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WickedMind


Hollywood Undead and ponies? Is that even possible?

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The author finally builds up the courage to write a story.
It's going to be about Luna.
And the author.

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Comments ( 3 )

Every writer's had a conversation similar to this at some point in their life...

It's a cute idea. It started off pretty funny, but after a while it was pretty clear you were running out of things to write about. Over all, the only flaw that really bothered me was Luna's voice, or rather the lack of it. Luna in the show typically has a more formal tone. Some writers have her slip back into the 'thee's and 'thous'. But other than that, it was a very cute idea. One I don't see often on Fimfiction... Usually its in the other fandoms... :P

I always smile when a new dialogue-only story pops up! :pinkiehappy:

As for the story, well, you said it yourself multiple times that it's a rookie's effort. It works with a lot of meta humor, which in my opinion is more counter-productive than anything. However, I know why you did it like that. It's a (solid) excuse to have a mediocre debut. I did the same with my original works.

But you have the potential to do well with more writing. I'm not saying that out of kindness (because, to be honest, this is my first comment on a story in well over half a year), I do believe it. Maybe you can write a non-meta dialogue-only story at some point. I know that I would be looking forward to it!

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