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"Make a wish."
Rainbow Dash is presented with an opportunity to gain the skill she needs to join her idols, the Wonderbolts. However, the opportunity seems false, and she learns to accept it as such. But does that mean the wish was a lie? If not, then just whose wish is actually granted?
"You cannot hope to defeat me, dear Princess. Your Harmony lies broken!"
Note: This story began in July 2011, between Seasons One and Two. Show continuity has been considered, but due to constraints, the following canon is entirely ignored:
•Discord's reformation
•Twilight's ascension and coronation
•The wildlife of the Everfree Forest
•The relinquishment of the Elements of Harmony, the Tree of Harmony, and anything regarding the finale of Season Four
•All background characters that do not directly affect the plot (such as Shining Armor, Princess Cadence, Trixie, Snips, Snails, etc.)
Author: Leoshi. Co-Author: Cyros Lugoth. Featured on EQD, Star-5.
Additional tags: Adventure, Drama, Action, Dark, Thriller, Suspense, Struggle, Serious, A/U, Everypony, Rainbow Dash, Twilight Sparkle, Luna, Spitfire, OC
hmmmm
lets see where this goes
617656 I the great and powerful
well also stay to see what happens
Oh I saw this one in Equestria Daily!
Didn't read it though .... Will read now!
Ah, hell.
I was hoping to get first post for once! That's what I get for forgetting to check my email. Oh well, still happy to see this here! So much easier to track stories on FIMFiction, in my most humble opinion.
Oh, I LOVE this story. So glad to see it here!
I'll be spending the majority of tonight updating the story with the chapters-to-date. Expect chapters two through nine to be available before too long.
And for anyone who has followed from EQD or fanfiction, here's an update: chapter ten is very nearly completed. Cyros and I are estimating a release on the 23rd, but it could very well end up being the 21st instead. Stick with us, and we'll help you get a pony fix this summer.
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must...know...more
:D
yay updates updates UPDATES
618451 Sheesh, you read fast.
I'm nearly done with putting in the chapters. Sit tight a moment longer, and you'll have half of a full story to enjoy.
:D keep it up
Dunno how many times I've read this particular chapter, but I still find myself somewhat mesmerized by your description of the magic that's subsumed Rainbow Dash. I can practically visualize it, sometimes.
Jesus I was surprised when I saw eight more chapters
EDIT: Still haven't read the second chapter ,don't know how this comment got to chapter 9 lol
618736 Cyros tells me the same thing. Apparently, detail is my strength. It makes sense, I suppose, but that also means that conversations are my weakness, and THAT is most definitely the truth.
619871 Magic, that's how.
Ok, this story is pretty interesting, but certain things keep making me pull back from it. I don't think Rainbow's friends would ditch her that easily, and I don't think they would automatically assume she was a murderer. Like you mentioned, it was magic that killed the wonderbolts, and Dash is clearly incapable of such (being a pegasis and not a unicorn). I would have thought that Twilight at least would have gotten more into the investigation, if only to understand it better and help her friend. I know a lot of this is because you probably want to get to the real plot you have planned, but it just trips me up how easily everyone gives up on Dash, who is the element of Loyalty and would thus have the least legit reason for hurting her idols or her friends without being under the influence of some other malevolent force. Anywho, rant over, I shall continue reading now
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620187 Valid points. Allow me to address them:
Concerning Rainbow's friends ditching her: This wasn't up to them. Given the situation, they were not able to defend her name, while Spitfire openly blamed Rainbow for the deaths of her teammates. Over time, Spitfire's accusation became the accepted 'truth' for the residents of Equestria. Because Twilight and co. had no facts with which to counter-argue, nor could provide clues to Rainbow's whereabouts, they were left with no choice - they had to move on without her, under the guise that she was at fault.
Concerning Rainbow's friends assuming she's a murderer: This isn't actually touched on until chapter seven. In fact, only one pony (besides Spitfire) thinks Rainbow is guilty. The rest try their best to not have an opinion on it, because even thinking about it makes them sad. Applejack is the only one who will openly defend Rainbow Dash and still claim she's innocent of any wrongdoing.
Concerning the magic: This is discussed in chapter six, in quite a bit of detail. Remember, this is a thriller/mystery story, so not all the facts will be known from the start.
Concerning Twilight investigating: She did. She spent nearly a full month looking into the dilemma, but was unable to turn up anything useful. She eventually dropped the subject as time went on and other issues demanded her attention.
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Anyway, yes, please read on. You're bound to find some answers, but don't hesitate to raise any further questions.
Sweet Odin, that was freaking awesome. Gotta let the epic sink in, so as not to take it for granted.
Oh, saw just the one thing you might want to look at, here:
“A pony’s honor. You know, the difference between fillies and mares, guards and villagers, rulers and beggars. Where does it lay?”
The first part of your three comparisons on honor is backwards, I think. If you're setting them up as 'more honor -> less honor', I'd expect Mares would come before Fillies.
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628406 Hmm, you have a point. I never considered that line too much after I wrote it, especially since I wrote it over half a year ago. I'll take a look.
Wow. Spitfire's a bitch.
632915 Think so? I love how she turned out, personally. Don't forget all that she's lost - her bitchiness isn't unfounded.
this story intrigues me
655263 Glad to hear it. That has been one of my goals with this project.
this is cool bro
let go for even more :D
656163 Read on, brony, read on.
love the story, i must see more
656450 Be prepared to be taken for one hell of a ride. The best is yet to come. That I promise.
yes
looks good bro
Mushroom.
Good job. I can totally picture Rainbow Dash eating a mushroom. o_o
706991 Om nom nom.
Good thing Rainbow played Mario as a filly. She knows exactly what mushrooms are safe to eat.
YES its finaly on fimfiction
WOOO YEAH, ALL THE SEXI PONES.
ALSO i stand by my initial belief that suicide-as-drama is in NO WAY cliche'd or overdone. At all.
another chapter done
756011 Aye, I finally managed to get a response from the EQD folks. With any luck, I'll get the Googledoc links scrubbed, and go FIMfic-exclusive.
756292 Considering these ponies love their life and normally would not want to kill themselves...yeah!
756765 Only seven more to go.
Now that's a powerful friendship.
Now that Rainbow Dash is back then the Healing can begin, right ?
Also when is Rainbow Dash going to be meeting up with the older Scootaloo in your storyline ?
You did a great job balancing the royalty of the Princess of the Sun with a justified factor of being a ruler.
Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.
Rainbow Dash decides to seek forgiveness from the one mare she’s wronged the most - Spitfire, former captain of the ruined Wonderbolts.
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(Now, quiet! I'm trying to read
756820 It's magic!
Eeyup, her road to healing is underway, and the start was quite rough. But she can make it, as long as she has help along the way.
She'll encounter Scoot eventually.
But that's a later focus. Just relax and enjoy the ride.
Thank you! I was trying very hard to capture Celestia the mare, rather than the tried-and-true Celestia the Princess. I'm proud of how she turned out.
I sure will! Thanks a million.
756835 Bwahaha, cue the sweet rave music.
756928 Yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes yes ye-
OKAY WE GET IT YOU SHOULD READ NOW.
this had better not turn into a appledash fic
759420 While I support Appledash, I have no intentions of this turning into a romance story. No, AJ and Dashie are best friends, and nothing more.
If your concerns are from the end of chapter eleven, then just consider what Applejack is going through. That should clear up some worry.
758704 When the kingdom is threaten, send Twilight and friends. But when Luna gets hurt, the gloves come off and steel plated boots get put on!
765678 I would like to kindly say "HELL YEAH!"
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Though I must say: Is it me or has the story taken a slight sad turn?
Anyways love it and I am excited for the next chapter already
785055 You're not mistaken. This story comes in three acts, six chapters each. We're currently in act 2, "The Pariah", where much of the drama and mystery is revealed. It's also where nearly all of my "character abuse" takes place, though I can never bring myself to hurt them too much.
Act 3 will be arriving with chapter thirteen, and that's when answers will come and the real battle begins.
On a side note, chapter twelve is in-progress right now. I plan on releasing it very soon, then taking a small break while chapter thirteen is made. So you'll be able to see Spitfire soon, then you can chew over the latest development for a bit.
Woot for awesomeness! Bring on more chapters!
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822853 My friend, it will be my genuine pleasure.
822858
YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!