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After a crazy night, Spike wakes up to find that Twilight is now his assistant. The next day, Rarity has a crush on him. The next, Rainbow Dash wants to watch him do tricks. You get the idea.

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I wonder how long he has before he actually realizes what is going on.

Best idea ever! (This is an idea where people will say "Why didn't I think of that?")

Oh boy. This is going to be epic,:twilightoops::moustache::raritywink::pinkiegasp::yay::ajsmug::rainbowlaugh:

Hoo I can't wait to see how he react when rarity starts to crush on him

Interesting idea. Added to my tracking list.

A couple little typos, though.

“Uh, he thought, rolling over, “Another Monday morning... Wait, morning!?”

There should be a second set of quotation marks

“Oh, Twilight. I’m not going to send you away. Like you said, your my number one assistant.”

That should be "you're" rather than "your."

Well, she sure showed those nachos! :twilightsmile:... Not sure what she showed them, but she showed them!

I like it and I want to see more

On the first day of spike the author gave to me:
A drunk princess with some nachos!

Hmm.. Are you sure Twilight was just trying the alcohol? Because I've usually found that it's weed, LSD or similar that leads to arguing with food products.

And I once babysat a guy while he was trying datura. It was certainly interesting watching him lose a fight with his own underwear. I'm unsure how he managed it, but he got himself wrapped up in his tighty whities to the point where they had in him one hell of an arm lock. I had to cut him lose.

Can't wait to see more of this!

All Hail Drunk Twily!!! :twilightangry2:
P.S: I need MOAR!! I really liked this chapter!

A like and a fav, for this certainly needed to be done before! :moustache:

“She’s a little....intoxcimicated.” Pinkie whispered.

My father says stuff like that a lot.

Ohhh, this is going to be fun! :pinkiehappy:
Drunk Twilight, is a very funny Twilight!:moustache::twilightblush:

Okay. I think I know how this happen. You see, when an drunk Twilight was arguing with food, she was getting angry. Thus giving her more magic power. So, I'm guessing the fruit insult her magic ability to open portals. But Twilight though it said dimisions portal somehow. So when Spike swage his way to her she fire an spell that broke the awesom laws of time and space that change an few details. So the only solution is get this version of Twilight drunk again and hope she was as fun to fix this shit.:moustache:
Also, any arugement you have is invalid. Because I have an fez.

5410668 Thanks!:pinkiehappy:
Your is awesome too man..er dragon.:moustache:

You had me when twilight was under the table

I love this already!

On the second day of spike the author gave to me:
Two confused lovers
And a drunk princess with some nachos!

aileron princess

Barring the sudden existence of Princesses of various plane parts, I think you mean 'Alicorn'.

It would of been better to have a Mexican stand off . Two crushes unable to say or do anything. Just a lot of shuffling and blushing.

#1--"Hi Rarity":moustache:
#2-- "Hi My precious scales":raritywink:
#3--Repeat :moustache::raritywink::moustache::raritywink::moustache::raritywink::moustache::raritywink::moustache::raritywink::twilightoops:

Like shampoo instructions #1--#2--#3-- Over & Over. . . .

5468791 She has a seat belt. I'm sure she also has ailerons, an altimeter, landing gear, you name it.

Ooooooooooooooh

Poor Rarity, that had to hurt. Also it's Carousel Boutique, not Crystal Boutique.

Fortunately Rarity won't remember having her heart broken the next day. Unless he's actually switching universes.

This is an interesting story, but it definitely needs some proofreading. Have a friend do it, perhaps. Another set of eyes looking it over can help immensely.

Would have been nice to see the events your telling us about in that one paragraph.

“Twi, you’re an aileron princess

I'm... pretty sure she isn't.

Where did you get the icon for your avatar? Who is the pony in it?

5577362 What episode is your avatar from?

I feel sorry for Spike. After this one though, he should just ride out the last three days and have fun. That is what I would do.

Well, this justgets more and more confusing. Is Spike jumping realities? Sure seems like it. That means he really hurt Rarity in another reality, that's not good.

“Okay, okay. Hey, do you realize how much of our conversations are about events that happened the previous week.”

“I guess you’re right. It would suck to be somepony just following our conversation without knowing about the events we have been discussing.”

Oh, you! :rainbowlaugh:

:moustache: I put my claw into it this time didn't I?

:raritydespair: Get over her you stinking little lily livered lizard !

:ajsmug: Ah Rares that's supposed to be my line

:raritystarry: Sorry, He's my lizard

:twilightoops: My assistant

:derpytongue2: My bad

Okay, this needs to continue... I have got to know how everything goes in this story.

This is why I never drink.

He needs to find Celestia and Luna!!! Stat!!!!

Not a bad idea for a story, but does have lots of grammar and a few spelling errors. Also there is a lack of descriptions on everything. Still reading, though.

I don't get why they were so scared... I guess it just wasn't portrayed well enough, which is what happens when dialogue lacks narrative descriptions.

That's getting a sense of perspective in an entirely new way. I like the idea, but I think you're kinda rushing through it. That first chapter about his day with Twilight could have used a bit more elaboration. Instead, it just kinda passes it over completely. The other two are a little better about it, but not much. It's all distinctly a bit too short for what you could be doing with it.

And little did he know he just passed up a chance to date her

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"A Dog and Pony Show", when Spike pretends to be a knight to save Rarity from the Diamond Dogs.

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