Faux Pas
Rarity froze. "What was that? I'm sorry darling I thought I heard you say your ex."
"Yes, that's what I said," Twilight answered breezily. "I actually went on a few dates with her while we were classmates at—wait, what's that supposed to mean."
Oops. Rarity stalled, hoping it wasn't too late to recover from the gaffe. "What ever do you mean, darling?" She flashed a brilliant smile as she said it to up the distraction factor.
Twilight gave her an annoyed look. "I have dated before Rarity. It's not like I was a total recluse."
"Oh I didn't mean to imply anything of the sort," Rarity assured her.
Twilight kept the look going but something in her expression shifted and Rarity saw a pang of hurt cross her friend's face. Guilt flooded her, and she knew that there was only one thing for a lady to do in this situation.
Lie.
"I simply hadn't realized you had any interest in mares that way," Rarity blurted in a desperate attempt to deflect the consequences of her ill-considered outburst. "You've never said anything about it, and as many of our friends are fillies I would have expected it to come up.
Twilight paused at that. Rarity kept the smile up and hoped Twilight would buy it.
Twilight flushed, and Rarity heaved an inward sigh of relief. "I mean, I've always liked colts more," Twilight stammered, "But she asked me out and she really did know things about magic I hadn't studied before and we had so much to talk about and—" Twilight blushed deeper, "She was hot."
Rarity relaxed and the smile became genuine. "Oh don't be embarrassed darling. There's nothing wrong with going out with somepony because you like their looks. Attraction has to start somewhere, after all."
Twilight returned the smile sheepishly. Rarity waited a tick, then added, "Though really darling, the magician? I'm positive I would have throttled her before the salad arrived."
Twilight giggled. "She was full of herself. But she was good at carrying the conversation even if it was mostly about herself, and that made it easier for me. And it was funny to watch."
Rarity sipped her tea. "I suppose I can see that. Did being Celestia's student at least discourage her from the "Anything you can do I can do better" routine?"
Twilight laughed. "That's what I liked most about her! She genuinely didn't care! Some ponies would try to hang out with me because I was Celestia's student. Later on even some of the guards tried to cozy up to me because of my brother. Trixie was so arrogant I don't think it ever even occurred to her that there could be somepony more important or more talented than her, student or otherwise!"
Twilight paused and sipped her own drink before adding, "Honestly, it was what convinced me to go through with it."
Rarity nodded. "Knowing that somepony really does want to be with you because they like you for who you are and nothing else is a wonderful thing," she said wistfully. Her voice trailed off as she said it and she looked slightly to the side. Twilight noticed the reaction.
"Oh?" she said slyly. "Is there a story there?"
Rarity blushed gracefully. "Oh, nothing. Water under the bridge."
"Come on Rarity," Twilight pressed. "I told you about my ex."
Rarity sighed dramatically, "Very well then. If you must know, Applejack and I had a dalliance one summer before you came to Ponyville."
Twilight choked on a hay fry. She fell back in her chair hacking and wheezing for breath. She shook with laughter the entire time. Rarity watched with an annoyed look while her friend got it out of her system. When Twilight subsided a bit and began wiping the tears from her eyes Rarity tried to huff, but she couldn't stop herself from smiling.
"Yes yes, we weren't what you might call the most orthodox couple," she said primly. "Really the whole thing was an ill-conceived disaster and it only lasted a few months. Still...I enjoyed it while it lasted."
She sounded a little sad as she said it. Twilight quieted down and waited. Rarity saw the reaction and smiled.
"We were a terrible match and Applejack knew it as well as anypony. That was why it made me so happy when she said she wanted to try."
Twilight looked curious. "Oh?"
"I...Twilight don't take this the wrong way, but there have been a lot of ponies who were only interested in me because of my looks. With Applejack I knew it wasn't like that. Even when we fought I knew she meant it when she said she liked me for who I was. She liked me, and she was stubborn enough to try and make the square pegs go into the round hole because of it. Because she thought I was worth trying to make the impossible work."
Twilight couldn't help herself. She cooed. "Aww. Rarity, that's so sweet."
Rarity chuckled. "Isn't it though? I'm simply glad we were able to remain friends afterward. Kissing her brother right in front of her to spite her that one time really was going much too far."
Twilight spat her drink out. Rarity flinched as some of it splashed across her face and gave Twilight a look as the other unicorn coughed on the bit that had gone down her throat. Rarity sighed and waited for her to finish. It took awhile, and when Twilight levitated a napkin to clean herself off it was as much for the tears in her eyes as the spit take, but eventually she settled down.
"Are you quite finished, darling?" Rarity asked. Twilight nodded. Rarity tried to think of something witty, then elected to simply change the subject.
"But wait. If you already knew Trixie why didn't she recognize you the first time she came to Ponyville?"
"I think the main thing Trixie remembers about our dates was how amazing Trixie was," Twilight said dryly.
Rarity couldn't help herself. She giggled. She raised a hoof to cover her mouth but then Twilight joined in and Rarity gave up on trying to hide it. Let the other diners look. It was only right that two of the most desirable mares in Ponyville should be the center of attention.
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This is pretty good. Have an upvote and fave good sir or madam
(Just as a note: it's spelled Exes, not Exs.)
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I didn't come up with the prompt.
"So are you now dating Spike?"
"What makes you say that Twilight dear?"
"Equestria's run out of other brothers, mothers , cousins other sisters room mates"
"He's such a handy gentle drake , My precious scales"
"So that a yes?"
To be nitpicky: there are a few commas that you should add here and there, since it helps break up the sentences a bit. Like,
The paragraphs could use an extra line in between them, but I guess that's just preference.
Content wise, great story! I enjoyed it
Definitely a good example of a slice of life..
5399996 I'm trying to get into the habit of using fewer commas and as a result I over compensate
5400170 Ah yes, sometimes I'm known to use more commas than needed.. I guess, again, that's personal preference. Carry on!
5400172
It seems to be a common tendency with people who are better than average at writing but not at the level of doing it professionally
5400186 Oh? I haven't heard that before; that's quite interesting. Have there been studies done on that?
5400196
No, just something I've noticed
5400208 I see. You must be quite observant, then. I never notice stuff like that..
5400293
Yeah, I'm pretty weirded out too. The last time this happened it was with a story I wrote in literally under an hour.
Always with the people crying over how the featured box doesn't love them as much as other people and blaming everyone else for it.
5400711
Well he is right
5400903
Yet so am I. ._. So far I've yet to see someone reasonable with an actual, well thought-out complaint. It's always just "Wow this is shit I guess the featured box is stupid!" with that air of 'My story didn't get into the feature box and I crave attention, time to go crap on everyone else's stories who made it!'
5401087
I dunno man, but if people don't want to read my erotic Walker: Texas Ranger/My Little Pony crossover fanfic then I have no idea why they'd like this one so much
5401183
You literally just said, "You said you're right and I don't agree, so you're wrong." Well, you just said I'm wrong and I don't agree, so you're wrong. We can do this all day, you didn't actually disprove anything I said, just gave your opinions and assumptions based on my observations. I'm not here to prove anything to you, and was not speaking to you. Therefore the onus of proof is not on me so I am not here to change your mind, but was rather stating conclusions from years of sifting through this community.
It seems you take issue with that. I would feel sorry, and apologize, but you felt the need to specifically target me when my comment itself was speaking in general - I targeted no one. If you feel offended, then you included yourself as one of the people I hold distaste for, without my specifically labeling you as such; that much is pure logic and thus irrefutable. If you do not feel offended, why are you responding in the defensive? Why are you responding at all? Especially to criticize a 'lack of evidence' that is not my burden to provide, when not providing evidence yourself but assumptions and opinions of your own, especially on what I said? (For that matter, how would one provide evidence on such an issue? Demanding that someone somehow retroactively save and produce every post of sheer whining and crap-flinging they've seen in this community over the years or they're somehow magically wrong is nonsensical and holds no weight.)
Do you realize what a waste of time you have wrought when no one was attacking you? You can wise up and not reply, or say whatever else you like to save face: I really don't care, I won't be reading it or replying further to create a more consistent issue in the comments of a story I happened to enjoy for what it was. If you feel that's a worthy use of your time, go right ahead.
5401183
SA, eat a snickers.
I find it funny that I'm the only one agreeing with him and up voting his posts.
I wrote a review of this story here.
5410488 You know, I didn't come up with the title
5411217
I did not, though I might have suspected. That foul fiend.
Hmmm... I've never really liked the idea of either of those ships but your ideas are intriguing as to why they might actually work. Have an upvote.
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Or not work in a spectacular manner
6022947 Point granted, though you make it seem like it could be feasible for any length of time while still admitting that they couldn't work out. Plus you did it in some thousand words which makes it all the more impressive really. It's why I dislike Sparity, our first crushes are important not because they could have worked (and for most everyone never could have) but because we grew from them falling apart. This story isn't really about that, but acknowledges moving post such adolescent fixations.
Wait, are Twilight and Rarity supposed to be in a relationship? O.o
6975734
Nope. Just friends chatting
6976654
Okay. The tag for the contest threw me. So I saw nothing in the text that wasn't there! :D
6977177 Well, friendshipping is a thing.
Well, that deserved PP's recommendation.
6984737 Why the hell do people keep liking and reviewing this story out of all things?
6985318 I have no idea.
You can has review!
Fuller review here, but in brief: I can't fault it for doing what it promises, and it's nicely written. I just wish there'd been more to it, to put the characters' present-day personalities into relief.
twilight dating trixie because she's too egotistic to give a damn about twi's status as a princess is adorable because it means trixie genuinely loves twilight for her personality instead of her title as a princess.