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Midnight Ice Cream


I come from UK. Recently I've had the pleasure of enjoying MLP and figured that it would be a good idea to create an account here and give writing fanfiction a pop.

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Urgh, dullery, after dullery after dullery. Does it matter that Honeycomb is cheating on her sister's best friend cousin's boyfriend?
Certainly not in the mind of Octavia Melody. the annoyed cellist caught up in a school, she simply hasn't the time for.
Look Midnight, I can do my own intro
Sorry...
Well you've put me off now. Yes where was I? So recently, like I've said life is really really dull. But perhaps, just perhaps, it might be looking up for me. Earlier the new Girl, the white unicorn with the dodgy specs, and the dodgy headphones, and dodgy tastes in music, arrived in my music hall. We had a nice chat, and not to be presumptuous, but I think I've made a new friend. Result!

Okay you've got the premise out of the way. May I please do the tags, and the technical stuff?
But of course, that's your line of work, you're the writer. I'm just the protagonist. I'm not really sure what I'm doing in this part to begin with.
*sigh* Neither do I.
Thank you Octavia


There will be no explicit content here. Although it will be heavily referenced, so you'll know about it if it happens. I'd just rather not write that stuff.
Honestly, dirty minded Midnight. Oh wait...
Look it's essential to the plot. But yes, for an asexual, I'm pretty dirty minded.
Asexual?
Nevermind Octavia.
I hope you all enjoy reading this as much as I enjoyed writing it.
Source to Cover Art: Here

All chapters post chapter 4 have been kindly edited by the wonderful Forgotten Existance

Chapters (9)
Comments ( 129 )

I'm not much of an Octascratch fan, but what the heck, might as well give it a try.

This is... really, well-written. Although, I had trouble detecting who the perspective was from at the beginning.
I can really relate to the line "To be honest I don’t have much cause for complaint in my life. I assure you I’ve got two loving parents, a nice house in Canterlot, a superb education. So really, all I’m doing is complaining about nothing."
Good job, dude! I look forward to more of your literature. :twilightsmile:

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Good point, I shall have to figure out how to identify the character in future. My reckoning is putting in a fourth wall breaking scene, like "Oh I'm so sorry, I'm Octavia, nice to meet you." somewhere in a first para.

Still I'm so glad you liked it. Looking at my notifications this morning, seeing so much positive feedback in so little time, is really encouraging.

sorry if it should sound bad, but i want to ask. Does anyone know a Vinyl and Octavia fanfiction, where they don´t only try to have sex or a romance fanfiction between them, without a sex crazed Vinyl? I just get the feeling that Vinyl have to be after sex or a pervert in every fanfiction.

I don´t speak about this fanfiction, i have not read it yet, i only saw a sex tag again (it is probably a clop-fic i don´t know), and i wanted to ask you guy for a good fanfiction between them.

Comment posted by Midnight Ice Cream deleted Dec 18th, 2014

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While it's true that you rarely get non romance fics between Vinyl and Octavia, and while my story is no exception. I'm sure they must be somewhere. However you can normally avoid the sex scenes, by not looking at anything mature.

And no I will not write clop. Nothing against those who do, or those who read it. But as an asexual, it's bloody hard to pull off, for starters. At one point I tried to write a sex scene. It was probably the hardest writing exercise I've ever tried, and I failed horribly.

5397862 well maybe then i start to read this one too, if it is not meant as a clopfic, then it can´t be as bad as i thought it maybe could be.

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Well then, I sincerely hope you enjoy it then.

I think it's quite good as it is right now. It's not slow by any means but it's not that fast either, you are telling a good amount of story in each chapter without being too short nor too slow and unapealing.
Loving it so far! :scootangel:

You should just be worried at how huggable you are.”

That, right there, is exactly what Octavia needs to be for the rest of her life. Romanticizm doesn't mean squat next to huggability. And honestly, I wouldn't mind you keeping it at this level of absolutely adorable friendshipping for at least a few more chapters.

Also,

“Octavia Melody! I want an explanation now! And it had better be a bloody good one!”

Homophobic bear-mom?

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Many thanks, so glad you're enjoying it. Perhaps my cynicism for this chapter was founded on fatigue. And having read over it again, I must say I question where it comes from. I quite liked my work there.

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Yes I agree absolutely with your first statement, I think hugs are so much more adorable than some romanticy stuff. In my own romantic experience (which was ill fated and short lived) the best part was easily the huggy stuff. I personally find anything far beyond that boring, and just meh, or sometimes actually repulsive. You have my word that this will be reflected in my writing.

And as for you question regarding Octavia's mother. I must refer you to the former fictional Prime Minister Francis Urquhart.

If all goes to plan, this should be revealed very soon. Perhaps even today. Although I cannot promise anything there. Certainly within the next few days. Due to the Christmas holidays I'm able to devote a lot of time to writing, which I am very much grateful for.

I can't wait!!! For chapter 3

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Oh don't worry about that. It's on it's way.

Oh snap! That ending! :pinkiegasp: I can't wait for the next chapter, so please continue.

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I should have it in the next couple of days. I've been meaning to get more writing done but the festivities have been exhausting to say the least.

5427417 well hope you had a good festive holiday!

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I had a superb holiday, it was great to see my family. I must admit, it feels strange to see my cousins who are little girls have the same interest as me, and end up with simmilar gifts.

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Ooh, ooh, there's a really good demisexual Octavia one in which Vinyl isn't pushy or pervy! I believe it's called "The Gray Cellist"! I think it's on here, I know for sure it's on fanfiction. :3 If you were still interested xD

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That sounds rather interesting, will have to check it out. I've been trying to read more OctaScratch since writing. I find it amazing how diverse Octavia's character is, and how Vinyl is normally the same thing. So it would be good to get a change.

Continue that midnight :twilightsmile:


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Sadly "The grey Cellist" won't be complete ever as far as I can tell:ajsleepy:

5435079 thank you, i found it and make sure i start to read it today:pinkiehappy:

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Shame. Pondering if or not to read. Probably will at some point.

Hrmm but what if Vinyl was the asexual one? And Octavia was sexually aggressive? Would that be out of character, or would it be a good idea?

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I think mostly everypony is overreacting with that out of character nonsense
Who says Vinyl can't be calm and nice?
Who says Octavia can't show aggressive sexual behaviour?^^
I think they can do everything (besides the things Canon made clear)

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Good point. Those sound like very interesting ideas, would make a change.

Still, that will not change my interpretation of Octavia here. But it could be an interesting idea for the future, should I decide to revisit these characters.

This is why I hate rich people, their priorities all in the wrong spots!!!

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I suppose when you're in that kind of culture, one must be ruthless to maintain one's wealth, and to one up the next person. Honestly, I don't know why they bother, it doesn't seem to bring them any happiness.

My uncle is a rich man. He says that the area that he lives in has no community spirit. All the social events at places like golf clubs, are all just bankers talking about money. Poor people, I'd hate to be one. Granted I'd appreciate a few more creature comforts, but I don't wanna marry Filthy Rich!

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I know that feeling. I worked for the wealthy :twilightangry2:

But I should have said I like your story a lot, and I think you are doing a bang up job!!! :scootangel:

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What was that like? What did you do? It may not have been pleasant, but I'm sure it was damn interesting.

I'm so glad you're enjoying my story. :pinkiehappy: I've never written anything with any feedback before, so knowing people like my work is really encouraging.

Excuse me for asking, but who is your editor? I noticed quite a few bits out of place, especially this line:

These complaints originate with your mother, not. However, I think she has a point.

I couldn't get my mind of that "not", just wondering what it was doing there. And there are plenty of holes in the story, but you make up for it in length and depth. (no pun intended)
And is it just me, or did you change the name of this rich guy? I normally have to read back on my stories to remember the names of side characters.
Aside from that nonsense, this is actually a pretty good story and I can't wait for more!


Well, I looked it over, and in Chapter 3: Triumph to Oblivion, it mentions

You know you’d make a great couple with Filthy Rich, the son of Mighty Rich.

And in this chapter, you said it was "Master Rich." Now, I do realize you could mean it as an adjective, but I was confused by it. Please consider revising, and I kindly ask that you tell me what you meant by it.

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Well I have been my own editor, although with the latest chapter I've had some wonderful help from Forgotten Existance. So I imagine there will have been a few that I've missed. Especially before she gave me a helping hoof.

What holes did you find in the story? I get really annoyed if I contradict a previous mention, but quite often I do without realising it.

As for the Riches. Mighty Rich is the dad, and Filthy Rich is the son. But Octavia's dad is calling him Master Rich out of etiquette. I believe one is meant to write the Master with a large M, although I could be mistaken in that respect.

Thanks very much for the criticism, it really helps a lot.

Comment posted by ForgottenExistance deleted Jan 16th, 2015

5507314 We've experienced a slight problem with updating the page with the things that got changed, so that would explain why it's still like that. But once we figure out the problem, we should be able to have all the edits up ^^

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Thank you for responding to my comment. As for the holes, it's not that your story contradicts itself, its the show. I find that, in Episode 1 (& 2?), nobody remembers the myth of nightmare moon (or at least don't believe it to be true). Yet, they still have Nightmare Night, which is shown later. As well, you mentioned that...

Celestia used Nightmare Moon as an excuse to get rid of her Sister,

...as a possible conspiracy theory, when in Episode 2, at about 19:50, Celestia mentions that Luna is her sister, the mane 6 seem shocked, so it's likely not common knowledge that they're related to begin with. This is a rather debatable topic, and I don't expect any change, but I recommend somepony look over it for any other possible holes.


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Thank you for looking it over. :twilightsmile: Your combined efforts are much appreciated.

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Pleasure, constructive criticism is always welcome.

Hrmmm compelling point. If anything I just used this as a device to date the story, probably at some point during the 1980s (or the FiM equivalent). But perhaps a student of history would know of Nightmare Moon? And although not a commonly known fact, it might be one of those things some poines have some vague idea of.

As for the sister thing, I didn't notice that in the show.

I'll give this some serious thought. If you'd like to help me out, and offer suggestions with this kind of thing, you'd be more than welcome. But as it is I have to give you a great thanks for the criticism.

There we are, I think that's now got the corrected version up.

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That's such a relief to hear. Most people would find a hole in my criticism, or just blatantly tell me I'm wrong even if I do make a good point. You're open mind and unique writing skills are much appreciated. :twilightsmile:

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Well who am I to ignore any advice or constructive criticism?

If someone doesn't like my work, I still very much appreciate their opinion on it. Still, so glad that you're enjoying it.:twilightsheepish:

yeah. I can feel the love in this house.. :facehoof:

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Well of course there is a love of formality.

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Well I'm glad it's getting that response. It means that I did my job right.

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LOL I do like this story a lot

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So glad you do. I love writing it.

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then stop chatting with me and give more to read! LOL

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I think a chapter a week is sufficient. I could probably do more some weeks, but I feel as if consistency is key.

I like to be able to give something I can deliver on a regular basis.

However you may be in luck, I might be starting a new story soon.

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Well if you need any Help send me a note!! I am good with ideas LOL

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