What happens when a resupply mission goes wrong and a Heavy assault trooper of the New Conglomerate army is sucked through a worm hole and crash lands on a strange planet not knowing where he is or how to get home not even he knows what to expect and how will Princess twilight and her friends react to his sudden and strange arrival and what is in store for all of them for evil lurks in the darkness bent on revenge
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Nyx is the creation and property of Penstroke thanks for creating an amazing OC
This story contains elements of My roommate is a Vampire which is an original story by Dennis the Menace with his permission please support his release of such an amazing and hilarious story
Now edited by Eclipsemlp666
Has potential, good luck.
I like it u get a like and fav from me
Thanks this my first fic so this is my test run
5497712 thanks first time making a fic
You have got to get an editor or someone to proof read this. The severe lack of commas is starting to get out of hand and the spelling of some words is starting to grind on me. This does this to mets3.mm.bing.net/th?id=HN.608013867397615212&pid=1.7
5500891 I have one Eclipsemlp666 said he could edit it for me and sorry this thing does not come with a spell check option
made some spelling corrections and revision on some of chapter one It's not noticeable but its there
Yay?
That didn't feel anywhere near as good as I thought it would.cdn0.dailydot.com/uploaded/images/original/2012/5/20/Herc_is_Disappointed.gif
Chapter was good though. No complaints other than the spelling.
5541426 Don't worry after chapters 4 & 5 things will get action packed including a four chapter long war
5541614 In the beginning I was talking about the bragging rights for the first comment, not the story. This chapter was pretty good considering the fact that you didn't bring up some list out of nowhere and actually gave the character a reason to bring up the items in his inventory.
5541954 oh my bad ;)
5501008 I could also edit for you, since I happen to have quite a bit of spare time on my hands.(What am I doing with my life?!)
Edit:Just finished reading the third chapter and I noticed one thing: Your description says Heavy Assault, but V'than has a jetpack,
ReadmystoryIwantreaders
5549630 yes I know later in the story I will put a description on where he cross trained on how to use a jet pack to be more versatile similar to how real soldiers cross train in multiple fields of duty
5549630 P.S your Dalek explain video Hilarious
Please hurry with the nwxt chapter
5665588 dont worry its almost done just got a bit busy with college I have not forgotten u guys.
Honestly, so far. It's going very good. And I know school's been cracking down on you. Same here.
So, it's going well, could do a bit of fixing up with grammar. And is going a little fast-paced. And you might want to go a little more in-depth with a few of the conversations. Show a bit of emotion! (Not that it's not horrible or anything. I've seen tons of stuff come out of the chute that's worse than yours;even my first story is worse than this.) But I see much potential for this, keep on writing and you'll get there!
5774908 thanks I will endevor to make ot better
Aww, Hiatus?
5850516 yes pondering on how to make next chapter full of we wage war with out giving younger readers nightmares
5851086 But nightmares make them stronger!
5854509 ya know you are right
Hiatus until furthur notice do not woory I uave another story coming
5907093 Awww
6051791 dont worry like a phoenix it will rise with a vengence
I've had a story notification pinging on my profile for forever and I could never figure out what it was. I looked in my recently updated but nothing was there, so I started going through my library and then I get here and it's a canceled story.
Is it college still? Are you playing soggy biscut with ya boi Nasty Jack? Please, I must know, is this story truly dead?
6518303 it is college and I might consider bringing it back from the dead I will see what happens but probably not. I do however have a new story I working that I am certain will not die
Luna needs a fuckin stake to the heart.
I'm so gonna KILL her, and never forgive her after this!
To bad you canceled it. I really wanted to get Luna punished, or get her own ass kicked!
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Yeah I know I wasn’t the best writer then working on a new story right now The Wolf King check that out if you want
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One: I didn't say that your a "bad" writer. Your stories and writing is decent. I just want the stories to continue! Especially this one and your Star Trek Online crossover.
And Two: I'm not much of a fan to your Wolf King, compared to the other two.
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Oh no I wasn’t saying You said I was a bad writer, I was saying that when I made the stories I was a bad writer I was not trying to imply that you were saying I was a bad writer.
And That’s fair the wolf king isn’t for everyone but hey I’m glad you liked my two previous stories I’m gonna try and remake them as two different and better stories with the same settings but different characters but they’re gonna be better thought out better plan and better written I do hope when I write them you enjoy them
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Different?
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Like I’m going to re write them but the settings and overall narrative will changed a bit same with characters but I still hope you like them when I release them
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Ok.