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The past is set in stone. Events unchangeable, but they lay the foundation of the future. All we really have is our choices, their consequents, and those that stand by us. Pinkie will rediscover her forgotten past and maybe regain something truly lost.

I do not own Ranma ½ or My Little Pony: Friendship is magic.

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“Ah, I see. As The Census was created to keep track of the births and unfortunately the deaths of all sentient beings in the world.”

I think you mean Sapient... if they were keeping track of everything sentient they'd need to keep track of Everything. theoretically possible with Magic, but overall a bit extreme even for an Anti-Discord countermeasure...

"Celestia let them absorb the info before continuing. “The Pies maintain the Ley-lines and grow their crop the remaining magic is magnified and spread through the Ley-lines. Some of the wild one can be of better quality but if you consistent hi standard of quality and quantity you go to the Pies.” Celestia smiled to herself. “Didn’t you mention an unicorn that managed to purchase a powerful artifact after working on a rock farm?”

Typos here.
Suggestions: "Celestia let them absorb the info before continuing. “The Pies maintain the Ley-lines and grow their crop. The remaining magic is magnified and spread through the Ley-lines. Some of the wild ones can be of better quality but if you want a consistent hi standard of quality and quantity you go to the Pies.” Celestia smiled to herself. “Didn’t you mention a unicorn that managed to purchase a powerful artifact after working on a rock farm?”

room and border

room and board

“The Pies our very generous employers,”

“The Pies are very generous employers,”

In return the Cakes receive a monthly stipend and any damages

Suggestion: In return the Cakes receive a monthly stipend and compensation for any damages

“As for the thing about her not being nobility, well before she married Rock Head she was Chancellor Pudding Pie.”

Consider rephrasing this sentence...? I had to re-read it a couple times to figure out that they weren't talking about Pinkie/Ranma.

Her face turn toward the floor

Her face turned toward the floor

As she played it back slower it came out as a more deeper and sensual voice than their friends:

As she played it back slower it came out as a deeper and more sensual voice than their friend's:

however, there is still business we must disgust.

however, there is still business we must discuss.

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What the worst that can happen?”

:facehoof:

*Bangs Head on Desk Repeatedly...*

Stupid, Stupid, Stupid Twilight. You should KNOW better by now than to say things like that. Especially around and about Pinkie. That's just Asking Murphy to come down on you with the wrath of a thousand whoopee cushions.

6610955 actually it needed to be sentient with all the things Discord was bringing to life. with a subsection for sapient.

thank you for the help. i can't believe i messed up room and board twice. and i actually had the discuss/disgust conversation with myself when i bought Disgust for Infinity just a few days ago.

ayh

The part with the dictionary was hilarious. Great job.

I cant believe I missed this for months. This has one of the more interesting crossovers with Ranma on this site, and I can't wait for a possible continuation.

"What's the worst that could happen?":twilightsheepish:

... :facehoof: Dangit Twilight!

Pinkie knows the Neko-Ken?

Pinkie knows the Neko-Ken?

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aww, one more time and you would have summoned it.

anyways i was wondering if any one would catch on to that, because that means i have a glaring plot hole in the the form of white furry demon named Opal. (smiles evilly) but, hey Pinkie's basically a Schrodinger's cat.

sorry for the delay family stuff back in Nov. hope to get next few chapters out by Aug., Sept. the latest.

p.s. i apologizes for what's to come.

This is...I’m confused. It jumps around so much and everything’s happening so fast. Add in the fact that in the same chapter you introduce three magical laws/concepts I’ve never seen before and change the background of a primary character...

I can’t read it. And as a Ranma fan, that’s really disappointing.

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the chapter title was to inform that it would be following the Cakes during this time while expanding on an earlier point. i'm sorry it confused you.

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I didn’t even reach chapter 5. That was 3. I was lost from the start, even knowing there was some memory wizardry going on. Still, I pushed on hoping for some clarification. I have an idea of what your doing but...its foggy. And I feel like I’m being attacked with information.

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Part of the problem is the distance between updates. There's currently a Lot going on in a short period of in-story time, but the distance between updates and brevity of the chapters make it harder to follow since it's almost being drip-fed to us, making it difficult to get an idea of the larger picture.

Chapter 4 is the first point where the scattered pieces in chapters 1-3 start to come together, and 5 brings more together while adding more questions hanging. I think I have an idea of what's going on, but I'll be keeping it to myself for now, partly because I could still be wrong and partly because typing out long speculation posts on my phone during my lunch break is a pain.

Slice of life is good. It helps world-build and keeps the pace of a story going between major scenes. In my last comment I pointed out that there's a lot going on currently in this story in a short period of in-story time, so I wouldn't necessarily consider this chapter to be Slice of Life, but it's definitely world building, which is good for tieing the scattered plot threads you're laying down together.

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