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After the "Crystal Sun" fiasco, Big Red and Cherry Jubilee are ready to move on with their lives. But an encounter with three young troublemakers changes everything. The troublemakers go to work on the cherry farm, and a new adventure begins...
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Te ending remenber me of frozen
I really like this story.
I have the strange feeling that Huckleberry will be punched in the face in a later chapter.
Cherry Jubilee has a tag, just so you know.
Big Red is looking like Kim Kaphwan right now
5481126 What do you mean by that?
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Trying to convert bad guys from god, didi you never play KOF?
5484955 No, can't say I have.
I think you meant "right to mah face" or "right ta mah face" Red has an accent similar to the Apples, at least that's what I've gotten out of reading all his speaking pieces.
The last part of the chapter was so much d'aww
It's not going to show how red and cherry start to date?
Poor White...nopony should suffer the way he did...
I sure hope that Eclipse warms up to Big Red soon.
I have a feeling that Eclipse, Huckleberry, and Globe are gonna end up fighting and Eclipse will run away.
two small mistakes I noticed
Shouldn't it be Cutie Mark or no Cutie Mark?
May instead of made
well, my guess from a few chapters ago was half right, they did have a fight.
I have a feeling that that griffin was eclipse's father.
God, I Love Globe. Reminds me of me....If I wasn't borderline emaciated.
Love the Good Will Hunting reference.
It's good to see that Eclipse is finally warming up to Big Red and his wife. I also find it sad that Red was born infantile.
New Prediction: Eclipse's father will come back for his kids.
5565177 Thanks, but I think the word you're looking for is "infertile."
I noticed the movie reference. I also noticed a few minor mistakes, your stores have quite a few errors that can easily be fixed. Maybe you should take a break from updating existing stories and writing new ones and spend some time fixing the little mistakes you've made in existing stories on the site, both that you find yourself and are pointed out by your readers. There is at least one story of yours I really want to read, but since you have the plural and singular of pegasus mixed up and use the wrong term a lot I can't bring myself to read it. Just a reminder pegasus is the singualr as in "she was a pegasus with white fur and a neon green mane" and pegasi is the plural as in "the three pegasi guards waited for him at the door", little stuff can build up to being one big thing so you have to take a break from what you're doing every once and a while and go back to fix your little errors, I would also recommend finding someone you trust and have them proofread or edit what you are working on and have worked on.
Your stories are fun reads, but there are only so many errors a reader is willing to overlook per chapter before they can't bring themself to read it again (I call it the "reader tolerance threshold", the limit of errors and mistakes the reader can deal with before the mistake they notice make it so they just can't continue to read story, and every reader has a different one).
5568421 infertility is a funny thing sometimes, I mean"funny odd" not "funny haha", in that it is sometimes temporary for some who are told tehy have it, and by that I've heard of some cases where someone was told they were infertile by a doctor one year and told they could bear children a few year later. So in a sense there's still hope for Red and Cherry to actually conceive a little bundle of joy.
If you ask me, Red should never have used that kind of reverse psychology when he departed from his friend Marshall (I ask you not to respond with the "former friend" response please), especially since the latter was drunk during his tirade.
And boy, Black sure does know how to push someone's buttons.
I have a feeling that it's going to be bad with Eclipse's father
RAAAH, don't let them be taken away red
Lunard
I knew it.
I know this is really late to be pointing out, but I've been busy with stuff and I've only read 5 chapters so far and... any who, I read your stories and I like how you try to bring out a country accent in a few of these characters... but some aren't a 100% accurate. Let's take a look at this line (not a spoiler others who may be reading this comment)
"I like to eat cherries. A lot," Big Red said.
I have a Texan accent, (Texan! Not country... well, I guess it's considered 'southern' but we got too much pride. We'd call ourselves Texan before we say southern) When I'm typing one of my characters say Applejack, Barn Raiser, Farm Hoof, or, heck, even my OC, I try to type the way I talk.
Let's look back at the earlier line and add how I talk to Big Red's speech.
"Ah, like ta ea' cherries. Alaw," Big Red said.
Here you may not see much of a difference, but what you write is... to be honest, don't know, probably the accent up in Kansas or something, in that case, keep doing what your doing, but if you ever want to go southern, try eliminating 'T's that would seem unnecessary or add 'D's.
Here are a few words that might explain what I'm trying to say: (left=normal, right=my accent.
Butter=Budder
Twilight=Twiligh'
About=Abou'
Rarity=Raridy
Basketball=Baske'ball
Hopefully this helped, if naw, then sorry fer wasding yer time.
5589396 Hmm, interesting. So, what do you think of the story so far?
5590270 Very interesting and well written. Can't wait to finally catch up.
Somehow I saw a a good chunk of the story coming.
um don't you mean you?
Huh just like Tom sawyer whitewashing the fence, except this time it's his best friend huckleberry Finn
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you....
And I have a feeling that when they do see each other one or both of them will be like
Alfalfatraz? O that is just great.
5569338 there's a special pill for it now but it's really expensive