All is normal in the land of Equestria. Twilight Sparkle has just learned her weekly lesson in friendship during a sleepover with Rainbow Dash. Applejack is having a bumper harvest, and Rarity has a few special requests to fill out. Until--!
A pony turns up dead, what looks to be suicide. Confusion ensues. Was it really suicide? Who is Rarity's mysterious special customer? I guess you'll have to read for yourself and find out!
AUTHOR'S NOTE: I could use an artist's work in creating a cover for this story!
Chapters (3)
Fuck, why do I do this to myself.
Sure I'll draw you some art!
What chu want?
The words "Fluttershy" and "Dead" in the same sentence never does sit well in my stomach.
541182 A picture of a rope noose next to the mare-do-well would do nicely. I think.
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Dicktits.
It may take a while...
541338 Fine with me.
I like this, I have always liked sad/depressing stories, although Fluttershy is my favorite pony
I can't wait to see how the story rolls out! I'll be watching
Although, one thing that bothered me. I don't know if this is your preference or not, but the most common way of spelling Sweety Belle is Sweetie Belle.
Just something that caught my eye while reading! Great chapter though.
541368 Since I'm new to writing ponyfics in particular, and I am not very self-confident, I must ask: How was the chapter? Did it seem rushed?
Nooooooooo!
Poor Flutters.
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Absolutely not! I like stories that start off with a big bang, and you can't get any bigger than someone killing themselves. It sets your story up for so many ideas and you can go almost anywhere with it. You did great with it! And don't worry about not being self-confident, I'm not very myself
Alright. I believe i can announce that chapter two should be out within a week. Also, i have my first follower! -Holds up sign to cue applause-
Well I certainly hope the killer isn't Trixie, because that would be way too obvious now.
Well I hope I don't disappoint you.
Not bad. Pretty intresting. Looking forward to more. Its so sad that Fluttershy died...
Something that caught my eye, not to be but picky but gaurd-guard
Just thought of point it out! I like the introduction of Trixie, interested to see how you use her!
Yeah, words like guard always tend to get me, and I still have to use the "I before E except after C" phrase.
And I think you'll quite like what I do with Trixie. I haven't gotten much writing done this weekend (You can thank some ponies on the site's chat for that) but I should have the next chapter out some time this week, unless of course my mom keeps me doing schoolwork till I get passing grades.
Seriously, all that matters to me is that I pass for the year.
But I digress. I'm sure you'll like what happens to Trixie in this fic. Not going to spoil it for you, though.
Interesting. This has, indeed, led me to some mental conclusions. I eagerly await seeing if I'm right (and I'm actually hoping I'm not).
I should like to know what you are thinking. Could you message me your idea of what's going on?
My genre saviness tells me the real killer is framing Trixie. Oh, and I expect to see that Sweetie Belle was murdered.
We shall see. Chapter four should be out some time within a week.
I'm cancelling the rest of this story so that I can work on a much better idea I came up with. If you still want to know the ending, here it is:
Big Mac dies in a fire at the orchard, Sweetie Belle dies later, Mare do Hell attacks Twilight, Trixie is coming to apologize to Twilight but finds that she needs help, she helps out, discover that it's really Rarity, yadda yadda yadda Trixie is the new element of Kindness. End story.