You may think of me as an ordinary snuggly teddy bear with an army costume when that is untrue, I am actually a robot sent back in time to kill Sarah Connor.
This is a story that is about Dr. Whooves on his quest to go on a date with Derpy Hooves.
The story is written like Dr. Whooves is writing in a diary, yet the third chapter isn't.
Rated T for sexual references and I think a few swear words.
This is my first fimfiction and I just wanted to say, don't be all that hateful.
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5395872
I didn't know that it had been done already, sorry.
5395872 dude that was a little harsh don't you think
5395872
Well, I hope you go around telling every new writer this. Every story on this site has probably been done to death in some way, shape or form, so don't go around flapping your jaw unless you're also planning to do it on every shipfic that isn't using an original coupling that no one's tried before.
Also, and this is just me, but maybe try and have a few OWN STORIES written before you go and bash someone else's work. At least this user has a story out, whereas looking at your profile I can't find a single written chapter so far, so maybe dial back on the criticism a little, would ya? Oh, and when you do put something out there, please, make sure it's a completely original idea that has never been done at any single point, and you'll see how easy it is.
You'd asked for a critique. Here's mine:
The Doctor in your story is simplistic, puerile, and terse.
I don't know if you've EVER watched Doctor Who, but this is NOT his character in ANY incarnation.
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I love Doctor Who, specifically David Tennant.
I never meant to go by lore, I just wanted to make a fun story.
its short and sweet seems like how he would write in it I love it!
I hope u don't mind but I drew on your face... I apologize
the doctors slow descendent to madness...im cool with that. also when he ask if the diary could talk I started saying : NO TALK TO ME! don't worry doctor your not the only one going crazy!
Cute and sweet
put a smile on my face
Good job
I really liked it! It was sweet and cute! <3
I like the writing style but I would like a bit more context
WTF that was way too fast. WTF stranded for what the fairy lollipops I'm not sure if I'm allowed to swear on here.