Everyone would be together on Christmas, and I would be alone and abandoned. So I was pretty much back to square one.
This is an idea from Equestria Girls Holiday Special Comic and from a story I read in fimfiction by Final Sunlight.
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Is it finished already?
5411507 Yeah this was just a short story I wrote over the weekend
Wait, is that it?
Uhm... bit of grammar lacking? Honestly I couldn't tell what was Sunset writing and what was Twilight answering.
I mean... what the hell?
Prepare for a review.......
This story is messed up......
The intro starts with dialogue. I don't have a problem with that. It is unclear who started the conversation.
When the story starts in a P.O.V. it usually has the the character your writing the POV for it usually has tension or supsense for what the character is feeling. This story automatically starts with an argument. When the character argues the character must think or feel. Unless the character does not feel the story is messed up.
I have to add the fact that it rushed..
You could have started with a slow very detailed intro instead of starting with yelling. Also the dialogue doesn't say WHICH characterA is speaking.
Other than that this is a nice story
5412364 you have to read the comic to understand
5411937 Yes
Did Sunset Shimmer just kill herself now?!:(
5413935 what no
Can I have a url?
Uh the story shows they did have good reason to suspect her
Uhh, may I ask, how does this end. So she looks at her phone, spots RD's caller ID, and then black. Done. No more story. Is that actually how the story ends? Please say no and that there was just a fuck up somewhere along the way.
5432164 I have no idea why happened the whole Tory was up and then when I tried to fix it, it wouldn't work. I'm gonna keep trying to fix it. That is NOT the end of the story.
5432247 Sorry for the typos
5432247 Oh thank god. I thought that was actually the end. That was pissing me off there for a minute.
5432247 Do you have an account on Fanfiction.net? Maybe it will work there.
5506524 I don't but I am on wattpad and the completed story is there
5510055 Never heard of Wattpad.
5510131 It's basically the same thing as Fanfiction.com You write stories and people vote and comment
5510134 Is this going to be fixed or are you just gonna leave it the way it is? to be left forgotten?
5432247 So...Are you going to fix it at some point? Cause the word count is still there but the text isn't.
5510055
Could you provide us with a link to it then since this version seems to be broken.
So how do we read the rest?
Well this sucks. It was hyped up for nothing.
So can u give me a link to the rest because that sucks good story though (wish i could see the rest of it)
6494902
I agree
I managed to read the whole story on wattpad, and therefore, because I liked it, I will leave a like. But you should still try to get it fixed. Maybe try reposting it?
5510055 wat is ur watt pad account then because I'm sitting here waiting for it to fix plz I'm begging you ??
Sorry, I've had to downvote it until there is some way of reading the entire story.
I would like to read the rest...will you ever post it?
you know... you could just make another chapter with the rest of the story in it?
We need more!!!!
Update
Hell to the nope.
Try an contact Fimfiction to help fix the problem or if not make what is missing a new chapter please. Also your account Wattpad doesn't have this or any of your other stories on it.
Only That ? Not Will Have More ?