Pinkie!”
“I’m Rarity, it’s a pleasure to meet you.”
“Hi. Um, I’m Fluttershy in case you were wondering and if you weren’t, sorry.”
“You don’t have to apologies. It’s very nice to meet you,” Soul said, earning a small blush from Fluttershy. “My name is Soul but I guess Applejack already told you that.”
“Indeed she did,” Rarity said.
“I heard that you can do Taekwondo?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“Yeah, use to do it a lot a couple of years ago,” Soul replied.
“Sweet! I know some Karate skills too.” Dash then started doing some moves with her hands and legs as she was punching and kicking the air.
“Actually, Taekwondo isn’t Karate.”
“Huh?”
“Taekwondo was developed in Korea while Karate was developed in Japan. I’m not one hundred percent sure between the different styles, but I believe that Taekwondo was more built for self-defence and leg development while Karate was made for hand-to-hand combat.”
“Huh, I didn’t think there was a difference,” Rainbow Dash said.
“It’s okay, it’s a common mistake.”
Sunset looked up at the clock hanging high on the wall and saw what time it was. “ Sorry girls but we have to get moving. I still need to show Soul around before we have to head to classes,” she explained.
“Alrighty then, later cuz,” Applejack said, giving Soul another bone crushing hug.
After saying their goodbyes, Sunset and Soul were back walking down the halls again. Sunset looked back at Soul for a moment and smiled. “You really going to like here, this school is no doubt the best there is,” she said.
“I’ll take your word for it,” Soul happily said. When they were coming near a door, he noticed the numbers on it and recognized them. “The is the room I was supposed to go to for my first class.”
“Good timing too, we only have a couple of minutes until classes start,” Sunset said. “I have to go and get to my class. I’ll see you later.” Sunset waved as she departed.
Soul waved back at her. As he was grabbing onto the doorknob and was about to turn it, he looked back at Sunset for a moment as she was walking down the hallway. He thought back when he was holding onto her when he saved her from the soccer ball and thought about how her eyes were so beautiful to him. He blushed when he remembered how her body was pressed against him and that her lips were so close to his.
He shook his head violently and let out a breath of air to let out the tension in him. He looked back up to see that she was gone. A smile crept along his face.
‘I think I’m going to like here a lot more than I thought,’ he said to himself.
He opened the door and went into his first class.
This is great dude! Only thing I feel the need to comment on is to enlarge the title of the fic on your cover if possible, I can barley read it.
5545345 Thank you and I've just enlarged the title
MOAR!
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So far so good! I can't wait to read how this is going to turn out, I'll like and fav. Keep up your good work sir~
5545555 Thank you very much
5545506 Then you shall have MOAR!!!.....When the next chapter is up
I think I love this story! Keep going!
5547848 Thank you and will do
Good beginning! I liked your little references to the other guys' characters.
5548001 Thanks and the other guys' characters will be making more than a reference in the next chapter
Pretty good start (Soul, you lucky bastard), though I don't think it would be called Ponyville in the human world. I personally believe it would be called Canterlot since the school is Canterlot High.
5551449 Thanks Though while I do see your point, there are high schools that have other names besides the name of the town.
5552464 Well you can't call it Ponyville if the inhabitants aren't ponies. And Humanville sounds even stupider.
5552540 Point taken
5552546 Or even Tall-hairless-monkey-because-we're-not-allowed-to-say-the-word-"humans"-in-these-movies-for-some-reason-ville.
Well! Guess that answers where/when this takes place! LOLZ. This is pretty good so far! My mind is already thinking of the limitless possibilities this fanfic will go! ...I sound like Twilight don't I?
Sweet! This is just the kind of story I'm looking for! An OC freshman who develops a crush on one of the main characters! Love it!
You have my attention...
I think I speak for most everyone (or a select number that might agree with me), thank you from the bottom of my heart for NOT going the generic "HI IM ANON" route or the even worse "self-insertion". If one is going to make a fic for Anon, give him a name. I don't care if it's Dick McPooperson, just give him a damn name. Anon is not a name, it never has and never will. And the self insertion, for the love of God. IF it was an attempt at making you the reader the one in the story, it fails. Why? Because I myself wouldn't be acting the way that 90% of these stories go. Sometimes it works, otherwise...not so much.
But YOU BlueSun, you did the correct route by making an MLP fic that goes against the "norm" (if you can even call it that, more like a fucked up norm) and made a story I can actually get interested in. I applaud you now as I'm willing to bet I'll enjoy the rest of this story and the sequel. Kudos. Your story is a breath of fresh air, and for that I thank you.
6979246 I hate it when people use "Anon" AT THE VERY LEAST LEAVE A BLANK SPACE SO IT'S EASYER TO PUT YOUR OWN OC IN! SAYING ANON JUST JERKS YOU OUT OF THE STORY AND RUINS THE FLOW EVERYTIME YOU READ IT! But ya I don't have a big problem with OC's as long as their believible and don't outdo all the main cast and render them impitent. Lastly thank you for it just being a random sockerball rather than some horrible bully. It may still be clieche but it's at least not crindge worthy.
Drayce: Soul Writer huh? Hmm interesting
Finally, getting round to this one. Good start, let us begin!
The team name is the WonderCOLTS, with a C. As in the Indianapolis Colts
After nearly 5 years of this being out I just noticed this.
She played bass. After so long I noticed this. Holy shit.
THE SINNING, SHALL NOW COMMENCE.
(Mild spoilers for those who haven't read this and the sequel)
How anime can Soul get?
SINS: 1
Alot of things. Considering how many absurd things have happened in the past such as the Siren incident, I say there will always be something. That, or Treble.
SINS: 1
...Ehhhh. *PTSD's to Sun of My Heart 2*
SINS: 1
Yes, and that's the only time we're gonna hear this.
SINS: 1
Cliche soccer ball that triggers their first feelings for each other. I'd say the soccer ball was the true MVP of this story.
SINS: -3
NGGGGHHH
SINS: -1
You're in a room filled with delicate instruments that could break from your soccer practice. DO IT OUTSIDE LIKE A NORMAL PERSON.
SINS: 1
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SINS: 1
Ah yes, the butterflies in your stomach. Been there, done that. This made me feel like a highschool kid again falling inlove with someone I can't date.
But yes, this is accurate.
SINS: -1
Wait till you see how I'll bully you in the Wub reboot, which is a reboot of the reboot, which was rebooted because of how bad it was the first time and the story was going out of nowhere. Why am I even saying this? Removing a sin for getting sidetracked.
SINS: -1
TOTAL SINS: 0