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Masterius


Very fortunate to live in Baltimare, Mareland.

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There exists between worlds a veil, one that cannot be parted under any circumstances.
Or can it?
One man's heartfelt yearning is granted when that veil is finally pierced, and his fondest wish bestowed, bittersweet though it may be.

Cover Art by Shieltar

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Over a month and not a single comment. ::sighs:: :unsuresweetie:

Jesus man. I have to say that you've put a lot of heart into this. How you described everything. How well you play words off of the other. I must say that this was truly a sight to behold. Not to mention this fic is very bittersweet and heart wrenching. I would dare say it could be considered a tragedy from how the ending played out. I would hope this is not your last venture in the Human in Equestria style of writing. I would perhaps like to see a romance written with either Luna or another pony of choice.

But that's besides the point. Very well done if I do say so myself.

A well written and extremely descriptive story. How the hell does this only have six upvotes?

I have no words for this that is how beautiful this is.

Beautiful

Where the fuck was this little piece hiding?

I gotta say, for something so short, I definitely couldn't help but lose myself in this.

I'm delighted Luna gets to hear the truth of her nights importance, but sad because of how it ends. . .

Truly, bittersweet.

Edit: If anything this little story hits closer to home than it honestly should. . . At least, for me.

To this, I clap my hands and say excellent work.

Excellent story, descriptions were a tad bombastic at moments but it adds to the poetic gestures and vivid imagery of the mind...well, it did for me at least.:eeyup:

This is simply amazing and I must agree with the others and stay you might want to look into writing a romance with human x Luna. But you know.....that is just my opinion.

I'm sorry I haven't read this sooner. Splendid one shot friend.

This is awesome! All I can say is that this is awesome!

To everyone that had favorited Through The Veil:

If I haven't personally written to you to thank you for doing so, I humbly apologize. I, well . . . I don't log on all that much anymore to check up on things, due to what I'd perceived as a lack of interest in my stories. Indeed, for Through The Veil it had been several months with very little activity.

So I was quite surprised to discover that people had been recently reading and, to my utter astonishment, commenting and favoriting Through The Veil! Well, surprised, and, quite honestly, extremely flattered and honored as well.

But because I haven't been logging on, and since I don't get email notifications of initial comments, etc., and because Fimfiction doesn't keep notifications overly long, I'm afraid that I've missed personally thanking quite a few of you that have favorited my story. I'm truly sorry for that, and humbly apologize.

Thank you again for the honor of your favorites!

~Masterius

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Thank you so very much for your kind words and comments. I really do not have words to express just how your words, and the ones of everyone else, have affected me; affected me enough that, well . . . yes, I'm now considering writing a HiE story involving Princess Luna, one that I've been imagining for quite some time. Again, thank you very much for your comments and support!


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Your comments, and the emotions behind them, have now made writing Through The Veil something that I'll always treasure and value. It both brought a smile to my face, as well as a lump to my throat, since I sense that you, too, understand deep inside what I was feeling when I wrote it.
And, yes, I perfectly agree that it was high time Princess Luna was told just what her Night meant to everyone, and everypony.

To everyone else that has commented:

I thank you, too, and treasure your words as well. I'm glad you've all enjoyed reading Through The Veil! And perhaps, just perhaps, it is time I picked up my "quill and parchment" and got back into writing once again.

~Masterius

p.s.: In the past, I have actually gotten two PMs about the story, asking me to clarify what, exactly, had happened. So, just in case . . .:

He was dying, and Princess Luna was only able to pierce the Veil and reach him because he was hovering on the precipice of an entirely different Veil: that between Life and Death. And, at the very end, she held him to her side until Death came and claimed him.

I hadn't seen anything quite like this before, and thought it was good. Keep writing - never give up, never surrender!

I have given this a thumb down and now I will explain why.

The idea was flawed, and the execution was predictable in my opinion.

Let's start with the idea, Luna needs someone to tell her that nights are for resting and days are for working that makes no sense to me. Luna is a thousand plus year old immortal I'm sure she has that figured out. The reason she went bad was because nightmare fed her jealousy of her sister until she snapped. Furthermore, what is the time frame of this story? Is it before nightmare moon or is it within the shows time line. That detail is important because without it we have no context for Luna's reaction, is this event going to help prevent the nightmare incident or just help her better understand how she could have avoided it. Lastly, why did you include humans, there was no need for them, and if their inclusion was just a personal choice (which is totally ok) there needs to be an AU tag.

Moving on to predictability, this is most likely on my part as I have read many stories with this set up. This whole scene was done very blandly in my opinion, The reactions by Luna and the human were just too obvious. Again, this is entirely from my perspective for someone new to these types of stories it was probably more interesting.

To close this all off, let me say this everything I pointed out is easily forgivable, in truth it all comes down to how I think of Luna being different from how you think of her. The technical side of this was average a few things here and there, but nothing that broke the story. I thumbed down your story because I did not like it all the reasons I gave are just justification for me disliking this story. Good try but a miss for me.

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I'd like to begin by thanking you for taking the time to explain why you downvoted the story. Few people do, which makes it depressing for an author as then we have no idea what, if anything, was/were the reason(s) why it was chosen for a downvote.

Having now said that, I'd like to address most of your observations.

Let's start with the idea, Luna needs someone to tell her that nights are for resting and days are for working that makes no sense to me. Luna is a thousand plus year old immortal I'm sure she has that figured out.

Let's just say that yes, she has figured it out for herself by now. Still, don't you think she would be grateful, flattered, honored and pleased to realize that someone else understands as well, without needing any prompting or explanation?
More to the point, that wasn't the focus of things. What was, was emphasizing that the Night is just as important, if not more so, than the Day, and that people and ponies really are aware of that, and grateful to her.

The reason she went bad was because nightmare fed her jealousy of her sister until she snapped.

This sounds like your own, personal headcanon. Resentment of her perceived lack of acceptance of her Night, and the resultant jealously of her sister because of the pleasure and delight ponies took in her Day is what transformed Princess Luna into Nightmare Moon. In fact, to directly quote: "The elder sister tried to reason with her, but the bitterness in the young one's heart had transformed her into a wicked mare of darkness: Nightmare Moon."

Furthermore, what is the time frame of this story? Is it before nightmare moon or is it within the shows time line. That detail is important because without it we have no context for Luna's reaction, is this event going to help prevent the nightmare incident or just help her better understand how she could have avoided it.

Ummm . . . seriously? The Book in this story is the same one that Twilight reads in the "Friendship Is Magic" episode that pilots MLP:FiM. Obviously, then, the time period is after Princess Luna's transformation into Nightmare Moon. Other than that, the time of this story would fit in any of the episodes following Nightmare Moon's redemption (which would be anything after season 1 episode 2).

Lastly, why did you include humans, there was no need for them, and if their inclusion was just a personal choice (which is totally ok) there needs to be an AU tag.

I included humans because, well . . . a human is involved. And because there is nothing about this story that alters anything canon in the MLP universe (for instance, gender changes, additional alicorns, etc.) I did not see a need to use that tag.

Again, thank you for the time to explain your choice of vote, and for commenting on the story.

~Masterius

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Thank you for addressing those issues it clears up alot for me. It does not make me like the story anymore than before, but it does give me confidence in your writing skills. I look forward to reading what you put out next.

My god, mate. That was absolutely beautiful.

“My Princess . . . oh My Princess of The Night . . . your night has never been shunned. It is a grand and glorious work of art that thrills and delights, soothes and calms, awes and inspires. Yes, we sleep through most of it. We need sleep to survive. The Day would be joyless and miserable without the sleep your Night permits. We yearn for the Night in a way that the Day will never experience.”

Wow. This is some fabulous writing, as I'm seeing from all of your pieces. And what ideas! Those are beautiful, absolutely beautiful. And the execution even more so.
If only someone had indeed said this to Luna. If only.

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Wow. This is some fabulous writing, as I'm seeing from all of your pieces. And what ideas! Those are beautiful, absolutely beautiful. And the execution even more so.

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Thank you so very much for your kind words!

If only someone had indeed said this to Luna. If only.

::sad, wistful sigh:: I totally agree. Luna is my favorite pony, and I’ve always sorrowed over how she is neglected and overlooked. She never asked for much, only to feel that her Night was loved, and she never once received that recognition. :twilightangry2:

That was great and it was sad.:fluttercry:

This is quite a beautiful interpretation of a brony explaining to Luna about the importance of the night. It's also sad to see the veil close, perhaps for eternity. Dooming them of never seeing each other again.

Although this is my take on this story, I'm curious as to what others think of it.

LUNA FOR PRESIDENT !!!!!!

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