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sethbramwell


Don't be surprised... I'm a special education teacher, I hold a Master's degree, I'm an amateur voice actor/writer/audio play producer... and I'm a brony. ;-)

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"Doctor" Duke Beatz, Vinyl's DJ idol, is visiting his friend Neon Lights in Ponyville when he meets his admiring fan. Her reputation precedes her, and he shortly invites her to join him and Neon on an exciting new project... but how will this fantastic opportunity affect Vinyl... and Octavia, who is facing her own issues preparing for a command performance with the Equestrian Orchestra for Princess Luna? Between the Doctor and a very temperamental guest conductor, both musicians will have a lot to handle.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 13 )

Fort Coltins!? I hope that's a reference to Fort Collins, CO, because that's where I went to university! :pinkiegasp:

5444689 Indeed it is! Good eye! (I have way too much fun with horse puns)

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Do you have any connection to Ft. Collins, or was it just a random place you picked?

5444807 No, I just pulled up a list of cities in Colorado and looked for a name that I could make a horse pun from. There is, however, a reason why the good Doctor is from a place based on Colorado.

This story deserves more views. It's really good. :)
And I loved the extra bit with OCD Lyra lol.

I'm... intrigued by this fic. The lack of outright OctaScratch and a Romance tag is disappointing, but makes no real bearing on the quality of the fic. The writing itself is fairly good, though the formatting is a little sloppy and the paragraphs could either use more splitting up or better spacing. At this point in the story, it remains interesting, if not compelling outright.
In terms of the plot itself, things get a little more iffy. The characterization is fantastic, I especially love your Octavia, classy and mature without being a one-dimensional snob like all too many portray her as. On the other hand, the effects on Vinyl for her using feels extreme. Perhaps if we had gotten more of a 'street' description of the drug, rather than the clinical one, it would feel more appropriate, but the fact that we only know what Vinyl's using by its clinical name is telling. It gives less of a visceral reaction and honestly feels like it downplays the effects. While ODing on this thing might cause death, such is true with many medicines, let alone street drugs. Now, if we were told that this is something where ODs are common in causing death or various horrible things, then that changes things. As it is, it feels like the description of the drug has been put on the back burner to describe Vinyl's reaction.
Probably the only major point in the plot that I felt was outright poorly executed, however, was Twilight's inclusion. It felt rather forced, having Octavia introduced by the OC to Twilight rather than a more natural meeting. Honestly, instead of some strange reference to Lyra being apparently unstable, perhaps Twilight's role could be replaced with Lyra, who is traditionally displayed as a friend of Vinyl's.
While I enjoy the fact that Twilight is a character (see my profile pic), I can't help but feel that she is extraneous at best and is headed for a role as deus ex machina at worst.

Wait will there be more?! Please tell me there's going to be more! It can't end like this!!!

This has been a great little read, and I look forward to seeing how it all ends. :)

Hmm
I like how the main story's gone, but it feels like there are a few loose ends overall, at least in terms of some of the side characters. Even in these later chapters, some of the paragraphs have been pretty blocky and I wouldn't mind better line spacing, but this was an enjoyable fic and I'll be giving it an upvote.

I love this fanfic, but its saddening to me that it ended here :( but it was good :)

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