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KrishnaKarnak


We didn't start the fire.

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Just because you're an orphan doesn't mean your holiday season has to suck. Rainbow Dash decides that, this year, it won't for her biggest fan and adoptive little sister, Scootaloo. And she gets their favourite Wonderbolt to help her give the filly the best Hearth's Warming ever.

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This was really cute, KK. Managed to include both SoarinDash and a nice bit of Scootalove in here. Perfect for this time of year. :pinkiehappy:

There was a noticeable sound of tape being pulled from a shag carpet as she freed herself.

AHHH that sounds so painful. Little kids do the darndest things, sometimes. :rainbowlaugh: Loved that bit of description.

Also liked the nice bit of bonding that took place between Soarin and Scootaloo in this. Pretty obvious that Soarin and Rainbow are going to get together at some point based on this context, so it's nice to see Scoot get to meet him. Seems like they'll get along just fine.

Only thing that I'll say in terms of "critique":

Shall I get Serviette to get you up early so you can wake her up?

Since Soarin's not really a very formal dude, I thought the word "Shall" at the beginning kind of didn't sound like him. Made the sentence read in a sort of English accent or something. :twilightsheepish: But that's like, the nitpickiest nitpick in all of nitpickdom, so don't worry 'bout it.

Other than that, no complaints, man. Thanks for writing this, and good luck with WRTMI, too! Merry Christmas!

~Arwhale

Beautifulness. Wait. Is that a word? Well it is now.
Pole licking competitition. Best way to spend Hearths Warming Eve. :rainbowlaugh:
This story was perfection

GAARGH, can't handle the adorableness!

5426666

Made the sentence read in a sort of English accent or something.

I do sorta... write Britishly, don't I? Although I write a weird Soarin, I suppose. I'll change it to should. He's a pretty nice bloke for a celebrity, goes out of his way to make Scoots smile :pinkiehappy:

Glad you enjoyed the descriptive bits. I had an alarmingly high amount of fun writing that first half, between the instances that were funny to write and the wrestling commentary duo of Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle.

5426773 Thanks! And with this all wrapped up, I can start reading through my fic backlog. I do believe I promised you a look-see.

Such a great story! At the end I had a huge smile. Hope you're doing well. Can't wait to read the next chapter of WRTMI

Very cute and sweet! Always like your Dash/Scoot stuff!

Very cute story and a nice read.:pinkiesmile:
I liked the little SoarinDash moment at the end there.:raritystarry:

5429438 thank you! I'm doing quite well lately!

5429487 Thanks for checking it out!

Hope to have more Dash/Scoots stuff soon, WRTMI or otherwise!


5430016 Glad you enjoyed the shipping!

Hmm not bad, I love me some Scootalove.

Dash pulled a bit of an oversight here. Not warning the orphanage Scoots would be spending the night else where.

Shame there isn't a continuation that explores this relationship more. Nice one-shot, though I would have liked to have seen more.

5898773 How do you know she didn't do that before she picked up Scootaloo

6159388 Unless the story itself states otherwise, it never happened. Anything else is down to interpretation. The casualness about just not going back to the orphanage to spend a night at a friend's house or RD's without so much as giving the orphanage a heads up on where she'll be staying for the night is what led to seeing Ponyville's orphanage as being pretty lax.

I've just realized that you haven't written/posted a story since last Christmas, what gives?

OK, i have just finished the story and my Faust was it uplifting but as a typical internet story reader I WANT MORE (just a bonus chapter if you don't mind).

6343927 writing was next to impossible for some time. Returned in the last few weeks, so so did I.

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