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I can't belive I wrote this :pinkiesmile:

This is bad, it's like the sex scenes were either written by an alien who's understanding of sex comes from watching Animal Planet and Dude Where's my Car? or it was written by the people who write biology text books. I will say this I did laugh so hard I also shat myself, so there's that. :rainbowlaugh:


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Peace Out.

520456 what are you doing here :ajbemused:

the fic was ok
not the best, but not the worst
felt rushed
really really rushed
in light of this not so nice comment i shall give you a funny gif
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you only get one


They hated that old man so much they shot him through my family.

The world went crazy on a summer's day in central park, back in the day before Uzis and Berretas, before nine millimetere popguns ruled the streets.

It was a thompson, like the ones our father's carried, and I recognized it's rattling even as it's big, man stopping forty fives punched blood and breath from my lungs.

I hit the ground beside my daugher. she'd been gutshot; badly, and when she saw the things that boiled and wriggled from her belly, the expression on her face was not that of a little girls.

My wife bled out later on the operating table, her heart a gaple hole her life drained through. Whenever I get careless that yearning in her eyes creeps up on me and brings me to my knees.

Right then the old man's enforcer's started shooting back. My son dropped wordlessly, not a mark on him.

I took a breath that cut like glass, spat blood, rose to my knees, picked up the boy and searched in vain for entry wounds.

The bullet had entered through his open mouth.

That was our day in the park.



And now.



Every night.



I go out and make the world sane...

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520568

Holy shit, why would anyone in their right mind do that? :raritydespair:

An important (and somewhat tricky) concept for many authors to apply to their stores is "Show, don't tell". What you've done is really all 'telling.' It's a long list of things that happen. There no emotional connection to any of it. It's a grocery list.

...But, I think in this case you shouldn't try showing either, especially when what you're showing is about as dry and unpalatable as a stale breadstick.

Also, it's: “Wow, this is nice,” said Shining Armor. Punctuation is your friend, so please use it.

this is a really good idea but you need to give this piece a through clean up. First and most important you need to pick a tense and stick with it. you bounce between past, present, present progressive, and present perfect lie fifty times and for no reason. this really makes it difficult to read. Also you do a lot of telling the audience what you are talking about but you need to show what is happening instead. spend more time on descriptions of the setting, descriptions of the characters thoughts and moods, use more language to describe the sex (this is a clop-fic after all ), and really let us know what would be like to be in both Cadance and Shining Armor's hooves when all this is going down. You have a good start and I think that with a good hard editing this can really shine as a fic!

Quite a few spelling mistakes. Make it a bit more detailed and it would be better. Otherwise it's pretty good

TOO soon too soon.:duck:

520456 THAT IS ONE OF THE BEST GIFS I EVER SEEN IN MY LIFE ! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::twilightblush:

Lots of spelling and grammar mistakes, try to at least mention the plot theme (they don't really seem all that stressed from the wedding to me), and work on making it more emotional. Don't just say she's happy, SHOW she's happy.

"Cadence was pleasured with her lover." to
"Cadence's breath fluttered with pleasure at her lover."

Same basic message and you can slip it in the same area like this

"Cadence was pleased with her lover as he slid down her body, kissing and nuzzling her soft underbelly on the way down to her soft, moist flesh aching between her thighs."

"Cadence's breath fluttered with pleasure at her lover as he slid down her body, kissing and nuzzling her soft underbelly on the way down to her soft, moist flesh aching between her thighs."

Try to write that there is an action or detail that displays the characteristics of an emotion rather than simply stating that the emotion is present.

Not trying to show you up or anything but that's roughly how I would have written the whole thing.

also, Cadence is pink with purple tipped wing feathers if I remember correctly

P.S. I gave you a thumbs up but no favoring from me until you work on your writing style a bit.

527167you're welcome bro/sis/whatever it is thats you call yourself

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great fic brony:pinkiehappy:

Sorry, but this one sucks. It's too damned short, and the story is too nondescript. BLARGH! MAKE IT BETTER NAO! :flutterrage:

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